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Gabriel 82 Introduct ed Remove the article “a”. Change “doesn’t” to Such a relatively quick changes in ocean
ion “don’t”. Maybe change “give” to “favor”. chemistry don’t favor marine life
83 Introduct ed Include “needing” ...needing much time to adapt.
ion
87 Introduct ed Change “has” to “have” ...have proven far from simple
ion
98 Introduct ed Change “presentenced” to “presented” ...it is presented methods and actions to kept
ion the limit or budget of acidification.
229 3.16 te I think there is only one Paris Climate Accord. “The Paris Climate Accord...”
Maybe we should change “Accords” to
“Accord”
Maybe we should find a better definition for “Phytoplankton, also known as microalgae, are
“Phytoplankton” similar to terrestrial plants in that they contain
chlorophyll and require sunlight in order to live
and grow. Most phytoplankton are buoyant and
float in the upper part of the ocean, where
sunlight penetrates the water. Phytoplankton
also require inorganic nutrients such as nitrates,
phosphates, and sulfur which they convert into
proteins, fats, and carbohydrates.”
Source: NOOA USA (National Oceanic and
Atmospheric Administration)
https://oceanservice.noaa.gov/facts/phyto.html
283 4.3 ed Maybe we should change the tense of some Adopting sustainable management of habitats,
verbs, such as “increased” and “reduced”. increasing coastal protection, reducing
sediment loading and applying marine spatial
planning;
323 4.4.3 te I think the rest of the sentence is missing. Anthropogenic ocean acidification will adversely
affect many... (living beings?)

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