Final writing exam template and backup

NAME: Marco Alejandro Hernández Díaz GROUP: 15

Writing exam prompt: Metropolitan cities such as Dubai are growing at alarming rates and the infrastructure of these
cities is transforming rapidly. The construction of luxury apartments and shopping malls is also
making it hard for local people to make a living.

1. Plan the outline of your essay (use key words only; not paragraphs nor complete lines) - 15 minutes

Hook
Introduction

Issue
Background (2 causes of 1.
the issue) 2.
Thesis Statement (Main
problem + 2 sub-problems)

Sub problem 1

Explanation/Supporting detail 1
Body paragraph 1

Example 1

Who?
Solution 1 What?
How?

Resulting sentence

Sub problem 2

Explanation/Supporting detail 2
Body paragraph 2

Example 2

Who?
Solution 2 What?
How?

Resulting sentence
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2. Write the complete essay based on your outline You should write 360-400 words (between 90 to 100 in each
paragraph) - 45 minutes

Writing exam prompt: Metropolitan cities such as Dubai are growing at alarming rates and the infrastructure
of these cities is transforming rapidly. The construction of luxury apartments and
shopping malls is also making it hard for local people to make a living.

What’s bad about sprawl is not is uniformity but that it is uniformly bad
- James Kunstler
The urban sprawl is a problem that has been rising in Dubai and other metropolitan cities. It
Introduction is caused by the growing population and industrialization itself. Its main idea is not bad, but
there should exist laws and regulations to control urban growth, its not-controlled
industrialization and, if possible, the overpopulation of these cities.

First of all, we have overpopulation. Dubai, as an example, has grown in population steadily

over the past two centuries, from just a few thousand local inhabitants to well over 2.9
millions. This causes the need to expand and create new places for people to live in. But
Body Paragraph 1 without the proper planning, this will only cause more damage for both the people and the
envinroment. The only possible would be for the Ministry of Education to teach people the
dangers of that constant growing, by designing new programs for both young and adult
people. That way, with less needing of homes, less expansion would be needed.

On the other hand, we have industrialization. The companies desire expansion to earn more
money, and they want it at the lowest possible cost, which is usually expanding towards the
outer sides of cities. So, the Ministry of Public Works should work on better logistics,
Body Paragraph 2 designing a sustainable plan to allow urban growth without causing dangerous side effects.
Doing all of this would solve many problems.

So, in short, with enough regulations and control over industry and population, the urban
growth should be no problem. If population growth can be controlled, and also companies
stop expanding towards outer sides of cities without previous studies, all the sprawl
Conclusion problems could be avoided.

3. Submit your essay at Virtual Sabana (Copy and paste each paragraph in the quiz, without the outline and
without the charts or template -just the text) - Week 14

Appendix: Checklist (You may fill this out to make sure you have addressed all the required points)
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  Essay parts Yes No
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  Introduction    
I1 Hook is clear, appropriate and appealing.    
I2 Issue is clear and well paraphrased (based on writing prompt).    
I3 Background presents two concrete causes (not consequences).    
Thesis is formed with the main issue + two concrete derived subproblems
I4
expressed with negative connotation.    
  Body paragraph 1    
The first suproblem is clearly introduced using alternative wording (no
BP1-1
repetition from the introduction) in a complete sentence.    
There is a clear explanation that provides more concrete details on the
BP1-2
subproblem.    
BP1-3 There is a pertinent example that illustrates a case from a real life situation.    
The WHO? shows the agent of change or the entity that can/should take
BP1-4
action (not the same people involved)    
The WHAT? shows a well-thought course of action (not simplistic, copied or
BP1-5
common sense actions)    
The HOW? clearly proposes how the proposed action can be achieved (in a
BP1-6
very concrete way).    
The result informs what can be expected to happen with the subproblem
BP1-7
(improvement, control, reduction, reflection…)    
  Body paragraph 2    

BP2-1 The second suproblem is clearly introduced using alternative wording (no
repetition from the introduction) in a complete sentence.    
There is a clear explanation that provides more concrete details on the
BP2-2
subproblem.    
BP2-3 There is a pertinent example that illustrates a case from a real life situation.    
The WHO? shows the agent of change or the entity that can/should take
BP2-4
action (not the same people involved)    
The WHAT? shows a well-thought course of action (not simplistic, copied or
BP2-5
common sense actions)    
The HOW? clearly proposes how the proposed action can be achieved (in a
BP2-6
very concrete way).    
The result informs what can be expected to happen with the subproblem
BP2-7
(improvement, control, reduction, reflection…)    
  Conclusion    
The thesis was restated either paraphrasing it or changing the order of its
C1
parts.    
A summary of solutions is provided in a complete statement avoiding
C2
repetition of full fragments already stated above.    

C3 A summary of doers/entitiies/agents of change is provided in a complete

statement avoiding repetition of most words already stated above.    
The final statement is a strong final remark on what is expected to happen
C4 to the main issue (not the subproblems) if the suggested course of actions
is taken.