UNIVERSITI TEKNOLOGI MARA

CAWANGAN PAHANG KAMPUS JENGKA

ELC 231
INTEGRATED LANGUAGE SKILLS III

ARTICLE: STRINGENT MONITORING ENSURES FOOD SAFETY

GROUP : CEEC1103A

LECTURER’S NAME: MADAM AZLINI BINTI RAZALI

GROUP MEMBERS:

NAME MATRICS NO.

FARID SYAHMI BIN JAMALUKHAIR 2021202014

MUHAMMAD FARITH HAIZAT BIN 2021455462

ZULKIFLI
MUHAMMAD ILHAM RAZIN BIN RAHIMI 2021852156
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1.0 Argumentative Article 1-2

2.0 Evaluative commentary outline template 3-5

3.0 Evaluative commentary essay 6-7

4.0 Reference 7
Argumentative Article

Food safety is one of the most pressing public health concerns in the world, especially
in emerging and developing economies, including Malaysia.

Although foodborne diseases are prevalent, a majority of cases go misdiagnosed or

unreported, according to the United States Centers for Disease Control and Prevention.

Foodborne diseases are projected to cause 76 million illnesses in the US each year, with
325,000 hospitalisations and 5,000 fatalities.

The number of foodborne diseases reported in Malaysia increased by 11.8 per cent to
17,157 in 2019 compared with 15,346 in 2015. Compared with other foodborne
illnesses, food poisoning had the most cases at 16,583.

Food poisoning cases and illnesses caused by poor food safety, unsanitary conditions
and infectious and poisonous substances are on the rise.

Despite this alarming scenario, Malaysians are largely ignorant of this silent killer.

The rise in foodborne illnesses in Malaysia is linked not just to the use and abuse of
agrichemicals in agricultural products, but also people's lack of food safety standards.

For example, 152 pupils of SM Sains Tuanku Aishah Rohani had food poisoning after
having meals in the school canteen, which was closed in November last year.

A bread factory in Jalan Kedah, Seberang Prai, was ordered to close for two weeks the
same month when rat droppings were found on the plastic packaging.

In Terengganu, 99 food poisoning cases were reported in May 2020 after people
consumed pudding buih that was two weeks past its expiry date.

Food safety issues often happen due to unhygienic and poor food handling by
businesses or customers. Other factors include lack of regulations and consumer
awareness, and educational and cultural influences.

Regulators often focus on large producers, so small food manufacturers who produce
the majority of food consumed by the population go unnoticed.

In this regard, Malaysia's surveillance system on monitoring food safety needs to be

enhanced.

We should also address hygiene of street food, which is largely unregulated.

Many hawkers are unregistered, and food is sometimes prepared in private residences
far from the point of sale, making it difficult to adhere to food hygiene standards. More
effective law enforcement is essential, accompanied by a comprehensive public
education campaign on the importance of food safety.

Therefore, enhancing Malaysia's food safety culture necessitates using the best
management and communication tactics, as well as recognising food safety practices.

Strong engagement from consumers, stakeholders, food companies and food handlers
is necessary to achieve this goal.
Evaluative Commentary Outline Template

Paragraph 1- Introduction

1. Overview of the article: Causes of the foodborne disease (food

poisoning) and how to improve this
issues

2. Author’s tone: Optimistic, positive

Paragraph 2- Body 1

1. Main point 1: Poor food safety, unsanitary condition,

and infectious and poisonous

2. Supporting Detail 1: are largely ignorant of this silent killer.

3. Evidence 1:

Paragraph 3- Body 2

1. Main point 2: use and abuse of agrichemicals in

agricultural products, but also
people's lack of food safety standards.

2. Supporting Detail 2:

3. Evidence 2: For example, 152 pupils of SM Sains

Tuanku Aishah Rohani had food
poisoning after having meals in the
school canteen, which was closed in
November last year.

Paragraph 4- Body 3
1. Main point 3: 3.unhygienic and poor food handling
Main point 4: by businesses or customers

4.lack of regulations and consumer

awareness, and educational and
cultural influences.

