Reviewed Paper: ntp1627331 - Mon Feb 20 12:35:03 EST 2023

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Paper Title: Occasional Arguments are healthy for a Friendship

No. of Pages: 1
Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Descriptive
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: Focus/Thesis Statement, Transitions & Fluency
Paper Goals: Kindly help me increase the efficiency of my paper and also to get a perfect
paragraph to submit.

Review Summary:
Hello Vidhan,

Thank you for submitting your paper to NetTutor. I am Wendy and it was my pleasure to review your work today. I enjoyed reading about conflict in
friendship.

Strengths:

Your writing is clear and easy to read. Your transitions and fluency are very good, overall. Your points and support are well-organized and your message
is very easy to comprehend.

Suggestions:

I didn't find much to talk about here. Your paragraph should be indented. There is a transition that may not be the best one that could be used under the
circumstances and I provided a note about this. Your final two lines could be a thesis statement or the end of a stand-alone paragraph and I had a
concern if the former were true that is also in your paper. Otherwise, it looks very well done to me.

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Indent paragraph

Up to this point, you are talking about engaging in

argument, and "in fact" isn't your best choice to introduce
information on the opposite side of the situation. It would
work better if you had more positives about argument to
express.

As the conclusion to your paragraph, these two sentences

do a good job of telling the reader what the basic idea
presented in the paragraph is. If this paragraph means to
move forward and provide a thesis statement for a longer
paper "in conclusion" should be avoided.

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