This essay will discuss the negative impacts of electronic devices.

 
Introduction: 1 - 2. complex sentence : Paraphrase question
=> Technology
Thanks to the incredible development of technology, it brings us many benefits.
However, some think people think that these days we are becoming inactive and harmful
to our health. 
In my opinion, I agree with this thought/ statement, and this essay will prove
it.
Despite the fact that it has some downsides, in my opinion, I believe it is also
beneficial for some reasons…

Despite/ Due to its downsides/ bringing some downsides, this essay discusses
the advantages of ….. living in the countryside.
Despite its advantages, this essay discusses the disadvantages of living in the
countryside

To begin with,...
4 - topic sentence: Electrical devices provide negative impacts since people can easily
stick on the show
For example,
For instant,
To illustrate,

ON the other hand,

In addition, Moreover, Furthermore…..

CONCLUSION: In conclusion, To sum up, In short, I believe, I think, in my

observation, computers, and other electric devices is mostly negative to people’s
health for these reasons above/ mentioned.
To sum up, I believe that living in the countryside brings people/us a lot
of benefits/ advantages -  has many drawbacks/downsides/ disadvatages
for these reasons above.
People do less activity => Some people think that/ Some people believe that/ Many
people think that/ 
ACTIVE -> INACTIVE => thụ động 
negative effects => disadvantages/ drawback/ negative sides/  negative impacts
affect vs effect => affect verb / effect noun => negative effect 
effective vs efficient => adjective
TASK 1:
NO, I THINK NO I BELIEVE => NO PERSONAL EXPRESSION

Introduction: This chart/ graph - This pie chart/ This pie graph/
This bar chart/ graph illustrates/ demonstrates/ uncovers/
reveals/ discloses the number/ propotion of foreign visitor travel to
New Zealand = the propotion of worldwide visitors travel to New
Zealand.
Overview: What stands out from the chart/ Overall/ Generally, 
Body:
Conclusion: