To: Nancy Myers

Name: Meagan Eirls

Date: October 6, 2022
Subject: APLED 121- Chapter 5- Achieving Audience Involvement- pg. 115

ACHIEVING AUDIENCE INVOLVEMENT

1. Revise the following by adding pronouns and names.
a. The company will require further information before processing this request.
We require further information from you before we process this request.
b. It has been decided that a new procedure must be implemented to avoid further
mechanical failures.
We have decided to implement a new procedure to avoid further mechanical failures.
c. The department supervisor wants to extend a heartfelt thanks for the fine efforts
expended.
I want to extend a heartfelt thank you to you for your fine efforts.
d. I think you have done a great job. I want you to know that you have surpassed this
month’s quota by 12 percent. I believe I can speak for the entire department by saying
thank you.
You have done a great job in surpassing this month’s quota by 12 percent. We wish to
express our thanks to you.
e. If the computer overloads, simultaneously press Reset and Control. Wait for the
screen command. If it reads “Data Recovered”, continue operations. If it reads “I/O
Error”, call the computer resource center.
If the computer overloads on you, simultaneously press Reset and Control. You need to
wait for the screen command. If you read “Dada Recovered”, continue your operations.
If you read “I/O Error”, you need to call the computer resource center.
2. Revise the following sentences to achieve reader involvement and benefit, using positive
words and pronouns.
a. We cannot lay your cable until you sign the attached waiver.
By signing this waiver, we can start laying your cable.
b. John, don’t purchase the wrong program. If we continue to keep insufficient records,
our customers will continue to complain.
John, please make sure to purchase the correct program so we can keep accurate
records. This will improve customer satisfaction.
c. You have not paid your bill yet. Failure to do so might result in termination of services.
Please pay your bill so we can continue your service agreement.
d. If you incorrectly quote and paraphrase, you will receive an F on the assignment.
Please correctly quote and paraphrase your information to receive a better grade.
e. Your team has lost 6 of their last 12 games.
Your team has won 6 out of their last 12 games.