Republic of the Philippines

Department of Education
Regional Office IX, Zamboanga Peninsula
Division of Zamboanga del Sur

LAPUYAN NATIONAL HIGH SCHOOL

Enriched MELC
Grade 12 HUMSS CREATIVE NON- FICTION
QUARTER 2
Using the Literary Conventions of a Genre in
Writing
ACTIVITY SHEETS- 4 (LAS)
Most Essential Learning Competency:
Revise the draft based on desirable qualities of well- written
creative non- fiction

Name of Learner:___________________________
Grade & Section:___________________________
Name of School: ___________________________

Target
Content

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Many students commit mistakes in revising the draft of their paper. Not only are their
papers often filled with typographical errors and other problems, but they lack the
benefits of a fundamental stage in the writing process: revision.
Mechanics, clarity, chronology, appropriateness and effectiveness are some of the
aspects that we consider whenever we are revising our works. Revising helps us
improve our work to attain the objectives as to why we are writing a certain literary
piece.
In this lesson, you are expected to revise your draft produced in the previous lesson
considering the clarity of idea, appropriateness of choice of literary element,
appropriateness use of the element and effective combination of the idea and the
chosen literary element to come up with a short piece using any of the literary
conventions of genre.

Review
Activity 1:
Instruction: Write T if the statement is true and F if it is false. Write your answer in
your notebook.
1. What differentiates memoir from autobiography is that it deals with only a slice, a
portion or event in your life, rather than your whole life.
2. Diary follows a 3rd Person Point of View.
3. Memoir follows a 3rd Person Point of View.
4. An autobiography/biography most of the time is logically sequenced and contains
sequence words such as first, later, next, and finally.
5. An anecdote is an important part of a diary.
6. In writing a memoir, collapsing characters or events that are not important to your
stories theme will help you concentrate on the people and events that are important.
7. Biography follows a 3rd Person Point of View.
8. Autobiography follows a 1st Person Point of View.
9. Diary writing should focus on a specific theme or lesson, and every compelling story
included in a good memoir should support that theme.
10. Memoir should include comparatives and superlatives to make writing clearer.

Discover

At the point when we reconsider our composition, we accept the open door to step
back and re-imagine it. We consider the objectives of the paper if we have achieved
these objectives. We guarantee that our thoughts are obviously communicated and all
around upheld. Also, we verify that mistakes of punctuation and style do not take
away from our work or make it appear that the paper was arranged properly.
Analyze
Activity 2.

Arrange the steps in revising a draft based on the provided steps below. Write
numbers 1-4 to determine the process. Write your answers in your notebook.
_____ 1. Check the transitions used in a text.
_____ 2. Skim the paragraphs and identify the main ideas.
_____ 3. Determine if the paragraphs help the main ideas.
_____ 5. Scan the mechanics of the text.

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 Enrichment Activity
In evaluating a nonfiction piece, the following are considered: clarity of idea,
appropriate choice of literary element, appropriate use of the element and effective
combination of the idea and the chosen literary element. The following are common
nonfiction texts (autobiography, biography, memoir and diary) and the ways of
creating and evaluating them.

Autobiography/Biography
A. Clarity of Idea
• The autobiography/biography should be logically sequenced and contains
sequence words such as first, later, next, and finally.
• It should begin with a strong lead that grabs readers’ attention, such as
something unexpected, a quote, dialogue, or a question.
• Should include comparatives and superlatives to make writing clearer
particularly for biographies.
• It should use descriptive words to tell about people, places, events, and ideas.
• Should have strong ending that makes the reader think about the subject’s life.
B. Appropriate Choice of Literary Element
• Elements of autobiography/biography includes: Characters, Setting, Details,
Chronological Order, Point of View (POV) and Author’s purpose.
C. Appropriate Use of the Element
• Characters should be well developed in detail and are true-to-life.
• Setting should be described vividly/clearly.
• Writers use objective details, subjective details and anecdotes.
o Objective details can be proved.
o Subjective details are based on personal feeling and opinions and cannot be
proved.
o Anecdotes are short, often humorous, stories that enliven writing and
illustrate a point.
• POV should be 1st Person (I, me, my, mine, us, we, our & ours) for autobiography
and 3rd Person (he, him, his, she, her, they, their & them) for biography.
• Author’s purpose is the author’s reason for writing may it be to credit people who
influenced the subject, to explain or to justify the actions of the subject, to give sense
of the events in the lives of the subject and to communicate an important personal
statement about life.
D. Effective Combination of the Idea and the Chosen Literary Element
• Sequence words should be adhered with the chronology of the
autobiography/biography.
• Characters are given necessary descriptions as to their role on the subject’s life
and not their personal details irrelevant to the autobiography/biography of the
subject.
• Setting is given a thorough description on how it played an important role or
influence to the subject.
• Author’s purpose is well crafted based on the conditions mentioned above.

