NAME: PAUL ASI HITALIA DATE: FEBRUARY 12, 2021

GRADE & SECTION: GRADE 11 STEM

ACTIVITY #3
DIRECTIONS: Criticize the text below. Use Biographical and Gender Criticism to analyze the text. The analyses must be
at least 300 words. You MUST turn your work in together with a plagiarism checker report. This activity is worth a hundred
points.
To you, Who Cannot Be Named
Hey! How has it been? Are you doing okay? Have you eaten your meal? As for me, things haven’t been the same lately.
 
         Words cannot define the feeling of love and despair profligately burning in my heart. The mere utterance of your
existence makes my body salacious and disobedient. It is as if my life is in the palm of your hands-- you are a God-given
calamity. 
 
         Sensations equal to the juxtaposition of agony and euphoria inflict me whenever I see you talking to someone.
Seeing you from afar, admiring, and longing for your embrace makes me regret everything I have not done to be with
you. 
 
         Nevertheless, you will always be the best thing that has happened to me.
 
Until a chance may come again, 
-J
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Format:
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Long
Justified
Scoring Rubric: 
Excellent Good Satisfactory Need Work SCORE
Category
5 points 4 points 3 points 2 points
INTRODUCTION and  Introduction creates interest.  Introduction adequately explains Background details are a
CONCLUSION (Background Thesis states the position.  the background, but may lack random, unclear collection
History/Thesis Statement) There is a well-developed introduction Conclusion effectively detail.  of information. 
with an attention grabber that grabs the summarizes the topic. Thesis states the topic, but key Thesis is vague and
reader’s interest and continues to engage elements are missing unclear. 
the reader up until the thesis statement.  Conclusion is not effective
and does not summarize
 main points
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The thesis statement should clearly state

the experience or event that will be
described as well as the effect on the
writer. 
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Conclusion should effectively wrap up and

re stresses the importance of the thesis.

 Three or more main points Three or more main points are Less than three ideas/main
relate to the thesis, but some present, but lack details in points are explained
Well-developed main points/topic may lack details.  describing the event.  and/or they are poorly
sentences that relate directly to the The analysis shows events Little descriptive language is used. developed. 
thesis.  from the author’s point of The story tells; it doesn’t
view, but could use more show
 descriptive language.
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MAIN POINTS  Supporting examples are concrete and

(Body Paragraphs) detailed. 

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The analysis is developed with an effective

point of view.

ORGANIZATION (Structure  Logical progression of ideas.   Writing is not organized. 

and Transitions) Transitions are present
 Logical Progression of ideas with a clear throughout the essay, but Organization is clear.  The transitions between
structure that enhances the thesis.  lacks variety. ideas are unclear or non-
 existent
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Transitions are present at
Transitions are effective and vary times, but there is very
throughout the paragraph, not just in the little variety.
topic sentences.
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 Writing is clear and sentences Writing is clear, but could use a Writing is confusing and
have varied structure,  little more sentence variety to hard to follow. 
Writing is smooth, skillful, and coherent.  Diction is consistent. make the writing more interesting. Contains fragments and/or
run-on sentences.
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Sentences are strong and expressive with

STYLE 
varied structure. 
(Sentence Flow, Variety,
Diction)
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Diction is consistent and words are well

chosen.

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  Punctuation, spelling, and There are only a few (3- 4) errors in Distracting errors in
capitalization are generally punctuation, spelling, and punctuation, spelling, and
Punctuation, spelling, and capitalization correct with few errors (1-2) capitalization. capitalization.
are all correct. 
MECHANICS 
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(Spelling, Punctuation,
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Capitalization)
No errors.

Total Points: _________x 4= _________/100 Points

 BIOGRAPHICAL CRITICISM OF “TO YOU, WHO CANNOT BE NAMED” BY JERICK FEGARIDO

This short letter revolves around the sender's honest feelings towards the unknown receiver, whom the sender considers as the best
thing that happened to him/her. As observed, some of its elements reflect the identity of its author, Jerick Fegarido.

At the end of the letter, the sender identified itself as J. It is the first noticeable thing that's directly referenced to the author since it is
the same with the first letter of the author's first name, Jerick. However, it doesn't mean that the author is the sender. There are no clear
pieces of evidence to justify such claims. The author may have just referenced the sender's name to his real name.

The next thing observed is the author's use of words. Throughout the letter, some of the terms the author used cannot be understood
easily, especially by people who have limited vocabulary. Some of the terms he used were - profligately, salacious, juxtaposition, and
euphoria. The structure of the letter is also well made. The author made use of imageries and figures of speech excellently, such as "It is as
if my life is in the palm of your hands-- you are a God-given calamity.." These evidences shows how accustomed the author is to the
English language that can be reflected in his educational attainment since he's currently taking a Master's degree in English and took BSEd
- Major in English as his degree in college.
 Additionally, the maturity of the content reflects his mature age and personality - as he has mentioned in his resume, he likes to be in
an environment that provides maturity and growth. Having these kinds of exposure could be responsible for his personality's development,
resulting in the letter's mature content.

The letter doesn't trace the author's life experiences but instead reflects his insane familiarity with the English language that he has
honed for years by learning, as we can observe from his piece's overall structure and content.

PLAGIARISM REPORT (GRAMMARLY PREMIUM)

 GENDER CRITICISM OF “TO YOU, WHO CANNOT BE NAMED” BY JERICK FEGARIDO

The letter made by Jerick Fegarido is about the sender longing for their loved one from far away, expressing his/her feelings of love,
agony, and pain while being in love with the receiver. Nevertheless, this kind of letter can be sent or received by either a male or female.

Using the "traditional" basis of identifying masculine and feminine approach, the essence of writing a letter seemed to be on the
masculine side since the male is usually the first one to make the first move, thus creating a letter to the girl/boy he likes. On the contrary,
reading the letter's content showed lines such as "Sensations equal to the juxtaposition of agony and euphoria inflict me whenever I see
you talking to someone," that showed the sender can easily be jealous, and traditionally, it shows femininity. Additionally, the line "It is as if
my life is in the palm of your hands-- you are a God-given calamity" shows a soft side, which is also a feminine action.

There are also times at the letter where lines can be unisex, such as "Words cannot define the feeling of love and despair profligately
burning in my heart," and "The mere utterance of your existence makes my body salacious and disobedient," because it could be wriiten by
either a boy or a girl.

Knowing that the sender has its feminine and masculine side, we can conclude that the writer’s gender is unidentifiable and is
basically genderless. Also, at this present time, any male or female can act "masculine" or "feminine" however they like because it does not
define how "manly" or how "lady-like" a person is. This letter may also be about a homophobic kind of relationship or same-sex relationship.
It just depends on how the sender (J) and the anonymous receiver identify themselves.

In conclusion, love can be shown regardless of gender, whether it is same-sex or the usual man-woman kind of relationship. Indeed,
love has no gender.

PLAGIARISM REPORT (GRAMMARLY PREMIUM)