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Is social media bad for relationships?

The social media plays an important role in today's world. People from all ages spend a considerable
amount of time using the social media. The social mediaIt is part of our lives.The social media as it is
used for making money, making friends and get wrong form married. I personally believe that, social
media is good for relationships since many people use the social media Preposition needed making a
new friends and want to get  wrong form married.

First of all, social media allows us to make wrong word (“make friends” not “friendships”) new
friendships. It allows us to meet new people from different countries. A person who has made a new
friend can tell his problems to his friend. Together they can find solutions to these problems such as
financial problems and education problems. In short, social media has a great benefit on friendship
relationships.

Secondly, some people who want to get married can get married thanks to social media. They can chat
over social media. Sometimes they can meet somewhere such as theater hall and dining area thanks to
social media. If they can agree, they may decide to get married in the following days.:) (This paragraph
needs to be explained some more)

In conclusion, people can use social media to make new friends and get married. Social media has a big
impact on relationships.

Good points dear, thank you. Please check my questions and comments to revise and write the
second draft. Please avoid too much repetition (eg. Get married, make friends) and try to write
them in alternative ways.
Scoring: Organization – 2/2.5 + Content – 2/2.5 + Structure – 2/2.5 + Lexis 2/2.5 = 8/10
Cheers,
-Hatice