THE ART OF

INFORMATIONAL
WRITING
Ms. Esa
3-309
Unit 2
I CAN ELABORATE TO ADD
DETAILS TO MY WRITING.
Which passage do you prefer?
Passage A
L&B Spumoni Gardens (a.k.a
L&B) is a pizzeria-restaurant in
Brooklyn, NY. One of the
things this restaurant is most
famous for is their distinctive
Sicilian pies. Their Sicilian pies
are one of the reasons for
leaving L&Bs on the map for
over 80 years!
Passage B
L&B Spumoni Gardens (a.k.a L&B)
is a pizzeria-restaurant in Brooklyn,
NY. One of the things this
restaurant is most famous for is
their distinctive Sicilian pies. One
distinctive characteristic of their
Sicilian pizza is the way it’s
layered. At L&Bs their Sicilian pizza
begins with a thick fluffy dough
and crunchy crust around the
edges, followed by a layer of
cheese first, then a layer of their
savory and slightly sweet tomato
sauce. Their Sicilian pies are one
of the reasons for leaving L&Bs on
the map for over 80 years!
Mentor text: Deadliest Animals by Melissa
Stewart

Let’s look at our mentor text and see

if we can identify the different ways
Melissa Stewart elaborates her work.
Different Elaboration Tools to Include
in Informational Writing
• Quotations – quoting direct facts from another
source
• Descriptions – describe what’s taking place using HINT: These
words
adjectives would be
found in

• Vocabulary words – words that aren’t used your

glossary

commonly in normal everyday conversations, but it

relates to your topic
• Lists – a series of words, numbers, or features
• Punctuation - colon, dashes, parentheses,
exclamation points
 Task: Revise one of your chapters that needs elaboration

When revising a chapter ask yourself:

• What is missing in this chapter?

• Have I introduced what I’m going to talk

about in the first sentence?

• How can I give the reader more information

in this chapter?

• What details should I add?

• Am I repeating information?