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Barbara Ramirez
Oscar E. Martinez
ENGL 1302-217
14 April 2024
Throughout this reflection I will give some of the most important events in my learning
that I managed to achieve throughout the writing process of my Position Essay. I really managed
to understand several points that I could improve to give my audience a better explanation of
each of my points, always providing evidence of each of the points I was going to discuss and
adding how that evidence supported my position. In favor of parents setting a limit on the time
During these last four weeks, the process of writing this last paper became much easier
for me, since we had previously done two essays and various assignments in class that helped me
to be knowledgeable about the sources I was going to choose to support my position on the topic
that I discussed. The annotated bibliography helped me know what each of the sources I had
initially intended to help me collect information/evidence for my points discussed, then by doing
the literary review I was able to see how these sources I had were connected to each other and
also which sources had different ideas. Doing research before making the final product like this
Position Essay helped me become more expert and aware of what I wanted to communicate
without confusing the audience of the main point I wanted to discuss. Going by steps until
reaching a final product can be applied in other classes in which I need to be informed about a
topic. For example, in an upcoming science class I may be investigating the reason for some
illness and the disadvantage in the development of a person's life, and to complete this work I
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should investigate several sources that help me write down each one of the things that I consider
important and relevant to my work. In this way of small but important steps I will achieve
The previous work I did in my research analysis helped me to be more informed about
the content of each of the sources that I was going to implement in my position essay. With these
analyzes I had a point from which to start with this latest work and not be blank or without an
idea of what I wanted to communicate. For example, to write my position essay I already knew
that Khan's source talked about children's addiction to certain electronic devices, with this
information I already had my paragraph covered about how cell phones and the addiction that
children have to them harms them in several ways explained in my position essay.
The work of doing research prior to my research and writing points helped me to be
clearer about the ideas and message I wanted to give to my audience. I consider that doing this
"extra" work helped me to have a more complete paper with articles that were peer reviewed and
that contained information that helped me. I can easily apply this in other courses because I will
always require reliable and truthful sources for my work in the future. Doing research on other
people's works means that my final paper has evidence that supports my points of view and that
Since ENGL 1301 and now in ENGL 1302 I have realized how beneficial group
conferences are, since with these I can be able to see how others see and understand my work
and especially the advice that others can give me to improve the way in which I express my
ideas. In the last meeting we had I was able to make several changes, mainly I can highlight that
my classmates and instructor noticed that I could improve my topic sentences. They also
mentioned to me that I needed a little more evidence in certain parts of my writing. In addition,
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thanks to the conference I had a clearer idea of how to make the point of my counterargument.
Also later in class I had the opportunity for my instructor to see how I had that paragraph about
my counterargument and then he recommended that I did not attack the source that much with
my point, but rather that I give it a little more introduction to the point of view different from
mine. With these tips in mind, I improved my topic sentences by making them more complete
and with a controversial tone of the discussed topic, and to my paragraphs I added more evidence
and introduction to the authors of those who I used evidence from their articles.
During the peer review, thanks to Andrea F. I was able to make a few more changes to a
new paragraph that I had added to my position essay. I rewrote my topic sentence and the one
that followed it so that they sounded more connected to the idea I wanted to convey in that
paragraph, and he also suggested that I add more evidence of numbers and statistics in my
paragraphs, so that my audience understood how big the topic was. problem in society and also
in children.
The most challenging thing about this last essay was maintaining a controversial and
strong tone for my point of view, since I had not done an assignment like this in which I needed
to talk about something so controversial that others had to debate my points. The difficult thing
about the topic I chose was that there were not many sources that were in favor of children using
cell phones or technological devices at such a young age, so my resources for my counter
argument were limited. However, I managed to get a source to help me with that part of my
essay. And I also managed to improve the points in which my classmates, instructor and tutor
The experience I had during this semester will be of great benefit for my future and my
next classes. There are still details that I have to improve based on my writing, but I consider that
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I am on the right track so I will only continue to improve my writing style and I will remain firm