Humanities Y9 Semester 2: History

Topic: Australia at War – World War 1 (1914-1918)

Common Summative Assessment Task: Essay

Essay Question: The Gallipoli campaign was a glorious moment for Australia. To what extent do you
agree?

Be sure to use quotes, statistics and primary sources to help support your arguments in the essay. Include a
Bibliography.

Your essay will need an introduction, 3 body paragraphs and a conclusion (TEEL structure).

Possible Arguments/Points of View

 There was some success at Gallipoli. (Australian Submarine AE2? Battle of Lone Pine?)
 Australian soldiers made Australians proud (who received Victoria Crosses and why?)
 It is an event worth commemorating.
 When there is a loss, the nation will forever be grateful to the fallen, and acknowledge their sacrifice and bravery, thereby acknowledging there is a
debt to fallen soldiers.
 Australia’s involvement served as an acknowledgement of Australia’s relationship with the United Kingdom.
 Even Turks showed pride in Australian involvement (it is noteworthy that opposition soldiers acknowledged Australian involvement).
 Gallipoli was unsuccessful.
 Australian soldiers were lambs for the slaughter.
 The ANZAC commemoration is an incorrect presentation of a bad decision.
 The conditions at Gallipoli were always going to be terrible and the Anzacs were not prepared.
 The Anzac soldiers earned high praise, even though they did not achieve what they hoped for because they were so brave.
 The great escape was successful (What % of soldiers killed vs escaped?)
 The withdrawal of the Anzacs was the most successful part of the campaign.
 Gallipoli forged an Australian identity.

Please use the scaffold below to write your essay draft. Write in full sentences.

Introduction Drafting Space Teacher Feedback

Include: The Gallipoli peninsula located in the southern part of East Thrace, the European part of
 Introduce the Turkey. In that peninsula, there was a very famous and important battle to the Australians
Gallipoli Campaign – and New Zealanders which was the Gallipoli Campaign. The Gallipoli Campaign occurred on
When did it occur?
25th April 15. About 2 am on 25th April 1915, the ANZAC which stands for the Australian
What was the
plan/aim? What does New Zealand Army Corps, including thousands of Australian and New Zealand soldiers
the term ANZAC reached in the Gallipoli peninsula. The landing of the ANZAC at Gallipoli with the purpose to
stand for? What push the Ottoman Empire out of the war, also to help the Allied ship go through the
does glorious mean? Dardanelles. Throughout what the ANZAC did in the whole 8 months long in Gallipoli show
 Explain to what that the Gallipoli Campaign was the glorious, worthy of honour moment of the Australians
extent you agree that time and forever after. Additionally, the battle at Gallipoli showed the world a new
with the question nation which was Australia. Despite the result of the battle, no matter it was a failure or
using sentence
success, the ANZAC was never scared or wanted to give up, they fought with everything they
starters such as ‘To
some extent, to a
had. More than that, the ANZAC in the Gallipoli Campaign made the day 25th April every
great extent, to a year become important and the people can never ever forget their sacrifices for our
limited extent’. This freedom. Ultimately, the battle at Gallipoli also known as the Gallipoli Campaign was a
is your contention. proud, glorious moment and it is one of the most important events in Australian history
 Introduce the 3 main nowadays
points/arguments
you will make in your
essay to support
your contention
about whether or
how much the
Gallipoli campaign
was glorious. Use
the possible points
above to help you
pick your 3
arguments if you
need to.

Paragraph 1 Topic Sentence: What is your first argument/point?

The Gallipoli Campaign, a battle that introduced and identified a new federated country to the
world.

Evidence:
Choose 1-2 quotes/images/statistics/diaries/letters/speeches/poems/songs (sources)
that support your point. Include who wrote/said it/made it and when. Also, note down
where you found it so you can make your bibliography.

“The Gallipoli campaign, as it became known, was the first major battle of World War I for
Australian troops.” (here)
 Explanation: How does the evidence support the point you are making in the topic
sentence? What does the source tell us? Give any relevant information about the
context or bias of the source. Use sentence starters such as ‘This demonstrates, this
shows, this supports the argument...’.

