Jose Chavez

Katia Monterrey

ENGL 5-74

18 July 2021

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I have learned a few things and have practiced a lot of my writing during this summer

course. The course started out rough for me especially with having to write the literacy

autobiography approximately that first week we were introduced into the class. I also had troub e

with the research essay, but just like every other essay I have done, I managed, wrote it and

learned a few things afterwards. All of these skills I have learned have really made it easier to

write essays, review them, revise them, but overall just improved my literacy academics. In the
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beginning of the course, we were shown the main goals of the course and what we expected out

of it. I feel that throughout the course I have completed some of those goals and that my progress

has shown throughout the essays I have written.

We started the course with writing our diagnostic essay which asked us what were our

thoughts on the theory of writing and our process in writing. After reviewing the feedback I was

given on it, it was very clear that I did not read the instructions correctly and did not put much

effort into it. What I mean by that is that I did not structure the essay correctly, had no main idea,
write an acceptable
had no thesis, and had no revision done on it. It was clear that in order to
that knowledge into
essay, I had to do all of these things before submitting the essay. I then put
wrote paragraphs that were
the literacy essay we did by creating a structure in the essay. I
that by creating a strategy of
coherent and made sense. I then had to revise my work and I did
sense of what the reader was
reviewing the work by not viewing the work as mine, so I can get a
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what 1 got
given peers to review each other's essay and
going to read. In this essay we were also
better
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good but it needed work on wording, needed
from my peer review was that the essay was
was a big
Overall, I would say there
vocabulary and I also plan to keep on using that suggestion.
structure of the essay and
improvement between those two essays by improving the length, the

also applying the feedback I was given which helped and it is helping me.
based on an
After doing those two essay's, we were instructed to write a research paper
requirement
issue in our communities. We were given a rubric so we had a word count and page

we had to reach, so length was not an issue in this essay. I went off the structure of putting my

main idea in the intro paragraph which in previous essay's, I did not clearly state. When

presented about this mistake, I really wanted to make sure that my main point was obvious and i

the beginning of the essay which is what I tried to do with this essay. Before typing the research

paper, we had to create a citation paper in which we stated what our website sources were and

did that in a specific format. When doing this, I learned the placement of each piece of

information that would go into the citation and also learned where that citation page would go in

an essay. After completing the research essay, I realized that previous feedback I was given was

crucial in improving my essay. I went back and analyzed my writing, looking for words I could

improve, made sure my thesis was clear, and that my structure made sense and that it was

comprehensive. I would say that my improvement in writing was not the only thing that got

better over time, but also my lifestyle which then reflects on my writing.

On day two of the class, we got presented with the syllabus of the class which had all the

information we needed to know about the class. The most important part of the syllabus was the

goals that this course was trying to reach and teach. Goal one has to do with how the community

shaped the way we read, write, and also view things; we did this by writing the literacy essay,
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and in that essay we had to describe how

our literacy has improved which was through school,
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TION home, and community. Goal tw is
about demonstrating how a writer's language depicts their
identity or personality. Sometimes it is
easy to depict a writer's personality based on how much
detail they would describe about themselves
but other times it would take a reader a while to
evaluate what personality the writer may have
by seeing a pattern in the author's writing over
time. Throughout the English course, we have written three essays in which you could see a

pattern in my vocabulary and the way I would word sentences and with seeing that, there can b

an assumption of my identity. For example, I use a lot of simple phrases like " a while" or " we

were" and that displays the effort I am putting into the writing which is not a lot and can lead

someone to think I am lazy in my work. I do take note of this and that is why I use synonyms for

words and phrases so I can sound knowledgeable in what I write. oal three 1 about revising

your own work along with taking note of what your writing process is and if it is effective in

making your writing better. We have done this multiple times during this course by doing a sel

assessment on our literacy autobiography.We had to revise our own first draft and figure out

what we could improve on; and I did that by improving the vocabulary, rewriting sentences and

just making it make the most sense. Another example would be providing feedback to others on

their essay's. When I did this, I compared some of the grammar that was used and it made me

realize that even after a self assessment, there was still room for improvement in my own essay

and I went back and did just that. oal four •s about writing persuasive text in all forms and also

showing an understanding of your work. Persuasive text would be shown by using specific

vocabulary to express what you are trying to say and showing an understanding of your work

would be shown by proving that you understand what was assigned by showing it in your

writing. The only persuasive text I have written would be this assignment and so far I would say
that throughout the course, there have been changes in vocabulary and it all has been for the

better After reviewing all four goals, I can confidently say that from the start of the summer

course to now, there has been improvement in my writing.

After reviewing all four goals, I can say that the goals that have been presented, have also

been completed and this can be seen throughout the improvements of my essayg. These

improvements span from the beginning of the essay in which the thesis and main idea should

generally be, all the way to the end of an essay where the thesis should be restated and at times

where the cited sources should be. There can always be room for improvement in every aspect o

life, but improving my literacy not only affects my life right now, it also affects how well I

would be in my career choice and also future assignments.

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