WRITING ASSESSMENT REPORT

Name : Tiffany Day/Date : Tuesday, 20th August 2019

Test Code : APT-02 Academic (Final-test) Tutor : 036

TASK 1

Estimated
Criteria Comment(s) Suggestion(s)
Grade

 150 – 190 words

The number of words you have written is 135
words. You must write at least 150 words.
 Provide an overview
You write the overview but it is not complete
since this report is a projection.  Try not to repeating the same words
 Identify main features or phrases, Paraphrase instead.
Task You list some of startling features. However,  It is important to cover all of the key
Achievement 5.5 your progression is not clear. features organisely. Compare the
 Make clear and relevant comparisons first line graph in the second
You compare the data but it is not clear because paragraph and the second graph in
of improper comparison. the third paragraph.
 Give details
You provide some details appropriately.
 Describe the data or stages accurately
The sequence of data is not always appropriate.
 Use the appropriate report format
The paragraph of your writing is clear and neat.

 Organise data logically into paragraphs

You develop your paragraph by comparing the
data, but you do not organize your paragraph
orderly.
 Write at least three paragraphs  Some of your linkers are not
- Introduction and Overall statement appropriate such as “on the other
Coherence - Detailed description Graph 1 hand” which is used to link the
and Cohesion 5.5 - Detail description Graph 2 opposite idea with the previous
 Develop paragraphs logically sentence. Try to explore about the
You develop your paragraph easily and logically connectors and how to use it to
but there is a lack of overall progression. improve your writing skill.
 Use linkers
You use a limited linkers in your writing.
 Write neatly
You handwriting is readable.

6.0  Use a range of vocabulary

You use basic vocabulary from the card
repetitively such as domestic, water usage and
Lexical percentage.
Resources  Use precise vocabulary (academic language,
topic specifc items, less common phrasal verbs
or other idioms
You use words related to topic and related to
question type but mostly using the basic lexical.
 Form parts of speech correctly
 Paraphrase the vocabulary provided
in the visual information to show
that you have good vocabulary.
 There are repetitions such as
population, percentage. You can use
the synonyms such as proportion or
inhabitants. List some academic
 You have mixed control of word formation,
spelling, prepositions, and articles (a, an, the).
 Use appropriate style words and its synonyms to expand
The stlye is academic and it is appropriate. your vocabulary. You can use the
 Use collocation naturally same words only twice.
Some of words collocate unnaturally that causes  Spare a few minutes at the end to
confusing. proofread your report.
 Use spelling correctly
Your spelling is mostly correct.
 Use a range of grammatical structures (complex
verb phrases with modal/passive
verbs/adverbial modifiers, and complex noun
phrases
Complex verbs phrases, complex noun phrases
can be found in your essay.
 Show sentence structures
Grammatical Most sentences are basically simple sentences.
Consider the Plural and Singular forms in
Range and 6.0 To get higher score you need to use complex
writing the sentence/words.
Accuracy sentences.
 Show punctuation and capitalization
The punctuation and capitalization in your text is
mostly correct.
 Show grammatical accuracy
The accuracy of your grammar is frequently
faulty because of using improper part of speech.

Overall : 6.0
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TASK 2

Band
Criteria Comment(s) Suggestion(s)
awarded

 Number of words 250 – 320 words

You have written 278 words in your essay.
It is highly recommended to write 300
words.
 Answers specific question
You understand and discuss the questions.
However, you do not cover all key features
 Introduce the topic
Task You introduce the topic by elaborating the  You must address the task by answering
Response
5.5 typical reality. the questions in the cards (Reasons in
 Establish position with a logical argument support, opposing the policy, and your
Your position in this essay is not clear. position such as agree or disagree)
 Include relevant example  Remember to give a relevant example
You try to justify your answer but it needs to support your argument.
relevant examples related to it.  You must give reasons or examples to
 Draw Conclusion support you main idea.
You conclude your idea by the end of your
essay.

6.0
 Organise data logically into paragraphs
You develop your paragraph by stating the
problems. However, the reasons do not
Coherence support the main argument. Also, some
and Cohesion linkers are inappropriate.
 Write at least four paragraphs
It is highly recommended to follow this
structure
Introduction
- Paraphrase questions  Some of your reasons are confusing. Try
- Thesis Statement to develop your paragraph using TEEEL
- Outline Sentence elements such as Topic Sentence,
Main Body Paragraph 1 Explanation, Evidence, Example and
- State your first viewpoint Link (introduce the next idea by linking
- Discuss first viewpoint it to what you have just said). In a
- Reason why you agree or disagree with paragraph, you can write main idea in
viewpoint the first sentence, followed by the
- Example to support your view supporting sentence and concluding
Main Body Paragraph 2 sentence.
- State your Second viewpoint  The sentence should be about 20-30
- Discuss second viewpoint words. Long sentences will give strain
- Reason why you agree or disagree with to your readers.
viewpoint
- Example to support your view
Conclusion
- Summary
- State which one is better or more
important
You should have followed the structure to
make sure that your paragraph
development is logical.
  Develop paragraphs logically
You are developing your paragraph easily
and logically, but sometimes repetitious.
 Use linkers
You use a range linkers in your writing.
However, some of them are inappropriate
such as “Moreover”.
 Write neatly
You handwriting is readable.
 Use a range of vocabulary
Your vocabulary is sufficient and shows
variant. However, the same words are used
several times that leads to repetition.
 Use precise vocabulary (academic
language, topic specifc items, less common
phrasal verbs or other idioms
You use words related to topic and related
to question type. You use less common  Spare a few minutes at the end to proofread
lexical items such as metropolitan city, your report.
Lexical
6.0 hectic.  Be careful in writing the words, spellings are
Resources
Form parts of speech correctly important.
You have limited control of word formation,
spelling, prepositions, and articles (a, an,
the). Use appropriate style
The stlye is academic and it is appropriate.
 Use collocation naturally
Some of words colocate naturally.
 Use spelling correctly
Your spelling is mostly correct.

 Show a range of grammatical structures

Complex verbs phrases, complex noun
phrases can be found in your essay.
 Show sentence structures
You try to use complex sentences but these
 Use different tenses such as present, past
tend to be less accurate than simple
and future to improve your score.
Grammatical sentences.
 Consider the plural/singular forms.
Range and 5.5  Show ppunctuation and capitalization
 Read some academic lists to improve your
Accuracy The punctuation and capitalization in your
spelling and learn how to use them in
text is mostly correct.
sentences.
 Show grammatical accuracy
The accuracy of your grammar is often
faulty because of using improper part of
speech.

Overall : 6.0