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by Preszilla Celis

Submission date: 25-Feb-2019 03:34PM (UT C-0800)

Submission ID: 1083737639
File name: copypaste.txt (7.13K)
Word count: 1076
Character count: 5937
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Your works cited page should be on a separate page. If you are trying to incorporate your sources here with in-text
citations, you need to look at OWL Purdue or your textbook.
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ORIGINALITY REPORT

35 %
SIMILARIT Y INDEX
31%
INT ERNET SOURCES
1%
PUBLICAT IONS
12%
ST UDENT PAPERS

PRIMARY SOURCES

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ccwsafe.com
Int ernet Source 23%
2
Submitted to Southern New Hampshire
University - Continuing Education
4%
St udent Paper

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Submitted to University of Alabama at
Birmingham
3%
St udent Paper

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criminal.findlaw.com
Int ernet Source 2%
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Submitted to CSU, San Jose State University
St udent Paper 2%
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pann.nate.com
Int ernet Source 1%

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

0
Preszilla,

You have chosen an interesting topic here, and I

think that you have incorporated some interesting
research. T hat said, 25% of this essay is copied

/100
directly f rom another source. Furthermore, this is
not f ormatted correctly, nor does it meet the
minimum requirement f or this paper. Finally, your
task here was to def ine the problem. If the problem
here is how the media portrays race relations which
then in turn makes the discussion harder to have,
then that should be the f ocus of your research here.
When you revise f or your f inal project, you need to
make sure that you quote where necessary, and that
you use sources that support your claim rather than
those that delve unnecessarily into background
inf ormation. So here, you would want to look more
into media studies rather than what actually
happened when Z immerman shot Martin. Finally, of
the sources that you listed, none of them are
scholarly sources. Remember that you need to have
a minimum of f ive (5) scholarly sources f or this
assignment and the other ones. I am going to allow
you to revise this paper f or credit, if you choose.
You have until 3/27 to get me your revised draf t.

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T imes New Roman

Text Comment. MLA Header: Name Prof Name Class Name Due Date

Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.

Comment 1 | Format

Center this.
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Comment 2 | Format

Indent paragraphs

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article the

Text Comment. Af rican-American

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QM f ragment | SWE Conv

T his is an incomplete sentence.

Conf used You have used either an imprecise word or an incorrect word.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active
voice.

Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.

Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.

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Comment 3 | St yle

Which community are you ref erring to here? Be specif ic.

Comment 4 | Unit y

Ok, but what is your specif ic argument here?

 Text Comment. T oo much space here.

Comment 5
T his is copied directly f rom some source. You need to either paraphrase or quote this source.

Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.

QM Paraphrase or quote | Format

T his section matches existing content in the T urnitin database. Essays that ref erence ideas or
inf ormation f rom a source must directly quote or paraphrase the author's thought and then
provide a proper citation. Revise this section by paraphrasing or quoting the author's idea and
then properly cite it.

Missing "," Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

Missing "," Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

PAGE 3

QM Paraphrase or quote | Format

T his section matches existing content in the T urnitin database. Essays that ref erence ideas or
inf ormation f rom a source must directly quote or paraphrase the author's thought and then
provide a proper citation. Revise this section by paraphrasing or quoting the author's idea and
then properly cite it.

Hyph. Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article the

Comment 6 | SWE Conv

Make sure that you spell the names of people correctly. It's not Martian (a person f rom Mars)
it's Martin.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

QM Sp. | SWE Conv

Spelling error

Missing "," Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.
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Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

Hyph. Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.

Text Comment. Your works cited page should be on a separate page. If you are trying to
incorporate your sources here with in-text citations, you need to look at OWL Purdue or your
textbook.

Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.

Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

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Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.

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Sentence Cap. Review the rules f or capitalization.

Possessive Review the rules f or possessive nouns.

RUBRIC: WRITING ASSIGNMENT RUBRIC

UNIT Y

SCALE 6 presents a cogent, thesis-driven analysis of or response to the text

SCALE 5 presents a thoughtf ul, thesis-centered analysis of or response to the text

SCALE 4 presents an appropriate, thesis-based analysis of or response to the text

SCALE 3 presents an inconsistent or illogical thesis-related analysis of or response to the text

which ref lects an incomplete understanding of the text or topic

SCALE 2 presents a simplistic, inappropriate, or incoherent thesis-tangential analysis of or

response to the text, one that may suggest some signif icant misunderstanding of the
text or the topic;

SCALE 1 presents an inadequate, thesis-irrelevant analysis of or response to the text,

ignoring the topic’s demands, unacceptable

DEV/SUP

SCALE 6 elaborates that response with well-chosen examples and persuasive reasoning,
excellent

SCALE 5 elaborates that response with appropriate examples and logical reasoning

SCALE 4 elaborates that response with acceptable examples and sensible reasoning

SCALE 3 lacks elaboration with appropriate examples , lacking

SCALE 2 lacks elaboration with appropriate examples or elaborates with inappropriate

examples

SCALE 1 lacks any appropriate pattern of development; may be inappropriately brief ,

unacceptable

ORGANIZ AT ION

SCALE 6 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to demonstrate the relatedness of ideas and enhances the
power of the argument

SCALE 5 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to convey the argument

SCALE 4 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to illustrate the argument, f its

SCALE 3 deviates f rom an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, so that
organizational structures may detract f rom the argument
SCALE 2 lacks an organizational pattern which f acilitates reader understanding, lacking

SCALE 1 lacks any appropriate organizational pattern, unacceptable

ST YLE

SCALE 6 displays a sophisticated style that ref lects aptly chosen words and rhetorically
ef f ective sentence variety

SCALE 5 displays a readable style that ref lects well-chosen words and ef f ective sentences

SCALE 4 displays a style that ref lects appropriate words and sentence variety

SCALE 3 displays a style that ref lects imprecise word choice and little sentence variety

SCALE 2 displays a style that ref lects at least one of the f ollowing: simplistic or inaccurate
word choice; monotonous or f ragmented sentence structure, inappropriate

SCALE 1 displays a style which creates a disconnect between sound and sense, one in which
language word choice and syntax obscure meaning, unacceptable

SWE CONV

SCALE 6 exhibits mastery of the conventions of Standard Written English, masterf ul

SCALE 5 demonstrates competence in the conventions of Standard Written English,

competent

SCALE 4 observes conventions of Standard Written English, acceptable

SCALE 3 may deviate f rom the conventions of Standard Written English by displaying
occasional major errors in grammar and usage or f requent minor errors

SCALE 2 repeatedly deviates f rom the conventions of Standard Written English by displaying
many repeated errors in grammar and usage

SCALE 1 consistently deviates f rom the conventions of Standard Written English., displaying a
pervasive pattern of errors in word choice, sentence structure, grammar and usage,
unacceptable

FORMAT

SCALE 6 exhibits mastery of the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat. masterf ul

SCALE 5 demonstrates competence in the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.

competent

SCALE 4 observes conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat. acceptable

SCALE 3 may deviate f rom the conventions of manuscript citation manuscript citation and
f ormat.
SCALE 2 repeatedly deviates f rom the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.

SCALE 1 consistently deviates f rom the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.
unacceptable