Memoir
A. Clarity of Idea
• What differentiates memoir from autobiography is that it deals with only a slice, a
portion or event in your life, rather than your whole life. Memoir is a story within the
story of your life. Stay focused on your chosen topic. Avoid meandering off in another
direction.

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 • Collapsing characters or events that are not important to your stories theme will
help you concentrate on the people and events that are important.
• Who are you writing for? If it is family and friends then inside jokes and vaguer
references can be used. But, if you want anyone to be able to read • your memoir don’t
refer to something they have no record of and will not understand.
B. Appropriate Choice of Literary Element
• Elements of memoir includes: Theme, POV, Emotional beats, Supporting stories,
Personal style & Honesty.
C. Appropriate Use of the Element
• Theme - There must be one overall key point that is being conveyed to the reader.
Memoir writing should focus on a specific theme or lesson, and every compelling story
included in a good memoir should support that theme. • POV – Memoirs are in 1st
person POV (I, me, my, mine, us, we, our & ours). • Emotional beats – The best
memoirs take the reader on an emotional journey. Writing in the first-person point of
view allows you to not only tell your story but to relay the emotional impact of each
specific memory. Readers want to experience your emotional arc alongside your
narrative arc. • Supporting stories - Writing memoirs involves plumbing the depths of
your real-life story and presenting those key events with honesty and transparency.
That’s why one of the essential elements of a memoir is gathering supporting stories
from other sources. If your memoir is a coming of age story about your youth, it may
be helpful to interview your friends or family members who were around you at the
time. You may find that they remember events differently than you do or have
additional stories that can help flesh out your manuscript. • Personal style - Writing
memoirs is an opportunity to tell a story from your life, but it’s also a chance to tell
that story in a way that nobody else can. That’s where your personal writing style
comes in. Each page should be filled with your own personality and point of view. Your
style might be tonal: When people read a David Sedaris memoir, they can be sure to
expect some of his signature humor. Your writing style might be more formalistic in
nature. Perhaps you present the events of your memoir out of chronological order,
relying on flashbacks and flash-forwards to destabilize the reader. Only you know your
personal style, and it should be present in every line. • Honesty - One of the defining
characteristics of a memoir is brutal honesty. Remember, readers pick up a memoir
expecting a true story. Readers are smart. They can tell if something in your memoir
feels untrue. If they suspect that the events in the memoir are false, it can
permanently damage the relationship between author and reader. That’s why you
must be willing to tell your story in an unflinching and honest way.
D. Effective Combination of the Idea and the Chosen Literary Element
• Theme should be well founded by providing details that will lead the readers to
what the theme really is.
• A good memoir could cause a contagion of feelings, from writer to reader, when it
is well-written.
• Readers would know when something seems off in a memoir so it’s better to be
honest and be straight to the point from start to finish to avoid your memoir from
being vague.
• Consistency of personal style throughout the entire memoir would leave a good
mark to a reader.

Diary
A. Clarity of Idea
• The entry should be inviting, thoroughly states the main events that have been
encountered by the character and includes several interesting details. • Details
should be effectively placed in a logical order and the way they should be presented
follows 1st person point of view.
B. Appropriate Choice of Literary Element

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 • Elements/features of a diary includes: Heading, Body, Interference, POV, Figure
of Speech & Signature.
C. Appropriate Use of the Element
• Heading – date on which the diary entry is made.
• Body – should be detailed and comprehensive content.
• Interference – logical guess based on information from the text.
• POV – should be 1st POV, shown by the use of pronouns such as I and me
express the personal thoughts feelings of the writer.
• Figure of Speech – may include simile, ellipse or personification.
• Signature – needed for authenticity.
D. Effective Combination of the Idea and the Chosen Literary Element
• Date (heading) and signature should not be forgotten at all times to verify the
time period and authenticity of your diary.
• Using figure of speech is quite tricky so it should be well-thought of before using
it in a diary.
• A detailed and comprehensive content means free from vague and irrelevant
statements.

