27/05/2021 Cô sửa bài

Quynh Mai:

Tennis is a very popular sport with approximately 87 million tennis players around the world. This sport is not only a sport
or a physical exercise but also an ideal way that professional tennis players can earn a great deal of money as tennis has
become a lucrative business. Furthermore, this business can be supported by many companies in various ways, for
example sponsorship. From my view, tennis is more of a positive development. (Câu này chưa rõ, phải ghi rõ mục
đích của tennis là thể chất hay là kinh tế -> dùng câu chính phụ)

Nhung Nguyen
18:24
Would you like to have a trip full of fun, yet big and unforgettable? A trip to Everest Camp - the highest mountain in the
world, will offer you the most breathtaking views, extreme challenges, and unique memories that you will ever experience.

Phát Cao Đức Tấn

18:24
Swimming is a great activity for people of all ages. It's not only improving physical health but also boosting mental health.
Do you know that the Australian choose swimming as one of their most favorite sports? The main given reason is that
people can continue for a lifetime because of its being a low-impact workout. Let's find out how swimming can provide
such wonderful benefits & why it's suitable for everyone.

Thiên Phúc Ngô

18:24
As a result of the environment problems which have resulted from traditional dependence on fossil fuels, some countries
have invested in alternative energy sources. Although there are some dangers in this new approach, I believe that the
benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

Quang Le
18:24
Music is a beautiful form of art. William Shakespeare says: “If music be the food of love, play on, Give me excess of it;
that surfeiting, The appetite may sicken, and so die.” It has played an important role in people’s daily life for various
reasons.

Nguyen Nguyen hoang dong

18:25
Jobs at home such as writer, freelancer, editor, etc. become more well-known and play a more (dùng more thì phía sau
phải có than hoặc phải đổi cấu trúc) important role in the economy, especially in the Covid-19 pandemic. Working as a
freelancer helps me not only address standards of living but also protect my health in this difficulty (dịch không phải là
khó khăn). This essay will show the benefits of a freelancer job and some tips to avoid the possible disadvantages.

DUONG PHAN THI THUY

18:27
Where will you go on your next vacation? How do you think about Sapa? According to the Table of Contents of
bestpricestravel.com, although Sapa is at number 2 in the ranking, it is the best mountain town in the Northwest that
should not miss in Vietnam. Most people who live in the South of Vietnam, where the average annual temperature is
higher than 27Celcius degree, think of Da Lat as the best choice for their vacation destination to come to a place
that is cooler and more comfortable than where they live (câu quá dài dòng, dài lê thê). For me, I prefer to travel to
Sapa because of some reasons such as its breathtaking landscape and absolutely its fresh environment beside its special
culture from diverse ethnic monitors. (bài này phải đưa câu Đà Lạt lên trên và đưa Sapa xuống thì mới theo logic)
Yến Phương
18:28
Topic #5: Write a hook sentence about the most exciting vacation destination
Having a vacation to Thailand is sure to change your life! Two years ago, right after I graduated from high school, I took a
trip to Thailand with my family. The beautiful country was amazing in so many ways but one thing that took me by surprise
was the people there. Those two weeks full of fun spent with my family was one of the most amazing and memorable
experience of my life.

Nhật Mai Đình Xuân

18:30
Topic #3: Write a hook sentence about the problem of pollution that will motivate people to do something.
Thanks to consumerism, every year people buy, consume and generate billions tones of trash which are then thrown
away into the environment without any plans for disposal or treatment. Most of that waste is solid and hardly-
biodegradable in natural conditions. That leads to the problem that not only our resources of landfills, water and air are
extremely poisoned; but also the existence of that waste is solid and hardly-biodegradable in natural condition.

That leads to the problem that not only our resources of landfills, water and air are extremely poisoned; but also the
existence of other living creatures in our ecosystem are threatened.

For that reason, people have to change their behaviors. Instead of buying goods without thinking, we with environmental
responsibility should put a bit more consideration into our purchasing decision process to choose something that is really
eco-friendly. Thus, we need to understand what exactly are eco-friendly products. (viết hay nhưng chưa thấy trọng tâm
muốn viết) bị lỗi dùng đại từ, lúc thì people lúc thì we, our nên thống nhất 1 đại từ thôi

Phú Trần Xuân

18:30
Topic “Pick a career and write a hook sentence that will get the reader as excited about that career path as you are”
According to the Business News “the percentage of unemployment has increased from 10% to 12% in the last decade”.
That makes almost all of the students wonder if they should keep learning at university or find jobs after graduating high
school (hơi lạc đề, nên đưa ra một job cụ thể và khuyên ngta tại sao nên chọn job đó). I suppose that going on studying at
college will help the students to have a lot of beneficial opportunities in their jobs.

