Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201

Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth

Outlining
Topic: Public vs private colleges
Topic sentence: When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education,
hundreds of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university.
The differences:
1. Payment.
2. The size of the universities.
3. The admission.
4. The rule.
Concluding sentence: It’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals
and financial demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points
and weak points.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First draft
Public vs private colleges
When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education,
hundred(s) of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university. Since there’s
many answers to this question, let just compare the two popular question(s).
The question of payment is a top priority. When choosing a public university, one can
save a fortune in tuition(s) and fees. A year’s tuition at a private university can be much
higher than the cost of attending a state university. So, if the budget is on low to medium
level, it’s better to attending at the public university. However, in private university, there
are numerous scholarship and financial package(s) that can help people out there, who is
high-archiver.
Admission to state university tends to be easier. State universities are generally much
bigger, and can therefore accept more applicants. At the same time, larger university mean
larger class size. It’s especially true some class can be up to seventy students, which is hard
to study. Unlike state universities, private universities are usually fairly small; that is why
they only take on a limited number of new admissions each year. This fact explains why
private universities often seem so restrictive and why competition to enter private
universities is so high.
It’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals and financial
demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points and weak points.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First Peer Editing Sheet
Comparison Essay Outline

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor: SOUN Pisey
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. Is thesis statement clear? If not, make suggestion for changes.

A: The thesis statement is clear.
2. Does the writer use the block or the point by point method of organization? Is this method
effective for the subject? If not, make suggestion for changes.
A: The writer uses the point by point method od organization. It is effective for the subject.
3. Does each topic sentence clearly state the point of comparison? If not, make suggestions
for improvement.
A: Each topic sentence is clearly state the point of comparison.
4. Do these two subjects have enough similarities and/ or differences for a good comparison
essay? If not, why not?
A: These two subjects are enough similarities and/ or difference for a good comparison
essay.
5. The best part of the outline is
A: The best part of the outline is body part.
6. Question I still have about the outline are
A: I do not have question relate to outline.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First Peer Editing Sheet
Comparison Essay

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor: SOUN Pisey
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. In the few words, what is the essay about?

A: In the few words, the essay about Public vs Private colleges
2. Identify the hook. Is it effective? Make any suggestions here.
A: Identify the hook is When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher
education, hundreds of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university.
It is effective.
3. Does each body paragraph contain a clear topic sentence? If not, underline any sections
that need improvement.
A: Each body paragraph contains a clear topic sentence.
4. What method of organization does the writer use? List the main points that the writer
compares.
A: The writer uses point by point method of organization.
Main important points that the writer compare:
A: Payment.
The size of the universities.
The admission.
The rule.
5. Are the comparisons supported with example? (Ask who? What? What? Where? When?
Why? How? If not, put a star next to the places that need supporting information.
A: The comparison supported with example.

6. Does the writer use connector correctly? If not, circle any incorrect connectors or any
places that need connectors.
A: the writer use connector is correctly.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
7. Does the writer restate the thesis in the conclusion? If not, bring this to the attention of the
writer.
A: The writer does not restate the thesis in the conclusion.

8. In the conclusion, does the writer offer an opinion or suggestion about the two subjects?
Do you agree with the writer’s final words? If not, why not?
A: In the conclusion, the writer offers an opinion about the two subjects. I do not agree with
the writer’s final words because the writer did not use restate in conclusion.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth

Second draft
When it comes to the moment to enter university and get higher education, hundreds
of students face a dilemma; Public university or Private university. Since there’s many
answers to this question, let just compare the two popular questions.
The question of payment is a top priority. When choosing a public university, one can
save a fortune in tuitions and fees. A year’s tuition at a private university can be much higher
than the cost of attending a state university. So, if the budget is on low to medium level, it’s
better to attending at the public university. However, in private university, there are
numerous scholarship and financial packages that can help people out there, who is high-
archiver.
Admission to state university tends to be easier. State universities are generally much
bigger, and can therefore accept more applicants. At the same time, larger university mean
larger class size. It’s especially true some class can be up to seventy students, which is hard
to study. Unlike state universities, private universities are usually fairly small; that is why
they only take on a limited number of new admissions each year. This fact explains why
private universities often seem so restrictive and why competition to enter private
universities is so high.
It’s hard to give one exact answer to this question. The academic goals and financial
demands of each are different, and each type of university has strong points and weak points.
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
First Peer Editing Sheet
Comparison Essay Outline

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor:
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. Is thesis statement clear? If not, make suggestion for changes.

A:
2. Does the writer use the block or the point by point method of organization? Is this method
effective for the subject? If not, make suggestion for changes.
A:
3. Does each topic sentence clearly state the point of comparison? If not, make suggestions
for improvement.
A:
4. Do these two subjects have enough similarities and/ or differences for a good comparison
essay? If not, why not?
A:
5. The best part of the outline is
A:
6. Question I still have about the outline are
A:
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
Comparison Essay

Writer: Tung Sereivuth Date: 17/ Nov/ 2020

Peer Editor:
Topic: Public vs Private colleges

1. In the few words, what is the essay about?

A:
2. Identify the hook. Is it effective? Make any suggestions here.
A:
3. Does each body paragraph contain a clear topic sentence? If not, underline any sections
that need improvement.
A:
4. What method of organization does the writer use? List the main points that the writer
compares.
A:
Main important points that the writer compare:
A:
5. Are the comparisons supported with example? (Ask who? What? What? Where? When?
Why? How? If not, put a star next to the places that need supporting information.
A:

6. Does the writer use connector correctly? If not, circle any incorrect connectors or any
places that need connectors.
A:
7. Does the writer restate the thesis in the conclusion? If not, bring this to the attention of the
writer.
A:
Institute of Foreign Language Writing Skills 201
Department of English Name: Tung Sereivuth
8. In the conclusion, does the writer offer an opinion or suggestion about the two subjects?
Do you agree with the writer’s final words? If not, why not?
A: