ESSAY :

Some people believe that the government should take care of old
people and provide financial support after they retire. Others
say individuals should save during their working years to fund
their own retirement. 
BÀI LÀM :
While people think that the elderly should be looked after and given financial
assistance after they retire, others say that each other needs to put aside their
money for their old age. Personally, I believe that the government should
spend a proportion of the budget on elderly care but senior citizens
themselves need to put aside money for their own sake.
To begin with, some people are convinced about the government have a duty
to be concerned about senior citizens as they have contributed to society when
they were young and have been in a bad health condition. Firstly, the poor
tend to do hard manual labor to earn money when they are getting older.
However, there are limited opportunities for them to find a job due to their
declining health. As a result, they are no longer many old people run into
financial difficulties. Secondly, the old have spent their entire life working
and have contributed part of their income to the governments’ prosperity. For
example, in covid 19 pandemics, many people who have been worked
working as doctors or polices have been having social responsibility for
dealing with serious diseases. Check ngữ pháp đoạn này em nhé
For example, these few years, during the Covid 19 pandemic, many people
who have been working as doctors or polices, risking their lives to protect the
safety of citizens. Therefore, in their old age, they deserve to be supported
financially by the government.
On the other hand, I believe that the elderly should be independent and set
aside their money rather than depend on the government due to the lack of
government assistance and for their own sake. In the first place, the state
budget is not only for elderly’s financial supports but also for health care
standards, modern technology and, salary for workers. (khi nối giữa các ý ta
có A, B and C, hai ý cuối liên kết bằng and nha). Consequently, senior
citizens could get a limited amount of government funding which is leads to
an uncomfortable life. Furthermore, without any subsidy, the senior cannot do
whatever they want. / Hoặc Furthermore, having their own savings, the senior
can do whatever they want without having to wait for monthly allowance. For
example, they can use their own money travelling to enjoy many breathtaking
sceneries in the world. Especially when they are in emergency, they can come
to the hospital and pay for their hospital fee to have an examination and
treatment.
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In conclusion, the elderly should take care of themselves first and not too
depend on the government or children due to lack of budget and that way,
they can enjoy life more. However, it’s society and government’s
responsibility to be concerned about them since they could no longer earn a
living and they have worked hard enough their whole life. Nevertheless, there
are more ways to support elderly life through preferential policies at public
services, not only financially.