Example:
Autobiography of a Student
My name is Elizabeth Austen. I was born on May 2, 2002 in Marseille, France. I
was raised as a child of two cultures: American and French. Although my parents
were born in the USA, they left for Marseille after their wedding because of career
goals. My father is a translator, and my mother is an art consultant, so the
atmosphere of our house was creative and artistic.
It was difficult for me to make friends with French peers. That’s why I have always
communicated with adults who were my parents’ friends or colleagues. Since
childhood, I have had a thirst for knowledge and new discoveries, and elder friends
were happy to share their memories and life experiences with a little, curious girl.
I have a talent for learning languages and studying art. That’s not surprising
taking into account my environment. When I was a teenager, I dreamed of becoming a
writer. I still store my notebooks as a memory about my first drafts.
Later on, I understood that my heart belongs to art. I spent much time in my
mother’s office listening to her impromptu lectures about famous paintings. Her
lessons along with her stories about the USA have inspired me to go to the United
States and attend the California College of the Arts to get a Bachelor of Fine Arts in Art
History.
My main belief in life is that everything should be in harmony. People have to keep
balance in all spheres of life: society, family, work, friendship, and others. Studying art
is my personal way to keep balance. I’m driven by my passion to visit all cities with a
rich artistic history: Venice, Rome, London, San-Francisco, Tokyo, and so many
others. These journeys will not only improve my professional skills but also will help to
learn more about myself and people.
I believe that studying at the California College of the Arts will allow me to become
a real professional with a mature art taste and extensive knowledge of art history. In
the future, I will follow my mother’s footsteps in order to help people discover the
beautiful world of art. If my career as an art consultant isn’t successful, I will dedicate
my life to teaching future generations of students and cultivating their love of fine arts.
Example:
1. Who are the characters?
Elizabeth Austen (subject), her father, her mother, elder friends

2. Where is the setting?

Marseille, France

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 Details:
Objective details (at least 2)
(1) Although my parents were born in the USA, they left for Marseille after their
wedding because of career goals. (2) My father is a translator, and my mother is an art
consultant.
Subjective details (at least 2)
(1) My main belief in life is that everything should be in harmony. (2) I believe that
studying at the California College of the Arts will allow me to become a real
professional with a mature art taste and extensive knowledge of art history.
Anecdote:
None

3. Is the autobiography in chronological order? Show a brief chronology of the

subject’s life.
Yes. (1) Birth on May 2, 2002 (2) Childhood: a thirst for knowledge and new
discoveries (3) Teenage: dreamed of becoming a writer (4) pursuing California College
of the Arts.

4. What Point of View (POV) was used? Give the pronouns used in the autobiography.
1st person. Pronouns used: my, I & me
5. Author’s purpose:
✓ Credited people who influenced the subject
✓ Explained or to justify the actions of the subject
✓ Gave sense of the events in the lives of the subject
✓ Communicated an important personal statement about life

Activity
Activity 3.1
Do this:

My name is Maria Angelina Bacarella. I was born on March 7, 1995, in Tawas

City, Michigan. My parents are James and Michelle Bacarella, and I have three
younger siblings, Sophia, Alex, and Samuel. I attended Holy Family Catholic School in
East Tawas from kindergarten until sixth grade. While there I participated in band,
choir, Girl Scouts, Council of Catholic Girls, volleyball, softball, and basketball. I was
on honor roll and received an academic achievement award. Attending a catholic
school helped me to grow academically, in my faith, and as a person, giving me high
moral standards. In seventh and eighth grade I attended Tawas Junior High. I was
involved in volleyball, basketball, softball, and Club PRIDE. I was on honor roll every
semester, and received the presidential academic award.
I currently attend Tawas High School. I am involved in Iosco Pride, Spanish club,
liturgical dance, youth group, Student Senate, volleyball, soccer, and National Honor
Society. I currently have a 3.88 cumulative G.P.A. and am 8th in my class of 117.
Though my school, I go to coop every day for two hours in the 81st District court.
While there I have learned many school that pertain to a future career in law. I file
papers, type bonds, and observe court. This has given me first-hand experience
identifying legal documents and understanding how to proceed in court.
I am very motivated to create the best possible future for myself, and have worked very
hard to set that up. I have been on the honor roll every marking period thus far in my
high school career. I received my academics and athletics varsity letters, an honors
pass, the hustle award for volleyball, and an academic achievement award. Some of
my strengths include being a hard worker, dedicated, self-motivated, and organized.
My weaknesses are that sometimes I am overly ambitious and take on too much at
once, and that I tend to expect too much of others.

