English 2

Writing Portfolio

Name: Diego Rumazo

Assistant: René Garrido
Date: July 25th, 2018
 Writing Process

First report:

A. Draft with Feedback:

B. Correction

I’am going to talk about my friend Matías. He is Chilean and he is 23 years old. He is a
student of chemical engineering, and now he is studying in Italy. I would like to visit him
and learn Italian. We met at school and he is my best friend. He likes to travel and he knows
a lot of places around the world.

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Second report:

A. Draft with Feedback:

My first time when I used a piece of technology it was fifteen years ago. The object it was a
mobile phone. I remember the cellphone it was very little, it is different compared with
current smartphone. My first mobile was of company “Entel PCS”, and when I tried to used
this cellphone, was broken it broke. This phone I was really like this phone because the
sounds and the games are great for me in that time. If I could to have a new phone, maybe I
would like to have the same.

B. Correction

The first time when I used a piece of technology it was fifteen years ago. It was a mobile
phone. I remember the cellphone was very small and different compared with current
smartphone. My first mobile was of “Entel PCS” company, and when I tried to used this
cellphone it broke. I really like this phone because the sounds and the games were great for
me in that time. If I could have a new phone, maybe I would like to have the same.