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FIRST LAST'S PEERMARK REVIEW OF ANONYMOUS'S PAPER

ASSIGNED QUESTIONS

1. 1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you make to the author to get it to MLA format? Here is the link to OWL Purdue MLA so you can check:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/mla_general_format.html

Yes, The essay is in MLA format! The format is exactly the way Mr.Martinez taught us.

2. 2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words, does it reveal something not everyone would know about the meaning
of the image? Does the author make a claim that includes an interpretation about this visual text? Is this claim clear and direct? What is it? What suggestions do you
have for the writer in order to strengthen the claim? Highlight the controlling idea and tell the author if it reveals new information to you or not.
Yes the author Karla Delgado makes a claim that explains the text. Yes this claim in clear and direct, In the first paragraph she mentioned that the album has
complementary colors that help create the image. I think what the author can do to make it that much better is talk about the font style because that is a very unique
style.

3. 3. Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas? In other words, does the author present a definition of the image or a
summary or is the author explaining to readers their analysis of the image? Indicate in the text where the author is summarizing and where the author is analyzing.
"Since this album is of Mexican descent, It can have some meaning, as Mexican culture can have gods and goddesses. This background makes the feeling that it is
something else, not human" is summerizing the album. The rest she is analyzing

4. 4. Has the author chosen one (and only one) image to analyze? Does the author indicate the image in the introduction? Does the author include the image in the
introduction?
Yes she indicates it throughout the essay. Yes she includes a visual picture in the introduction.

5. 5. Does the author use elements from the image as evidence to support the claim in every paragraph? If not, indicate in each paragraph where the author should
include more evidence.

Yes she does use the evidence to help support the claim. She also uses it in a way to explain to us what this album cover means.

6. 6. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the controlling idea? Mark any tangents that you find in the essay.

Yes it does. She focuses on the album cover and doesn't focus on the songs they made with that album or anything.

7. 7. Is the tone and language appropriate for your English 1301 class? If not, suggest for the author what changes they might make.

Yes the tone and language is appropriate for English 1301 class!

8. 8. Does the conclusion answer the three questions (Did I do what I said I would do?; Why is this important?; and What do I want my audience to do with this
information?) If there is no conclusion, what suggestions do you have to develop one?

So far yes the essay is answering the questions while she was writing but the essay is incomplete.

9. 9. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details

What is the creature holding? What does it mean to the culture? The people in the back, Is that snow in the background?

10. 10. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence.

Well since this is a Visual Analysis she did a pretty good job explaining the album cover.

11. 11. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay.

In the very beginning of the essay you start off very strong!

12. 12. Indicate in the text three places that the author should fix before submitting the essay.

I think you're good and this essay will be very good once its finished.

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