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I have volunteered at local nursing homes, and for local churches. My favorite
volunteer experience has been helping out with vacation bible school through my
church. Through this I am able to help kids grow in their faith. Through Iosco PRIDE I
am able to send a positive message in a fun way. I love these because they allow me to
be a positive role model for kids. I currently work at Chick’n Dots Tiny Tots Boutique.
My favorite thing about my job is that I get to work with children. I also babysit on the
weekends and in the summer.
Next year, I plan to attend Michigan State University. I hope to be involved in their
college of social sciences, James Madison College to gain my bachelor’s degree in
International relations. During college I hope to study abroad to assist in my learning
other languages. After college I would like to attend Michigan State University College
of law. I hope to become an international lawyer someday, working for a company like
USAID. With this line of work, I would be able to travel and work on projects to help
people in other countries.

1. Who are the characters?

2. Where is the setting?
 Details:
 Objective details (at least 2)
 Subjective details (at least 2)
 Anecdote:
3. Is the autobiography in chronological order? Show a brief chronology of the
subject’s life.
4. What Point of View (POV) was used? Give the pronouns used in the autobiography.
5. Author’s purpose:
 Credited people who influenced the subject
 Explained or to justify the actions of the subject
 Gave sense of the events in the lives of the subject
 Communicated an important personal statement about life.

Activity 3.2. MEMOIR

Example

JUST SWINGING - September 12, 2009 by 9CatsPerLife101 There’s something

strange and magical about a swing set. As a child, I always loved to swing. Nothing on
the playground ever compared to the swings. Sometimes I would close my eyes and let
the cool breeze be my friend, seemingly helping me rise off the ground. And when I
opened my eyes, I would see that the swing had carried me far beyond the playground,
far beyond the grove of trees along the edge of the field, but I was never afraid. It was
the only thing that could truly make me forget life and simultaneously make me alive.
With time, though, I outgrew elementary school and moved on. By then swinging was
a mere ghost of a memory and was almost forgotten. Almost. The summer before high
school, I revisited my old playground. Like an abandoned house, it had all the
nostalgic memories of a previous home, and yet, I was drawn to only the swings. If
there’s something strange and magical about a swing set, it’s because it’s never empty
for long. The air was still as I got on, the metal chains never made a sound. Slowly, as
I swung, I remembered, no, embraced. I embraced the cool wind on my face, the thrill
of being weightless, the knowledge of being too high for any trouble to reach. And I
embraced what it was like to be a child again. Sometimes I can still see that teenage
girl on the deserted playground. Just swinging.

1. What is the theme?

The comfort a simple swing can bring throughout a lifetime.

2. What Point of View (POV) was used? Give pronouns used in the autobiography.
1st Person POV. Pronouns: I, my, & me.

3. What is/are the emotion(s) portrayed by in the memoir?

Nostalgic feeling of carefree by forgetting everything and just immersing oneself to the
joy and comfort of just swinging.

4. Any supporting stories? None

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5. Any personal style? How?
Yes. The authors way of writing makes the readers feel the nostalgia and depth
feelings of her memory.

6. Does the author show honesty? How?

Yes. The memoir is convincing and relatable.

