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In the light of the rapid development of E-commerce and the growing number of internet users;
Online shopping has become a common purchasing method around the globe. Currently, many
people prefer to purchase most of their necessities, starting from grocery items down to
electronic devices and appliances via online stores rather than face to face shopping avoiding
wasting time, congestion, finding parking and even weather fluctuations.
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From my point of view, I perceive that kind of shopping as a positive improvement, especially,
in terms of the facility of selecting goods among competitive prices ending with finalizing the
transaction and the variety of payments ways. It has as well a significant impact, particularly on
the current generation due to the speed of our life style we are living in, in addition to the
effective influence on the economic recovery, in the presence of a great competition among
online vendors.
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The diverse merits of online shopping differ from seller to seller, however, it have a similarity in
its benefits; whereas online consumers can do shopping via their own mobile phones wherever
they are or whenever they like, furthermore they always feel convenient and satisfied during
comparing a price of same product on many sellers’ websites, moreover analyzing customers
reviews and recommendations of certain merchandise could consider as one of the greatest
benefits of online shopping which makes us as sure as to go ahead to buy these goods without
any doubt.
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punctuation marks to divide it.
** The diverse merits of online shopping differ from one seller to another. However, it has a
similarity in its benefits; whereas online consumers can do shopping via their own mobile
phones wherever they are or whenever they like. Furthermore, they always feel convenient and
satisfied during comparing the price of the same product on many sellers’ websites. Moreover,
analyzing customers’ reviews and recommendations of certain merchandise could consider as
one of the greatest benefits of online shopping which help the individuals to buy these goods
without any doubt.
In spite of the several merits of online shopping, there are some demerits and it could be risky
for some buyer to deal with; such as fraud online sellers, bad reputed or unknown retails, even
though, consumer should take some precautions into consideration in order to shop safely.
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In conclusion, shopping online has made a high competition among companies and retailers,
with a positive impression to individuals and governments in regards of increasing the
purchasing value as well as achieving vital challenges in the economic sectors in many
countries.