The quote highlight “the first major battle” for Australian troops as at that period, Australian
was a country did not know much about the war, they haven’t faced to any big war before the
Gallipoli Campaign and before they became the Great British’s allied. They did not have
experience for war, armed forces at that time were incomplete, but so many people were
volunteers for the campaign. Why did they want to be volunteers? In the Australia troop, there
were so many men who were volunteers to enlisted, those volunteers came from different
strata of society and this was one of the signs that portray the Australian’s pride and
determination in the war. They wanted to enlist, because they thought war was just an
adventure, war would a chance for male far from home, learn many new things, have new
discovery, chance for them to travel to another country in Europe, but they did not think they
could face with the boundaries of life and death, they did not think they might never return
their home and family. Then, when they realised the reality of war, when they faced with the
life and death situation, they did not afraid, they did not falter, they still tried to fight, fight for
the motherland which was Great British, fight for independence, and fight for themselves in
the hope that the battle would end to return to their family. Then when many of the soldiers
were injured and died, they still did not fear and retreat, they fought until they could not.

Link Sentence: how does this point, and the evidence (source) supporting it,
contribute to your overall contention? Rewrite/rephrase your topic sentence and
explain how this supports your overall essay contention/answers whether Gallipoli
was a glorious campaign.

A country where knowledge of war was really limited, but the fighting spirit is so intense, the
loss, what the Australia soldiers sacrificed in the Gallipoli Campaign as a message to the
world Australia is a country of resilience, the campaign tacitly asserted to the world that
ANZAC and Australia can do extraordinary things. Therefore, many nations in the world
admired that glorious moment of Australia.

Paragraph 2 Topic Sentence: What is your second argument/point?

Success or failure in the Gallipoli Campaign was no longer a matter with the ANZAC at the
live and death moment.

Evidence:
Choose 1-2 quotes/images/statistics/diaries/letters/speeches/poems/songs (sources)
that support your point. Include who wrote/said it/made it and when. Also, note down
where you found it so you can make your bibliography.

In Charles Bean’s publication Anzac to Amiens, he wrote “Anzac stood, and still stands, for
reckless valour in a good cause, for enterprise, resourcefulness, fidelity, comradeship, and
endurance that will never own defeat.” And the Australian poet Banjo Paterson wrote "We're
All Australians Now" in 1915 about what the ANZAC had done for Australia, including the
verse “The mettle that a race can show Is proved with shot and steel, And now we know what
nations know And feel what nations feel.”

Explanation: How does the evidence support the point you are making in the topic
sentence? What does the source tell us? Give any relevant information about the
context or bias of the source. Use sentence starters such as ‘This demonstrates, this
shows, this supports the argument...’.

The quote in Charles Bean’s publication which demonstrate the determination of the ANZAC.
Obviously, before the ANZAC started the campaign, they had training for many moths for the
battle, they planned to win, they planned to push the Ottoman Empire but the due to the battle
was take place on the Ottoman Empire homeland, they had the advantage of the army and
number of weapons as they could refill soldiers when the Turks died. That was hard for the
ANZAC to win the battle, with some solders, the beginning of the battle was the end of their
life and with some other, the battle was the devastation and brutality world with blood and
sweats. Serious injury, wounded, death, the conditions were as bad as you could image,
many soldiers were not died because of fighting, gun, bullets but they died because of
diseases in their trenches. Offered with many harsh and difficult things, the ANZAC would
 never give up, they did not think about surrender the enemy, they did not think about run
away when so many of their soldiers teammate lay down in the battle, they looked at their
teammate’s corps, they would probably feel pain and more homesick, they would probably
hope to back home, but those things were not make them step back, those things made them
even stronger and fight “Anzac stood, and still stands” with all they had because at that time,
they did not have anything else to lose. They fought and fought, as Banjo Paterson display in
his writing, the ANZAC showed their mettle through the battle, his quote portrayed the feeling,
what might they feel during the battle. All of those things depict the ANZAC full of energy,
they were brave, they were strong. After 8 months of the Gallipoli Campaign, there were over
8700 Australia soldiers and 2779 New Zealand soldiers died, that is a large number and
shows the painful of the war.

Link Sentence: how does this point, and the evidence (source) supporting it,
contribute to your overall contention? Rewrite/rephrase your topic sentence and
explain how this supports your overall essay contention/answers whether Gallipoli
was a glorious campaign.