Do This

Wall of Memories - August 1, 2012 by jmac1780 As I walk through the halls of where
we used to play together, I see the old markings on the walls. They remind me of how I
would draw our family with a crayon on our wall of memories. I took a different color
each time, and everyday add something, like a family member we just found out
about, or a new picture I drew. The wall soon filled up over time, as I dipped your paw
in paint and my hand as well, and pressed them together, at the same time, right next
to each other, on our wall of memories. Mine was purple, yours was green. I don’t
recall what made me think you liked the color green. After all, weren’t cats colorblind?
I wasn’t sure, but I guess green was sort of your color. You had a green collar, a green
toy, green this, green that. And it was all by accident. Although, I’m sure there are no
accidents when it comes to that. But ever since that hand-printing day, I can’t
remember a time when those two colors never looked so perfect together. And the wall
kept filling up, and filling up, with more memories to look back on, and more promises
to keep. Promises? I don’t remember making any promises. But the promises we made
were in each other’s eyes, and in each other’s hearts. I looked at you, and you looked
at me with those green, peaceful eyes, and it seemed as though we promised to be
together forever. The promises we made in our hearts were for us only, to stay best
friends. But after you left, those promises seemed to do nothing but fade. I remember
the day you left very clearly. And boy, it was not pretty. I remember collapsing in tears,
screaming that they couldn’t take you away from me. Sobbing my heart out, only to
face the reality that there was nothing I could do. Time passed and I didn’t get any
better. I hid my pain behind a fake smile and shining eyes. Shining from tears. I
wanted to die. I couldn’t imagine life without you, and I wished for you to come back to
me. I missed you terribly, and I couldn’t get you off my mind. I wanted the best for
you, but I wanted you with me. I saw you everywhere after that day. Everywhere I
went, there was a memory we shared on that couch, in that room, next to that wall,
everywhere, and anywhere. You were everywhere, and all I kept thinking of was what I
had and lost. I kept walking by our wall of memories, only to softly touch the
markings, and break down in tears again. Every time. I wanted you to come back. My
sweetie. My first pet. My best friend. I could spend hours and hours gazing at our wall
of memories, like they were the stars in the night sky. I could get lost in the thousands
of memories we left there, until I finally rested my gaze on the two small hand and paw
prints, purple and green, and right next to each other. No matter what the future held,
that was one thing that could never be changed. Our promises on our wall of
memories.

1. What is the theme?

2. What Point of View (POV) was used? Give pronouns used in the autobiography.

3. What is/are the emotion(s) portrayed by in the memoir?

4. Any supporting stories? Give Brief details.

5. Any personal style? How?

6. Does the author show honesty? How?

Activity 3.3. DIARY

Example

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Friday – March 25, 2011, 10:00 AM Dear Diary, After I woke up this morning, I made
the regrettable decision of waking up. I tried to go back to sleep, but I could not even
relax. Today was one of those days where either I get up, or I get up. I then decided to
go outside, but because it was raining, I got wet. I went back inside, felt tired enough
to go back to bed, but I still had to change out of my wet clothes. Then I got a phone
call from you know who. I got so excited that I didn’t care that I was naked, tired, and
there was a puddle on the floor. We are going on a date this Friday. I don’t know how
I’m going to sleep. What am I going to wear? :naked dance: :singing in the rain: oh
diary, one day I’ll look back on this and say remember when I didn’t pay attention to
anything but the phone ringing. FINALLY!

1. Heading: Friday – March 25, 2011, 10:00 AM

2. Is the body detailed and comprehensive? Yes
3. Is there an interference made by the author? None
4. What Point of View (POV) was used? Give pronouns used in the autobiography.
1st Person POV. Pronouns: I & my.
5. Is there figure of speech used in the diary? None
6. Is there a signature? Yes

Do This

Saturday, May 26, 2007 Dear Diary,

I woke up very late again because today is weekend. I ate lunch at home. Then I
had to go to Min Buri city. The reason I have to go there is my dad is building our new
house and he wanted to check something and prepared for the next step. He wanted
me to drive my care (actually, it's my mom's car, but she gives it to my brother and me
but my brother is in Bangkok for studying Thammasatt University. It's my chance to
practice and use this car but someone parked a care behind my car and I couldn't
take it out of my parking lot. So I have to drive my dad's car. It's a Camry and too big
for me. I was very excited and everyone, too. It's not only my dad and me but also my
mom and Meet. (Can you remember her from the first page?) When we reached there I
ask Meet that did you scared of me driving? She answered "a little bit scared."
Hahaha. I didn't tell her that if my mom allows me to drive a car to school, she has to
go with me. Ha! After my dad finished checking the house, I drove home. And I asked
my dad to comment on my driving. He said good. I am very happy. I've been practicing
driving for 6 months. And it's getting better every month. YEAH! Ps. I chat with my
brother and I order him to buy me CD for me. Ha Ha!

