Gillian Herold

Professor Zugnoni
UWP 1Y
4 November 2016
My Revisions
As I begin to revise different assignments for this class, I believe it is important to take
my peers and professors feedback into consideration in order to better my writing. For this same
reason, I believe the majority of revisions I need to make are also the ones mentioned by my
peers and professor. For example, on my living picture narrative, I received a lot of feedback
about the organization of my ideas and connecting my ideas to my main idea in order to create a
better flow. Also, I received other comments regarding content or elaboration so I hope I
improved upon those parts of my essays. However, I believe my main issues are organization and
structure so those problems are my main focus while revising. Therefore, I plan on revising by
rearranging my paragraphs and connecting my ideas. I will use Murray and Dethiers advice by
analyzing each aspect and section of my paper to better arrange my ideas. The only thing I am
worried about regarding revisions is my word length, but I hope to make great revisions to
improve my grade within the word count.