It is argued that some Some firms made make it mandatory for their workers to maintain

their dress code wear uniforms during working hours. This essay argues that, although
these uniforms are not comfortable for some employees, they are necessary as they
provide some information about show their status in the company.

You have paraphrased the question, given your opinion and outlined your main ideas,
though with some language errors which reduced clarity.

To commence with the advantage, an the attire of a person in any organization provides
us with a little knowledge about the post he/she or she holds in that organization and it
is quite easy to locate or find the person you are looking for, due to the different colors
and types of outfits used in a particular institute company. For instance, at the hospital
where I work, has assigned several kinds of costumes uniforms are worn by to it’s
employees according to their tasks and responsibilities. Hence, I agree that it is
essential to have a dress code uniform at in the workplace as it makes people look
different and they are therefore easy to recognize.

You have addressed the question directly in the topic sentence (first sentence) with a
relevant main idea.

You should also have given an explanation sentence after the topic sentence.

You have given a specific and relevant example of your main idea.

You have given your opinion at the end of the paragraph, but this is not a synonym of
uniform.

Language errors reduced the clarity of this paragraph.

The biggest drawback of having uniforms in companies is that some people think do
they are not feel relax comfortable while wearing them. The reason is that sometimes
the quality of the fabric, that has been used to make these suits garments, are is not up
to the mark or there is a the problem with that the clothing is not of having the
appropriate size, which can interfere in the staff’s activities and therefore decreasing
decrease their productivity. For example, a study was conducted by the Qatar Airways
after introducing new uniforms to their staff, to evaluate their feedback, and it was found
that around 60% of the staff was were uncomfortable due to a mismatch in their
uniforms not being the right size. However, this downside does not lower the
significance of the uniforms.

You have addressed the question directly in the topic sentence with a relevant main
idea, but this is not a synonym of comfortable when used to describe how a uniform
feels.

You have given a relevant explanation of your idea.

You have given a specific and relevant example of your main idea.

You have given your opinion at the end of the paragraph.

Language errors reduced the clarity of this paragraph.

In conclusion, while some employees might face some discomfort by when they wearing
assigned uniforms, I believe that it is vital for the institutes organizations to dress their
labor employees in such a way that they their status can be recognized effortlessly.

You have restated your opinion.

You have summarised the main idea from the second body paragraph, but you needed
to add something like this to accurately summarise the main idea from the first body
paragraph.

Task Response- Band 7

You have sufficiently addressed all parts of the task.

You present a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and
supported ideas.

The only thing missing is an explanation in the first body paragraph. If you included this,
you would get a Band 8.

Suggestion- You must include an explanation after the topic sentence in each body
paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion- Band 6

Your paragraphing and structure are good and you logically arrange your ideas but
there are quite a few vocabulary and grammar mistakes that reduce the coherence of
your work as they make it difficult to understand what you are trying to say.

Your conclusion was not effective.

Suggestions- Continue to do what you have done with regard to how you have
structured your essay and what components to include in each paragraph. To improve
your score for Coherence and Cohesion you need to work on your vocabulary and
grammar. Pay particular attention to the suggestion for this under your scores below.

Your coherence would also benefit if you summarised your main ideas accurately in the
conclusion. This makes it much easier for the reader to follow your argument.

Vocabulary- Band 6

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. You do attempt to use less
common vocabulary, but this often leads to mistakes, as you can see above.

You do make some errors in word formation, but they do not impede communication.

Suggestions- You obviously have a wide-ranging vocabulary; however, when you try to
use more advanced words and phrases, you can make slight errors at times.

You do not get extra marks for inserting large, complicated words if they are
inappropriate or inaccurate.

My advice is to use the 100% rule. Only write a word or phrase when you are 100%
sure about the meaning and form of that word.

In the long term, you should think about starting a vocabulary book. This is a place
where you record new vocabulary with spelling, grammar, collocations, synonyms,
antonyms and example sentences to make sure you know it 100%. You can then review
these new words regularly so that they become a natural part of your vocabulary.

You should also give yourself a few minutes at the end to evaluate your vocabulary and
make sure you have not made any mistakes.

Finally, synonyms are important and you should try to use them, but only use them if
you know that they mean exactly the same as the word you are replacing. They should
also be grammatically correct. If you are not sure, just repeat the word.
Grammar- Band 6

Your grammar is not bad, but you do make small mistakes in nearly every sentence.
None of your grammar mistakes stop meaning coming through, but there are too many
of them to get one of the higher band scores.

Around 50% of your sentences need to be completely error free for you to get a higher
band for grammar.

Suggestions- You can do three things.

First, you can identify your common mistakes, review the grammar, and then try to fix
them.

Secondly, you can make sure you only write sentences that you are 100% sure about. It
is better to be correct than try to show off with fancy grammar and complicated
sentences.

Lastly, practice so that you leave yourself at least 2-3 minutes at the end to check for
mistakes.

Overall- Band 6.5

This score might be lower than you might have hoped for, but you should see it as a
good opportunity to identify your problems and fix them. You should focus on the
following things:

•Develop your main ideas with clear explanations.

•Summarise your main ideas in the conclusion.

•Reduce the number of vocabulary mistakes you are making by only using words and
phrases you are 100% sure about.

•Reduce the number of grammar mistakes you are making by reading each sentence
immediately after you write it to check that it makes sense.

•Proofread your whole essay at the end.

•Plan your answers for 5-10 minutes before writing.

•Reduce the number of words in your essay to between 260-290 words.

Suggested Resources

While you should work on all of the areas highlighted above, the main areas you should
focus on are grammar and vocabulary. The links below are to past Demo Lessons that
focus on these areas.

Common Grammar Mistakes

<https://www.facebook.com/sam.poole.351104/videos/156350655328507/>

IELTS Grammar: Student vs Examiner's Perspective

<https://www.facebook.com/christopher.pell/videos/10157934819745228/>

Punctuation
https://www.facebook.com/michael.osullivan.58118/videos/331935457351887/

What's the difference between Band 6.5 and Band 7?

<https://www.facebook.com/christopher.pell/videos/10159451414710228/>

The Importance of Proofreading

<https://www.facebook.com/christopher.pell/videos/10159511562360228/>

Sample Answer

Certain companies require their employees to wear a uniform whenever they are
working. While this increases the overhead expenses of a company, this essay believes
that it helps to form better relationships between the workers.

The main drawback of a company having a uniform for their staff is that it adds a
significant extra expense. There is the initial expense of having the uniforms designed
and then made for every member of staff, but there are also the ongoing costs of
providing uniforms for new hires and replacing items which can no longer be worn due
to wear and tear. For example, the retail chain Argos reported an 8% increase in yearly
spending as a direct result of introducing a uniform for their store employees. However,
this essay argues that uniforms can improve the company brand and this creates an
increase in revenue that offsets the extra expenditure.

The major benefit of having a uniform is that it allows employees to bond more easily.
People tend to make friends with others who they feel are similar to them and when
everyone is wearing the same clothes, this breaks down one of the barriers that can
restrict people from connecting with others. This is important for businesses as it
improves teamwork and productivity. For instance, it is reported by Bloomberg
Businessweek that having uniforms is the second most influential method of improving
relationships within a company. Furthermore, this essay maintains that strong
relationships at work are one of the main contributors to job satisfaction.

In conclusion, the primary disadvantage for companies with staff uniforms is the
expenses they will incur. However, this essay argues that having a uniform is largely an
advantage as it improves the relationships between staff members and this can lead to
improved teamwork, productivity and job satisfaction.