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By Mrs. Milis
“Get out of here,” Marco protested.
For example:
Showing:
She's so happy, this girl,
she's sending out sparks
like a brush fire,
so lit with life
her eyes could beam
airplanes through fog,
so warm with his loving
we could blacken our
toast
on her forehead.
Yet Another Example
Telling: The coffee was enjoyable.
Showing: She cradled the mug in both hands and
leaned her head over it in the rising steam. Pursing
her lips, she blew softly over the clouded surface and
let her eyelids drop. Her shoulders rose slightly as
she breathed in, and she hummed with her head low.
I lifted the tiny porcelain pitcher and poured a brief
rotating arch of white into the black depths of my
own cup. She opened her eyes, and we looked at
each other across the table without speaking.
You try…
I am nervous. (Haiqal’s group)
It was a day unlike any other day. (Haiqal’s
group)
The sunset was surreal. (Danial’s group)
The pizza was delicious. (Azim’s group)
The coffee was enjoyable. (Azim’s group)
He is angry. (Danial’s group)
Mr. Schmitt is a nice man. (Adlin’s group)
I lost my iPhone in the bus. (Adlin’s group)
Writer use the following
techniques to Show Not Tell.
Dialogue
Figurative Language
Sensory Language
Snapshot
Thoughtshot: Flashforward, Flashback,
Brain Argument
Exploding the Moment
Using Dialogue to Show Not Tell:
http://teenwriting.about.com/cs/
dialogue/ht/DialogueWork.htm
Look at pink sheet during explanation.
Brain Argument: the character debates whether you should do one thing
or another and consider the pros and cons of both courses of action.
Thoughtshot
Unpacking even just a few things in her
brown suitcase, always seemeda waste
of time to Gilly. She never knew if she'd
be in a place long enough to make it
worth the bother. And yet it was
something to fill the time.