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Drafting
Lecture 7
Review
• Outline
• Thesis Statement
Thesis Statement
Controlling Thesis
Topic Sub-topics
Idea statement
Creating an Effective Paragraph
Paragraph
Supporting Cohesive
sentences devices
Topic Concluding
sentence sentences
Effective
Paragraph
State the main idea of the paragraph as a
State topic sentence.
an Effective
Paragraph Arrange Arrange the sentences in a logical sequence
to help the reader follow your thoughts.
• Your topic sentence controls only the content and organization of one paragraph.
Good
1
1 detail topic
subject
sentence
Example
• Topic: Civil War • Topic sentence 1: Economic instability is
one major cause of civil war.
• Discusses the thesis statement in detail by breaking it down into smaller ideas
interest…
Least important
Organize your ideas like an
or weakest point
hourglass
• To reemphasize your main ideas/central idea and to close the essay with a
bang
Writing your Conclusion
1. Summarize your main points and restate your thesis using a different
structure and perspective.
2. Consider some possible outcomes or effects.
3. Draw some inferences based on the stated evidence or details. You may
wish to mention another issue that may arise from the evidence.
4. Relate your closing statement to your attention-getter to sandwich the
content of your paper.
Specifications
• Word count: 800-1200 words
• Font: TNR 12
• Size: Letter
• Margins: 1 inch
• Format: PDF
• Filename: SURNAME_Essay2
Improving Style in Writing
Improving Style in Writing
1. Use clear sentences (length and structure).
1. Use clear sentences (length and structure)
Lengthy: The tunnel, which was drilled for 23 miles, runs through a bed of solid chalk under the
English Channel.
Better: The 23-mile tunnel runs through solid chalk under the English Channel.
Lengthy: Chewing gum was introduced to the United States by Antonio Lopez de Santa Ana. He
was a Mexican general.
Better: Mexican general Antonio Lopez de Santa Ana introduced chewing gum to the United
States.
Improving Style in Writing
1. Use clear sentences (length and structure).
2. Avoid unnecessary words in such cases as redundancy, wordiness,
highfalutin language, clichés, and too much “there” and “it” structure.
2. Avoid unnecessary words
Redundant: There were three teachers that taught each and every hour at school today.
Fixed: There were three teachers that taught every hour at school today.
Redundant: Everything being equal, the members of the Student Council will think about the
argument, and come up with a final decision through a vote next week at an open
meeting.
Fixed: The members of the Student Council will have a final decision next week at an
open meeting after a vote.
Improving Style in Writing
1. Use clear sentences (length and structure).
2. Avoid unnecessary words in such cases as redundancy, wordiness,
highfalutin language, clichés, and too much “there” and “it” structure.
3. Use precise words. Never sacrifice clarity for conciseness.
3. Use precise words.
In addition to studying Western culture, students should be required to study
Asian, African, or other cultures. This expanded cultural study would foster
understanding of the modern global community.
The protesters won’t succeed without the support from the military.
The protesters will not succeed without the support from the military.
5. Use appropriate style for formal writing
b. Limit the use of “run-on” expressions.
With the advent of information technology, students should use iPads, laptops,
and the like.
With the advent of information technology, students should use iPads, laptops,
and other academically useful electronic devices.
5. Use appropriate style for formal writing
c. Use more formal negation.
Then the paper must be shredded. The device was invented by Edison
originally.
The paper must then be shredded.
The device was originally invented by
Edison.