Quickwrite Revision Rationale

What writing choices did you make in order to reach your intended audience and fulfill
your writing purpose?
Complete this rationale to prove that you have met the learning goal to be able to revise your
writing for a specific purpose and audience. You should complete three rows to show three
different revisions you made and your reasons for them. (See the bottom page for assessment
criteria.)

[INSERT A PICTURE OF YOUR ORIGINAL DRAFT HERE (No revisions)] (2pts):

The assessment criteria is on the next page.

Type your final draft here (2 pts):
Life is like a rollercoaster
Your birth is like unveiling a new vehicle
Your family is there for you like a firetruck
But death will hit like a truck
And friends will be there for you anywhere like a bus
Or leave like a jet
In the end a new life will be born to start the ride all over again

Audience: Everyone who sees this.

Purpose*: Want others to understand more about life

Title: From life to life.

Changes Reasoning

`BEFORE: AFTER: Brief JUSTIFY: Why does the

Direct quotes or Direct quotes or description of change help you better
descriptive descriptive the type of address your audience and
summaries from my summaries from my change** purpose?
early draft(s) early draft(s)

Friends come and go
like a jet
True friends are there
to talk to like a bus
friends will be there Combined them It helped show both types
for you anywhere like in one sentence
a bus
Or leave like a jet

Death hits like a truck But death hits like a The link it to To show how death can
truck the previous one impact family.

True friends are there In the end a new life added / moved To show a new start or how
to talk to like a bus will be born to start it can be repeated in
the ride all over again another's eyes

*Sample purposes:
To help ___ [your audience] understand ____.
To share _____ [a certain experience, feeling, or opinion] with my audience.
To remind ____ [someone or some group of people] that they are not alone.
**Examples of Types of Change:
Organization (order of information), addition/subtraction/replacement of information,
word choice, syntax (sentence structure), and punctuation.

The assessment criteria is on the next page.

Assessment Criteria (20 pts total):
Audience (2 pts): I clearly identified the intended audience for my developed quickwrite.
(Your primary audience should be your peers unless you have received prior approval
from Ms. Dunn).
Purpose (2 pts): I clearly articulated my writing purpose for my developed quickwrite,
describing what effect I want my piece to have on my audience or what I want to
communicate to them.
Evidence (6 pts): I have selected quotes or specific examples from both the draft and the
final piece. The quotes/examples show that I developed the quickwrite to better address
my intended audience and writing purpose. (2 points/row)
Explanation of Change (6 pts): I have clearly explained how my draft has changed. I
have not simply pointed out the differences between my first and final drafts, but I
explained why I made the changes, discussing why the changes help me better speak to
my audience and/or fulfill my writing purpose. (2 points/row)
Initial and Final Draft (4 pts): I have included a picture of my original draft and a
typed version of my final draft. My quickwrite demonstrates thoughtfulness, and I have
extended my writing beyond the initial draft.

The assessment criteria is on the next page.