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Next Steps
Target Next Steps
AO2 1. Analysis – Pull all your quotations apart for specific devices used by Bronte
and Fitzgerald – evaluate intentions linking back to the question.
2. Structural Analysis – explore sentence types, use of punctuation, chapter
structure and plot order.

AO3 1. Context - Make the links between your analysis and what you know was
going on in history at that time.
2. Genre – Make the links between what we study in the novel and the
elements of gothic and American modern literature.
AO4 1. Love through the Ages – make the links between the two texts – specific
links between presentation of male and female characters.
AO5 1. Create a debate by including quotations from outside the extract that
refute your viewpoint to show contrasts in the novel. Use critical readings.
 The Question
• “Women characters are primarily presented as
those who suffer and endure in literature.”

• By comparing two prose texts, explore the

extent to which you agree with this statement.
 Modelling AOs in a Paragraph
Isabella - ‘I gave him my heart and he pinched it to death, and flung it
back at me.’

AO1 -What’s the interpretation I want to make about her sufferings?

AO2- Why did I select this quotation? What does the language reveal
about her sufferings?
AO3- Should a Victorian reader feel sympathy for her? Why?
AO4- Could I compare this type of suffering to that of Jay Gatsby’s or
Daisy’s? How?
AO1/5- Why could I argue that Isabella doesn’t endure her suffering
and therefore is seen as weak?
AO5 - What could be the flip side of my argument?
Isabella - ‘I gave him my heart and he pinched it to
death, and flung it back at me.’
 What needs to be done to improve thisAO3
AO2 – LANGUAGE
Add analysis of the words used
by Heathcliff in this quotation. •
Which ones highlight his
suffering? What connotations
do they create about his state
of mind?
AO2 – STRUCTURE
Add analysis of the sentence
types and punctuation used by
Bronte to present Heathcliff’s
sufferings – what impact do
they have for the reader?
AO4 – GATSBY
Compare his sufferings to that
of Tom’s/Wilson’s loss of
Myrtle. Find a relevant
quotation – do they suffer for
the same reasons? How/Why?
piece?
– CONTEXT
How does the Victorian
However, men suffer too in society affect the way
women are presented?
both novels. Heathcliff shows
Why would Bronte want
deep, excruciating suffering
when it comes to his to showcase endurance of
suffering? What’s her
relationship with Cathy. Even
message about women?
though Cathy chooses another
man to marry he still loves her
and has to watch her and
Edgar develop a relationship
together. Even after she dies
he suffers as he believes he
killed her and has to endure AO5 – DEBATE
the guilt without her. ‘Be with How could it be argued
me always- take any form- that men cause the
drive me mad! Oh God! I suffering in both novels?
cannot live without my life! I Do both authors paint the
cannot live without my soul!’ men as the tormentors? If
so, why? For what goal?
What needs to be done to improve this piece?

• However, men suffer too in both novels.

Heathcliff shows deep, excruciating suffering
when it comes to his relationship with Cathy.
Even though Cathy chooses another man to
marry he still loves her and has to watch her
and Edgar develop a relationship together. Even
after she dies he suffers as he believes he killed
her and has to endure the guilt without her. ‘Be
with me always- take any form-drive me mad!
Oh God! I cannot live without my life! I cannot
live without my soul!’
 Deepening AO2
1. Write a sentence that answers an aspect of the question (use key words
from the question)
2. Embed a quotation from the extract that supports the opening sentence
3. What does the quotation reveal to the reader about the character and/or
their relationship to another? (You must think beyond the obvious ideas)
4. Which word(s)/devices/punctuation features help give you the ideas from
step 3? Use accurate terminology and explore the connotations of the
device.
5. E valuate why the writer chooses to use this specific language/device?
What’s the bigger picture for the reader about the relationship/character?
6. Finally, consider if this evidence and analysis highlight a common idea about
the character or relationship or, can you spot differences/changes
throughout the novel?

Your Turn -
DIRT
1. Look at your target
2. Look back at your assessment
and find the green sections with
DIRT – these are going to be
your starting points for
improving the essay.
3. Add annotations to these
sections first with new ideas and
concepts that you could explore.
4. Rewrite a full section of the
response, making sure to focus
on the next step from your
target.
Target Next Steps
AO2 1. Analysis – Pull all your quotations apart
for specific devices used by Bronte and
Fitzgerald – evaluate intentions linking
back to the question.
2. Structural Analysis – explore sentence
types, use of punctuation, chapter
structure and plot order.
AO3 1. Context - Make the links between your
analysis and what you know was going
on in history at that time.
2. Genre – Make the links between what
we study in the novel and the elements
of gothic and American modern
literature.
AO4 1. Love through the Ages – make the links
between the two texts – specific links
between presentation of male and
female characters.
AO5 1. Create a debate by including
quotations from outside the extract
that refute your viewpoint to show
contrasts in the novel. Use critical
readings.
 Reflection
Target Next Steps
AO2 1. Analysis – Pull all your quotations apart for specific devices used by
Shakespeare – evaluate his intentions linking back to the question.
2. Structural Analysis – explore sentence types, use of punctuation, soliloquies
and on stage order.

AO3 1. Context - Make the links between your analysis and what you know was
going on in history at that time.
2. Tragic Genre – Make the links between what we study in the play and the
classic elements of Aristotle’s tragedy.
AO4 1. Love through the Ages – make the links between the passage and aspects of
love presented in the play. How typical is it? Compare to other love stories.
AO5 1. Create a debate by including quotations from outside the extract that
refute your viewpoint to show contrasts in the play. Use critical readings.