Overall:6.

5
TA: 6
Bố cục bài tương đối tốt, đoạn văn nói về reasons tương đối ổn. Tuy nhiên, đối với đoạn nói
về solutions em đọc lại nxet của c nhé.
CC: 7
Em có cố gắng tạo được complex sentences, tuy nhiên 1 số câu quá dài khiến việc đọc hiểu
sẽ khó khăn hơn và độ flow chưa được mạch lạc.
LR: 7
Có cố gắng sử dụng uncommon words, tuy nhiên còn nhiều từ em cần paraphrase nhiều
hơn: species - animals,living creatures; a number of - quantity of, proportion of, a variety of.
GA: 6

Why are there so many endangered species? Give the reasons what
individuals and the government should do to save endangered
species? Remember to make an outline before writing your essay.

In these days and ages, a wide range of species being in danger of extinction is
one of the most pressing problems. This essay will examine the main causes of
the loss of certain species stemming from pollution made by humans and
provide some possible solutions to this phenomenon for the government and
individuals.

Some reasons could be counted as being responsible for the rise of endangered
species but the origin of this situation could be traced back to human activities
activity. It is because Humans usually build industrial factories in a wide-open
space, often nearly where the atmosphere is species are populated, which and
that could gradually leads to a large number of contaminants being discharged
into the sea, thereby contaminating groundwater and rivers or lakes as well as
deteriorating water quality. As a result, those activities have a pernicious effect
on animals and prevent make certain species from consuming unable to drink
clean water to survive, therefore threatening wildlife species with extinction.

Despite its severity, several measures could be taken by both the government and
individuals to minimize the number of endangered species. Firstly, the
government could impose a curb on illegal hunting and trade. This can be done
by organizing more guards to protect endangered species against extinction and
having have stricter law enforcement for poaching and illegal hunting, which
could act as a deterrent for people to other would-be illegal hunters or would be
likely to infringe the regulation. Secondly, individuals should avoid buying
products made from certain species such as koalas to meet their daily demand
for clothes or medicine and maintain their lavish lifestyle. What is more, people
can raise money and volunteer for the conservation club to deter endangered
species from dying out.

In conclusion, the large quantity number of species being at risk of extinction

being extinct accounted for human activities, especially the contaminants
emitted from several factories. Nevertheless, its spin-off can still be controlled by
viable solutions.