2. Supporting Detail 3: 3.In this regard, Malaysia's

Supporting Detail 4: surveillance system on monitoring
food safety needs to be enhanced.
We should also address hygiene of
street food, which is largely
unregulated.
Many hawkers are unregistered, and
food is sometimes prepared in private
residences far from the point of sale,
making it difficult to adhere to food
hygiene standards. More effective law
enforcement is essential, accompanied
by a comprehensive public education
campaign on the importance of food
safety.
4.Regulators often focus on large
producers, so small food
manufacturers who produce the
majority of food consumed by the
population go unnoticed.
5. Therefore, enhancing Malaysia's
food safety culture necessitates using
the best management and
communication tactics, as well as
recognising food safety practices.

3. Evidence 3:

Paragraph 5- Personal View

1.Personal view/opinion First off, we concur that one of the

biggest global health concerns is food
safety, particularly in Malaysia. This
can be demonstrated and supported
by the sudden 11.8 percent increase in
foodborne illness cases—an increase
of 1811 in just four years. More than
200 diseases are caused by eating
 food contaminated with bacteria,
viruses, parasites, or chemicals like
heavy metals, according to the World
Health Organization. This illness is a
grave issue because it can be fatal.

2. Justification of view/ opinion However,from all the points that

has been stated,there is only one
evidence from the article .So,because
of that we are not very confident with
this article’s issues especially in point
4 when they did not state and prove to
us about the regulators usually focus
more on large producers.They not
even try to elaborate more about that
issue which for us it can not be
accepted as factual.

Paragraph 6- Conclusion

1. Restatement of personal view:

In conclusion, we note that
there are a number of factors, primarily
a lack of knowledge about food safety
and quality, that contribute to the
development of this foodborne
disease. If we do nothing, this problem
will worsen over time and is unlikely to
be resolved.

2. Final comments:
Evaluative Commentary Essay

The article illustrates what causes the foodborne disease and how to improve these issues to
make people always healthy. The author is optimistic about the causes and ways to improve this
issue in order to enlighten Malaysians.

Food poisoning incidents and illnesses are on the rise, owing to inadequate food safety,
filthy surroundings, and infectious and dangerous substances. Despite this frightening
circumstance, Malaysians are mostly unaware of this silent killer.

Malaysia's surge in foodborne diseases is connected not just to the usage and misuse
of agrichemicals in agricultural goods, but also to people's lack of food safety regulations. For
example, 152 SM Sains Tuanku Aishah Rohani students got food illness after eating at the
school canteen, which was shuttered in November of last year.

food handled carelessly and unhygienically by establishments or customers. In this

regard, Malaysia must enhance its surveillance system to guarantee food safety. We should
also discuss how street food is generally unhygienic and unregulated. Because many hawkers
are unregistered and food is occasionally prepared in homes far from the point of sale,
maintaining food hygiene standards can be difficult.

lack of laws, consumer ignorance, and cultural and educational influences. Small food
producers, who produce the majority of the food that the population consumes, go unnoticed by
regulators because they frequently concentrate on large producers.

As a result, improving Malaysia's culture of food safety requires employing the best
management and communication strategies as well as acknowledging food safety practices.
Therefore, the government needs to check with food management in all places

First off, we concur that one of the biggest global health concerns is food safety,
particularly in Malaysia. This can be demonstrated and supported by the sudden 11.8 percent
increase in foodborne illness cases—an increase of 1811 in just four years. More than 200
diseases are caused by eating food contaminated with bacteria, viruses, parasites, or chemicals
like heavy metals, according to the World Health Organization. This illness is a grave issue
because it can be fatal.
 However,from all the points that has been stated,there is only one evidence from the
article .So,because of that we are not very confident with this article’s issues especially in point
4 when they did not state and prove to us about the regulators usually focus more on large
producers.They not even try to elaborate more about that issue which for us it can not be
accepted as factual.

In conclusion, we note that there are a number of factors, primarily a lack of knowledge
about food safety and quality, that contribute to the development of this foodborne disease. If we
do nothing, this problem will worsen over time and is unlikely to be resolved.

(450 words)

Reference

- https://www.nst.com.my/opinion/letters/2022/06/801817/stringent-monitoring-ens
ures-food-safety-quality