During 8 long months of the Gallipoli Campaign with painful, loss, hopeless, injury, deaths,
difficulties, exhausting, homesick, the ANZAC did not give up even once. They did not think
about success or failure, they fought with everything they had and everything they could.

Paragraph 3 Topic Sentence: What is third argument/point?

The legend about the bravery ANZAC, glorious battle although it was a failure, but it will
never be forgot.

Evidence:
Choose 1-2 quotes/images/statistics/diaries/letters/speeches/poems/songs (sources)
that support your point. Include who wrote/said it/made it and when. Also, note down
where you found it so you can make your bibliography.

Nowadays, we celebrate the ANZAC Day every single year, that day “is a national day of
remembrance in Australia and New Zealand that broadly commemorates all Australians and
New Zealanders ‘who served and died in all wars, conflicts, and peacekeeping operations’
and ‘the contribution and suffering of all those who have served’.”

Explanation: How does the evidence support the point you are making in the topic
sentence? What does the source tell us? Give any relevant information about the
context or bias of the source. Use sentence starters such as ‘This demonstrates, this
shows, this supports the argument...’.

This shows that today, people are always remembering about the Gallipoli Campaign, they
remember about what the ANZAC did for their independence and peace. In the campaign,
the most successful part was the evacuation in mid-December 1915, they were leaving
and left a lot of painful, a lot of sacrifices, loss in the Gallipoli peninsula. The plan to
evacuated was very carefully “To hide the fact that they were leaving, they rigged up
some rifles to fire at random. They did this by attaching tins to the rifles’ trigger
mechanisms with string. When the tins filled with water dripping from other tins
suspended above, their weight caused the triggers to be pulled and the rifles to fire.
This tactic became known as the ‘ghost guns of Gallipoli’. Soldiers also carefully
wrapped the horses’ hooves in cloth to muffle the sound of their leaving. The last
Australian soldiers were evacuated overnight on 19–20 December.” Because of the
silence leaving of the ANZAC, many people admire their plan, people don’t consider
withdrawal was the shamed, the ANZAC decided to leave because they did not want
to lost more soldiers, they did not want to see more soldiers get injury, their plan was
really successful and made the enemy which was the Ottoman Empire surprised
about how did leave without any vestige. After many difficulties, the ANZAC could
back to their homeland, they have been through many pain, loss, their fought with all
their heart, they were ready to die for their country’s peace, for their mother land all
because they had the will to try and the belief it could be done.
 Link Sentence: how does this point, and the evidence (source) supporting it,
contribute to your overall contention? Rewrite/rephrase your topic sentence and
explain how this supports your overall essay contention/answers whether Gallipoli
was a glorious campaign.

Now, whenever we look back or remember about this legend, we all feel proud, we might
have a strange and deeply feeling and thinking in our mind, our heart. The ANZAC, the
Gallipoli Campaign are in the past, but no one could forget this proudly past, we put it in our
memorable and have big celebration every 25th April in the year.

Conclusion In conclusion, the Gallipoli Campaign brought Australia to the world, it helped Australia from
a normal colony become a country that respected by many countries in the world even the
 Summarise your enemy in that period which was the Turkey army. Through the Gallipoli Campaign, it deeply
three main points depicts so many different characteristics of the ANZAC, many commendable qualities such
 Repeat your overall as friendship, resilience, optimistic, bravery, determination and the courage spirit of the
essay contention and
ANZAC during the very harsh and difficult time, they were always ready to fight for their
answer whether
homeland, for their country and people’s peace without thinking for themselves. The ANZAC
Gallipoli was a
glorious campaign were the heroes, even though they were ordinary group of people, but they did fabulous
things in the battle, they fought with patriotism, they fought with their blood, sweat and
tears, they were never give up, they were ready to lay down for their country’s defendant.
The ANZAC became a legend of the glorious Australia history, it is a very significant event in
Australia society today, none of Australia can forget it although, the result of the battle was
a failure but people respect and feel proud for the heroes ANZAC’s bravery and sacrifices.
People do not and will never forget that special day as we celebrate the ANZAC Day every
year on 25th April since 1916 until now is more than 100 years. Some people even flight to
the Gallipoli peninsula where is the campaign was take place for remembrance about out
ANZAC heroes. Now, when it comes to ANZAC, it is the spirit of ANZAC, the indomitable
heroes who were ready to fight and contributed to make our life peaceful and freedom.