Juvenile Justice

by Jorge Lopez

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

/50 Instructor

Jorge, you have good ideas here. I like your use of

Brian and T ori f rom the documentary. However, your
paper needs more support and development. I would
strongly recommend revising and resubmitting.

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QM Development
T his idea needs f urther development and elaboration.

Additional Comment

Good ideas in your intro but could use more background inf ormation and organization.

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Development
T his idea needs f urther development and elaboration.

Additional Comment

T his is a good example. Could use some f urther commentary to strengthen the connection to
your thesis.

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Comment 1
Paper is incomplete. If you need more time completing an assignment please let me know. Do
not just submit when unf inished.
Comment 2
Need 4 sources included in this essay