Eleanor Leahy

Mr.Smith

Junior English

10/4/22

The Evolution of the American Dream

Over time the American Dream has not only changed but also has created obstacles for it

to be achievable. There was a time where the American Dream was believed to be achievable for

all and it was the same for everyone, the American Dream was defined as wealth, success, a

college degree, and a happy family. Over time it has changed to being happy and healthy, both

mentally and physically. Over time, the chance to achieve the American Dream has changed due

to obstacles being created; these include wealth, education, race, gender, mental health and

disabilities.

Over time the American Dream has evolved into something a little bit different from

what it used to be. There was a time in American history when the American Dream was all

about going to college, getting a good job, finding a good house and having a happy family. Until

times changed. The American Dream has turned into a want and or need to just be happy and

healthy; mentally and physically. “The house on Mango Street is ours, and we don't have to

pay rent to anybody, or share the yard with the people downstairs, or be careful not to

make too much noise, and there isn't a landlord banging on the ceiling with a

broom.”(House on Mango Street) . She is finally in a place that feels like her own. She explains

that she doesn't have a landlord and how the house finally feels like hers. She is happy about

where she is in life. This is also demonstrated in the poem “I Hear America Singing” by Walt

Whitman. He explains that he hears Americans doing their jobs and how happy they seem. “The
delicious singing of the mother, or of the young wife at work, or of the girl sewing or

washing,/Each singing what belongs to him or her and to none else” Walt Whitman says in the

poem I Hear America Singing. He explains how the people are happy with what they are doing

in life. He explains the people doing their jobs and hearing them sing and it shows them being

happy about not only their lives but where they have found themselves in life. Both Whitman

and Cisneros explain how the definition of the American Dream has changed from being about

education and wealth to being about being happy and healthy. In conclusion the American

Dream has changed its definition as times have also changed.

The American Dream was believed to be achievable by everyone but the reality if it is

that is anything but true. There are many factors that play into the achievability of the Dream;

wealth, education, living situation, race, gender, disabilities, and mental health. “‘I think the

American Dream for the average man doesn’t exist any more’”, Linden Strandberg says in the

article American Dream Faces Harsh New Reality. Linden explains that the achievability of the

American Dream isn’t for everyone. Only certain groups of people will be able to achieve it. For

example if you grow up in poverty and in a bad school system, it makes it hard to get a good

education and find the money to go to college. This is also demonstrated in the article

“Coronavirus Reminds Asian Americans Like Me That Our Belonging is Conditional”. Cho

explains how people of different races are treated in America. “Vincent Chin, a Chinese

American autoworker, was brutally beaten to death in Detroit in 1982, blamed for the Japanese

“takeover” of the auto industry. And just recently, an Asian woman in Brooklyn had acid thrown

at her while she was taking out the trash, another among the skyrocketing attacks against

Asians.” John Cho writes in the article Coronavirus Reminds Asian Americans Like Me That

Our Belonging is Conditional. These two people were doing day to day things that everyone
does; one was doing his job and the other was taking out her trash. But while they did these two

things they both experienced violence because of the Asian hate created by people that believe

that they are to blame for certain issues. Vincent Chin was beaten to death while he worked at an

auto body shop in 1982, the reason he was killed was because he was blamed for the Japanese

takeover of the auto industry. Chin couldn't even do his job without experiencing extreme

violence that led to death. Both pieces explain how there have been obstacles created so that only

certain groups of people could achieve the American Dream. Race plays a big part in the

achievability of the American Dream

In conclusion the American Dream and the achievability of it has changed as time has

gone on. The American Dream has gone from being about wealth and success to being about

being happy and healthy both mentally and physically. Not only has the Dream changed but

obstacles have been created but people in this day and age. Race, gender, disabilities, and health

have been put in place as obstacles. The fact that the obstacles created include things like race

and gender are a serious issue. No one should be held back from anything because of their race

and or gender.

Work Cited

Cho, John. “Coronavirus Reminds Asian Americans Belonging Is Conditional.” Los Angeles

Times, 22 Apr. 2020,

 https://www.latimes.com/opinion/story/2020-04-22/asian-american-discrimination-john-c

ho-coronavirus.

Cisneros, Sandra. The House on Mango Street. 2nd Vintage Contemporaries ed., 25th

anniversary ed, Vintage Contemporaries, 2009.

Shapiro, Ari. “The American Dream Faces Harsh New Reality.” NPR, 29 May 2012. NPR,

https://www.npr.org/2012/05/29/153513153/american-dream-faces-harsh-new-reality.

Whitman, Walt. “I Hear America Singing.” Poetry Foundation, Poetry Foundation, 2 Oct. 2022,

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/46480/i-hear-america-singing.

American Dream Essay Rubric

Skill Advanced Proficient Foundational Not

Yet
 Thesis establishes a Appears in first Identifies a topic
complex claim paragraph

Thesis establishes a
topic and a claim

Thesis Comments:

Includes specific, Includes multiple pieces Includes two or

meaningful, and of evidence (from 4 fewer sources
well-chosen evidence sources) that clearly
that relates to the relate to the thesis Some evidence
thesis relates to the thesis
Includes multiple pieces
of evidence in each body
Evidence paragraph

Comments:

Explains well-selected Explains how evidence Summarizes

points of comparison supports topic sentence sources
among sources and of individual paragraphs
evidence and their
connection to the Explains how evidence
thesis supports the thesis of
Analysis the essay

Comments:

Clearly explains Explains how the Little connection

relationships among texts/sources are between texts;
texts (how they related, though points difficult for the
 confirm or challenge could be more selective reader to see how
each other, build on or better developed the texts are
each other, provide related
differing perspectives, Includes multiple
Synthesis etc.) sources in each body
paragraph

Comments:

No errors in MLA format Heading is correctly Some elements

formatted missing or some
errors in MLA
Pages are numbered format

In-text citations are

correctly formatted

Works Cited format:

hanging indent,
MLA Format double-spaced,
alphabetized, starts on a
new page

Works Cited: each source

entry is in correct MLA
format
Comments:

All quotes are correctly Most quotes are correctly Shows evidence of
integrated integrated basic proofreading

Shows evidence of Follows essay

Conventions careful proofreading organization

Shows evidence of
proofreading

Comments:
Eleanor,
Some revisions for you to consider:
● Review & correct MLA (quote integrations, in text citations, title formatting, etc)
● Avoid repetition when you have already introduced an idea
● Seek to analyze, rather than summarize sources
● Consider how to synthesize sources (how do multiple texts being put together enhance
your ideas)
● Cut back on the ideas in your thesis (there were so many examples listed, but you only
addressed two)
You might want to come see me during Clipper Block, or after school, so that we can go over
some things that might be helpful for future writing assignments.

Grade: C