SILENT READING for 10 minutes

Homework Check
Hold up your first drafts
 Imaginative Writing

Lesson 9: Setting, and responding to,

targets to improve creative writing
 Describe this dog in three
sentences. Use three powerful
adjectives and adverbs.
Examples:
Depressively
solitary
Jovially
Jubilantly
Isolated/abandoned
Famished
Fatigued
Dehydrated
Breathless 5
Pitiable minute
Amiable s- alone
 Describe this dog in three
sentences. Use three powerful
adjectives and adverbs.

Now listen to your

partner’s description.
Does s/he use
powerful adjectives
and adverbs?
 Super sentences
• Look over the draft you produced during our
last lesson and finished for homework.
• Highlight what is, in your opinion, the best
sentence you have written.
• Catch the beanbag to share it with the class.
• I will feed back to you one good thing I spot
about your sentence.
Extension: Can anybody beat me by adding an additional
piece of feedback after I have spoken? Raise your hand if
so!
 Peer-assessment
Work with your partner.

• Use the task sheet, marking codes and dictionaries to

assess one piece of writing together; you need to
give it a level.
• Divide up to assess the rest of the group’s work.
• Give one another 2 what went wells and 2 even
better ifs
SILENT READING for 10 minutes
 Imaginative Writing

Responding to Feedback to Improve

My First Draft
 You will be given time to rewrite
your descriptive paragraphs.
1. Use ambitious vocabulary from animal verbs/monsters list.
2. Use language and structure devices
1. She ran and ran and ran… Until there was nowhere to
go.
2. Where else could she go? Who could she call?
3. He stood there, still, like a demon on mission.
3. Use sentences starting with different words e.g.
Strutting about anxiously, the little girl had not idea about where
she was.
Anxiously, she strutted about without knowing where she was.
 Responding to feedback
• Look carefully at your peers’ assessment of
your work, including the targets you have
been set.
• Using your green pen, spend 10 minutes re-
writing a section to improve it.
• Now get on your feet, join up with another
partner and read them the re-drafted section;
explain to them what you changed and why.
 Homework
• Ensure that you are prepared for the Writing
assessment which will happen during our next
lesson.
• You may have a plan with you and a task
sheet; you may not simply copy a previous
draft.