Linh Nguyễn
18:32
Topic: A destination for holiday
Everyone wants to have a rest after busy days with affairs?. And we have many choices to travel (câu thứ 1 và câu thứ 2
không liền mạch nhau), not only abroad (noun) but also internal (cái này là tính từ) => 2 từ này ko song song với nhau vì
không cùng loại. But, Vietnam have many wonderful place for our discovery. Especially, Da Nang is a great destination
which has delicious food, friendly citizens and many huge entertainment parks. Da Nang will make the visitor feel very
comfortable for your holiday. (visitor và your không cùng đại từ)

Nhi Van
18:37
Topic #5: Write a hook sentence about the most exciting vacation destination
Are you a travel holic? Have you ever experienced a adventurous journey? Last year, I had a trip to a mountainous area
and that was so wonderful that I will never forget. I am mentioning Ta Nang-Phan Dung trekking route and that is
Vietnam’s most attractive route for those who are in love with outdoor adventure.
Linh Dang
18:39
Topic: destination for holiday
Singapore, which is located in South East Asia, is known as one of the Four Asian economic Tigers. It is one of the most
smallest and the most densely populated countries in the world. Singapore today is the best destination for tourism
because of its clean environment, cultural diversity and wonderful architectures.

kieu vo thi
18:43
Topic: Write a hook sentence about the problem of pollution that will motivation people to do something about it?
The environment is so important to people. In 2019, Ho Chi Minh city was polluted environment Ho Chi Minh city’s
environment was polluted .Especially, air pollution reached hazardous level., such as pollution from vehicle, car,
motorbike, factory and so on. What did The Chairman of Ho Chi Minh city and citizent do? (tại sao phải đưa về 2019 nên
viết ở hiện tại vì vấn đề này vẫn còn tồn tại tới bây giờ)

hồng quân trương

18:48
TopIc : the exciting vacation destination.
The coastal city Quy Nhon is attracted (bị động => sai) is attractive to many visitors every year. This town is in Binh Dinh
province which is located in Vietnam’s south central coastal region. This area has got a long beautiful coastline in
Vietnam. The coastline of Quy Nhon is forty-two kilometers which is includeding pristine beaches, lush mountains, and
tranquil islands. When the summer comes, this is the best time to take an exciting vacation on to Quy Nhon.

BODY PARAGRAPH
Ghi ra 3 ý chính để triển khai trong thân bài

Quang Le
Topic: The importance of music in people's lives
1. Music helps bring people from various cultures and generations together.
2. Music can help improve your mood.
3. Music is good for human brain.

Minh Khoa Vương

[Hook] What are the 3 effects of climate change?.....
[Body 1] First of all, the change of climate leads to negative effects on human health.
[Body 2] Secondly, this climate issue affects unfavorably the living environment of the inhabitants.
[Body 2] Thirdly, the natural environment is threatened by the impacts of climate change.

Phát Cao Đức Tấn

Topic: Swimming is great activity for people
Swimming brings many benefits to physical and mental health.
Swimming is a low-impact workout- because of not requiring strength.
Swimming is a sport for all age groups because of being easy to learn.
Phú Trần Xuân
Topic: Keep studying or find jobs.
Topic sentence 1: First of all, students choosing to study at university are trained by the experts or professors in their
major.
Topic sentence 2: Students will have opportunities in the professional and dynamic internship.
Topic sentence 3: Certificate is the critical evidence to prove their employers the study process.

DUONG PHAN THI THUY

Topic: travel destination
The first reason why I want to travel to Sapa is because its landscape and environment is really beautiful and fresh.
The second reason that makes me very excited is there are various interesting activities in Sapa such as trekking, taking
photos and especially riding motorbikes around its outstanding route.
In addition, the diverse culture from many ethnic groups is one more reason that attracts me to come to Sapa for my trip
on vacation in the near future.?

Nhi Van
Topic #5: Write a hook sentence about the most exciting vacation destination
1: general information: place, how to get there, weather (3 cái ý này đã có thể ghi thành 3 câu chủ đề được, nên đổi lại)
2: how the destination looks like
3: reasons for being an exciting destination

Nhung Nguyen
20:32
Topic: an exciting  vacation destination ( Everest Mountain)
Three main supporting ideas: 1. Climbing Everest challenges us both physical and mentally.
2. The ashtonishing view of Everest can be found nowhere else thanks to its unique characteristics.
3. This highest mountain certainly offers you the world-class memorable experience.

kieu vo thi
Topic: Write a hook sentence about the problem of pollution that will motivation people to do something about it. (đây là
dạng problem-solution nên viết theo bạn này thì không được)
1.The government encourage people to plant trees in the city.
2. The inspectors(phải chỉnh lại là chính quyền chứ thanh tra ko thể phạt được) of city should trickly punish acts of
releasing air pollution.
3. People should use public transport instead of private transport.

Nguyen Nguyen hoang dong

Jobs at home such as writer, freelancer, editor, etc. become more well-known and play a more important role in the
economy than the pre-Covid-19 pandemic. Working as a freelancer helps me not only address standards of living but also
protect my health from the infection of this pandemic. This essay will show the benefits of a freelance job and some tips to
avoid the possible disadvantages. First of all, the freelancer is freedom and it has the flexibility of Hours Second, it is easy
for a freelancer to balance between life and work However, working at home can cause stress problems as freelancers
almost have no chance to communicate with others.

Linh Dang
1. The government of Singapore has issued strict laws on environmental awareness.
2. With three major ethnic communities– the Chinese, Indians, and Malays, Singapore has many diverse cultures.
3. Singapore not only has colonial buildings but also has amazing modern architecture
Linh Nguyễn
Da Nang has a temperature climate. The atmosphere is always warm and fresh.
Food in Da Nang is very variety and delicious
Many famous places is referred to journalists' idea around the world.

Yến Phương
Topic #5: Write a hook sentence about the most exciting vacation destination
1. The capital of Thailand, Bangkok, is for most visitors the first point of contact to Thailand.
2. Phuket is home to some of the country's most visited beaches and is a popular destination for a beach vacation…
3. One of the most memorable experience might be in Chiang Mai. You can explore or be active in many other spots in
the Chiang Mai area, e.g. trekking in the jungle, including hot springs, waterfalls, festivals