Ticket Id: 269661

Saturday, March 05, 2022

You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of
working conditions in the office. write a letter to your manager

describe the health problem

explain why you think it was caused by condition in the office

suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

Dear Mr Smith,

Iam writing regarding a health problem I have recently been suffering. Although Iam pleased for all facilities in my office, my Comment [WU1]: I am
table’s height is not suitable for me and results in severe back pain. Comment [WU2]: suffering from
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In fact, Iam a tall person, having to sit for a long time, and bending over the table which is a improper posture for sitting. I had
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never experienced backache during my working life until I received this new table on January 12th 2022. I have met
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physiotherapist, and he said I have to correct my sitting style promptly.
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I would like to suggest that the authority of HSE (Health, Safety, executive) replace my table with the ergonomic table, proper Comment [WU7]: an

for tall persons. I also propose that we could adapt the room 12 (which is rarely used) to the exercise room, with some sport Comment [WU8]: have

facilities. These are straightforward steps which would make me so grateful indeed. Comment [WU9]: people
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Thank you for your attention to this important matter.

Kind Regards,

Fatemeh khoshroo

Evaluation Report

Word Count 159

Comments The candidate has met the basic requirements of task
achievement. The structure of the letter is fine and there are
sufficient paragraphs to deal with each of the prompts. The
range of vocabulary allows the writer to communicate the
exact meanings of what they are trying to convey. Overall
the control of grammar and punctuation is good, with only a
few errors made.
Estimated Band Score 6.5
Task achievement Coherence/Cohesion Lexical resource Grammar & Accuracy
7.0 7.0 6.0 6.0
Suggestions 1. Revise grammar.
2. Learn more vocabulary and improve choice of words.
3. Use synonyms to avoid repetition.
4. Replace long sentences with shorter ones.
5. Always proofread the task response after finishing it.
6. Keep practicing to improve your performance.
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