1. Heading: _______________________________________________________________
2. Is the body detailed and comprehensive? ________________________________
3. Is there an interference made by the author? ____________________________________
4. What Point of View (POV) was used? Give pronouns used in the
autobiography.______________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________
5. Is there figure of speech used in the diary? ______________________________________
6. Is there a signature? ____________________________________________________________

Activity 3.4. REVISE A FAULTY AUTOBIOGRAPHY. Write your entry on

your answer sheets.
Me was born on a warm, sunny day in June 8 in Manila, Philippines. I still live in
Manila, Philippines and I go to school at Amparo High School. I live with my mom,
Kate; my brother, Jake; and my Aunt Molly. When I was born, my bother was fifteen-
months-old and hid under the table from me. Jake is a sweet kid and he would do
anything for me, but like all brothers and sisters we fight like cats and dogs.
Sometimes when no one was around, Jake would come up to me and bite my toes for
no reason. I still love him but only because he is my brother. I attended Amparo
Elementary School, and there I also won a couple of awards: one for perfect
attendance and two for being named Student of the Year--one in sixth grade and the
other in eighth grade. I am now a senior at AmparoHigh School. I plan on finishing
school and maybe going to a community college. My name is Sally Friday. I started
school when I was six-years-old. Then, I went to kindergarten through fifth grade at

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Booker Elementary and while I was there, I won an award for perfect attendance. I
also won an award for honor roll all four terms. Life to me means friends and family
who can trust and who trusts you. I am pretty much on the happy side of life, but like
all teens I do I have my "days off." That means I do have some sad days or depressed
days. I have a few frinds here that sort of look out for me and when I am having a bad
day, I have someone here at school to talk to. I make my school days go by thinking of
either the next hour or what I will do when I get home or on the weekend. I'm not
seeing anyone now but when I did have a boyfriend, our favorite places to go were the
movies and out to dinner. Sometimes we went to the beach. Only once we went to an
amusement park: Universal Studios. We were together for twenty-nine days and then
we broke-up; so no, I don't think it was forever.

Conclusion
As I said in the beginning, I was born here in Florida and I've lived here my whole life.
I would like to see more of the Philippines but unfortunately, I don't have any money
to leave Florida to go anywhere right now. I hope you have enjoyed reading my life
story as much as I have enjoyed writing it for you. Try to get as much as you can out
of school; you're only there for twelve years and when you graduate, you're home free.
Here's a tip for you to live or try to live by: If you think it, it can be done.\

Activity 3. 5

REVISE THIS MEMOIR. Write additional details that will support this memoir.
Write your entry on your answer sheets.

Assessment
Instruction: Write T if the statement is true and F if it is false. Write your answer in
your notebook.
1. What differentiates autobiography from memoir is that it deals with only a slice, a
portion or event in your life, rather than your whole life.
2. Diary follows a 1st Person Point of View.
3. Memoir follows a 1st Person Point of View.
4. A memoir most of the time is logically sequenced and contains sequence words such
as first, later, next, and finally.
5. An anecdote can be a part of an autobiography.
6. In writing a diary, collapsing characters or events that are not important to your
stories theme will help you concentrate on the people and events that are important.
7. Biography follows a 1st Person Point of View.
8. Autobiography follows a 3rd Person Point of View.
9. Memoir writing should focus on a specific theme or lesson, and every compelling
story included in a good memoir should support that theme.
10. Autobiography should include comparatives and superlatives to make writing
Assessment
clearer.

Answer Key:
Review REFERENCES:
1. T http://sumreena.tripod.com/autobiography.htm
2. F https://targetstudy.com/languages/english/diary-writing.html
3. F
4. T
https://www.rcampus.com/rubricshowc.cfm?
5. F sp=yes&code=Q55AB8&
6. T https://www.masterclass.com/articles/breaking-down-the-key-
7. T
8. T elements-of-a-memoir#6-key-elements-of-a-memoir
9. F
10. F

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