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Editing Test
INSTRUCTIONS
① Turn on Track Changes
(from Review tab). Edit
in-line and make the
necessary changes to the
text. Do not rewrite the
② ① ③③ content separately or
delete complete
USEFUL TIPS sentences, and do not use
1. Address issues with clarity, sentence structure, comments to indicate or
word choice/terminology, grammar, and suggest changes required
punctuation. unless you are unsure of
the author’s intended
2. Use a formal tone and expressions that are meaning at a particular
suitable to research papers. instance.
② Insert comments to flag
3. Do not edit the passage to simply improve the missing information or
quality of the language used. Use Google or unclear instances, or to
Google Scholar to understand concepts or to explain extensive
verify information and spelling. revisions.
③ Switch to Simple
4. Refer to the sample edit given below to Markup and proofread
understand the scope of editing and how the content and the
comments are to be used. comments.
5. You need not refer to the source provided under ④ Save the file as .doc
each passage to do a good job. Use the context or .docx and rename the
provided in the passage itself. file by adding your full
name (e.g., John
Doe_Editing Test)

Contents
Sample Edit (for reference only)................................................................................................ 2
Test Passages ............................................................................................................................. 3
Physics and Engineering ........................................................................................................ 3
Earth and Environmental Sciences ........................................................................................ 4
Chemistry and Materials Science........................................................................................... 5
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Sample Edit (for reference only)

Motion complexity of a task depends not on the task itself but on how a human
demonstrator shows demonstratesionsof a the task, not depending a task itself. All There
can be different successful demonstrations will be different even for of a single task, such as
the a pouring task, depending on how much a the skill of the human demonstrator is skillful
for in performing the demonstration motions and/or how cautious much athehuman Commented [A1]: “careful” may be a better word in this context.
Please check.
demonstrator is cautious to in showing what motions are relatively significant for to the
success of a the task. In this work paper, we propose two measures to gauge motion
significance and motion complexity of a task not from a task itself but from a set of human
demonstrations of the task, rather than from the task itself.

Before introducing our proposed method, let us consider motion granularity of a

manipulation task. Manipulation tasks usually consist of a mixture of coarse-grained and
fine-grained motions. Coarse-grained motionsof a manipulation task variesrangeover a large Commented [A2]: Please note this word change. With the
original word, the phrase “varies over a large space” could be
space while during task executiong a manipulation task,when compared with fine-grained interpreted as “large spatial variation”.

ones. It They also allowsa large spatial variations of its motion and marginal reproduction I made a similar change regarding fine-grained motions.

whenilerepeating conducting multiple repeated trials. In thisat case, human demonstrations

tend to be executed to show with small temporal variations. (hHere, temporal variations are
relatively small because of being the task is executed at a high speed in multiple trials.). On
the other hand, fine-grained motionsvaries range over a small space,when compared with
coarse-grained ones. It They requires a relatively small spatial variation of its motion and
precise reproduction whenilerepeating conducting multiple repeated trials. Human
demonstrations of fine-grained motions tend to be executed to showwith large temporal
variations. (hHere, temporal variations are relatively large because of being the task is
executed at a low speed in multiple trials.).
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Test Passages
Physics and Engineering
Underwater vehicles (UV) are widely spread nowadays, and these vehicles call for the need
offor periodical service and maintenance. Their efficient application requires accompanying
base ships or net of stations for technical servicing.
Service and maintenance of UV’s isare usually done via ship with special types of
equipments. In this case, UV gets inside the ship through the bay inat the bottom.
Also in other projects ship is substitute by submarine or underwater station. For such
operations, the vehicle needs to safely dock with the ship or station. To solve Docking Task it
is necessary to develop three algorithms: general control algorithm, moving algorithm and
algorithm for vehicle position. Fast and energy-efficient docking is one of the key
requirements for trouble-free operation.
In this paper, the authors describe the research and development of algorithms for uva UV
control system that allows docking with an underwater station. The process is divided into
two steps: : moving to docking zone and vehicle positioning of the station.The Ffirst task
includes the development of path regulator, based on Pshikhopov’s position path control
theory, but with regard to peculiarities of the controlled object. The proposed one features the
separation of control channels for simple adjustment and gives the best results when multi-
coupling influence is low. Thus, the movement to Docking Zone is accomplished. The
Ssecond task was solved on the basis of the UV mathematical model.
Developed control values were tested in the simulator where underwater vehicle successfully
docked the station and proved themselves to be efficient. A Rreview of experiment results
includes vehicle path in XYZ coordinates, forces, and angles of thrusts. The analysis of
deviation of UV actual speed and position from the required one showed a high efficiency of
developed control.

Time taken to edit (in minutes): __

Assessment of the passage

[Provide feedback to the author of this paper. Remember that the author is a senior researcher, so your tone
needs to be professional. Comment on the language and structure of the passage, and provide examples to justify
your comments. The feedback provided will also be evaluated. Please ensure that the feedback is at least 50
words long.]
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Source: Development of Algorithms for Approaching and Docking Underwater Vehicle with
Underwater Station by B.V. Gurenko and A.L. Beresnev, used under CC-BY/sentences
modified.
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Earth and Environmental Sciences

Eddies are small features with a big impact. They are where a lot of ocean physics happen
and are an integral part of our climate system. Coastal eddies have a major role in regulating
the weather near the shore and they are important for fisheries. In the open ocean, eddies
bring nutrient-rich cold water up to the surface and are an important part of the global carbon
cycle [1]. These eddies are rotating masses of water that have broken off from a strong front.
Eddies are crucial to the transport of Heat, momentum, trace chemicals, biological
communities, Oxygen (O2), and nutrients relating to life in the sea [2]. They are also active in
air-sea interaction, both through response to weather and in shaping the patterns of warmth
that drives the entire atmospheric circulation. Measurements of ocean color and the fate of
light in the ocean are extremely useful for describing biological dynamics in surface waters
[3–5], thus the oceanographic communities has made a substantial commitment to remote
sensing of ocean color from space [6, 7]. Regional scale ocean color imageries are particularly
useful for space-borne studies of ocean margins because of the importance and dominance of
mesoscale features (upwelling plumes, eddies, filaments, and River Plumes) in continental
shelf and slope waters. [8] The oceanic and coastal processes rapidly alter the optical
properties of waters and these effects get manifested in the color of the water [9].

Time taken to edit (in minutes): __

Assessment of the passage

[Provide feedback to the author of this paper. Remember that the author is a senior researcher, so your tone
needs to be professional. Comment on the language and structure of the passage, and provide examples to justify
your comments. The feedback provided will also be evaluated. Please ensure that the feedback is at least 50
words long.]
Write here:

Source: “Observation of Oceanic Eddy in the Northeastern Arabian Sea Using Multisensor
Remote Sensing Data” by R.K. Sarangi, used under CC BY/sentences modified
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Chemistry and Materials Science

Researches found that graphite is a semiconductor without activation energy, because of the
small portion of valence band of graphite extended to the conduction band, in which data
established a foundation for using the physical properties of graphite. However, since several
decades, the study of graphene is still just staying at the level of theory.
Graphene was getting increasingly more and more attention in various areas of Science and
technology due to its remarkable physicochemical properties. Novoselov and Geim firstly
observed a single layer of graphene from highly oriented pyrolytic graphite (HOPG), using
the micromechanical exfoliation method; though simple, this method has the disadvantage of
low yield, and you cannot achieve high-quality industrial production. Even though the
thickness of a graphite sheet prepared by the CVD method significantly decreased more than
ever, the presence of more Ni impurities in the graphite sheet was a problem. Solvent
stripping method did not destroy the structure of the graphene and presented no surface
defects in the graphene sheet. However, the low yield of graphene was still a problem.
In this study, successful synthesis of graphene oxide (GO), as the precursor for preparing
graphene, by the modified Hummers method. The structures of materials were measured by
Fourier-Transform Infrared Spectra Analyzer (FT-IR) and X-ray diffraction (XRD). The
TEM (transmission electron microscope) and DFM analyses showed successful preparation
of GO films on microscopic morphology. The presentation of oxygen-containing functional
groups, such as C=O and C–O confirmed that the graphite indeed was oxidized into GO and
was consistent with the literatures.

Time taken to edit (in minutes): __

Assessment of the passage

[Provide feedback to the author of this paper. Remember that the author is a senior researcher, so your tone
needs to be professional. Comment on the language and structure of the passage, and provide examples where
needed.]

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Source: Preparation and Characterization of Graphene Oxide by J. Song, X. Wang, and C.-T.
Chang, used under CC-BY/sentences modified