Unit 3 Peer Review Workshop: Content Carolina

Directions: Mark your responses directly onto the paper you are editing. Or, you can write your
answers here. If you are unsure, simply state that something seems off but you are unsure of
what.

1. Does the author present a thesis statement about the rhetorical effectiveness of a
peer-reviewed article? Is this thesis clear and direct? What is it? Mark it in the text. What
suggestions do you have for the writer in order to strengthen the thesis? Has the author
chosen one (and only one) peer-reviewed article to analyze? The essay does not appear to
be in MLA format. I would suggest bringing it closer to utilizing the format more clearly.
Other than that, I do believe there is a clear idea given and provided by the author as to
the thesis statement which is that the rhetorical strategies that allows for the audience to
understand the purpose of the article and deliver the message of the article.
2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words,
does it reveal something not everyone would know about how and why this
peer-reviewed article is used? Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more
fully develop the ideas? Yes, The controlling idea of the essay is pretty evident as it
explores the visual elements and symbolism presented. It interprets the poster's imagery,
colors, and text to convey a message of hope, optimism, and childhood dreams. The
claim is clear as it can be seen through the poster as it effectively captures the feel of the
movie and its themes without needing to view it.
3. Does the author use elements from the article to support the thesis made about it? What
are they? Mark them in the text. Are they used as good evidence? Indicate why or why
not in the text. What kind of evidence would help the writer demonstrate his/her point? It
presents a strong analysis of the image, focusing on various visual elements such as color,
positioning, and text. However, there are areas where more analysis could be added, such
as discussing the significance of the character's facial expression or the choice of
clothing. These details could further enhance the understanding of the poster's message
and its connection to the movie.
4. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the thesis? Does the author use solid
transitions to guide his/her ideas? Determine, as a reader, how you want to be presented
with the information. Does the organization work for you? Indicate suggestions for
organization and transitions. Also, mark any tangents that you find in the essay. Yes, I do
believe this essay maintains a focus throughout the whole complete thing as the
transitions consist of very precise ideas.
5. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these
places in the text. I think the author could provide more detail in illustrating the specific
impacts and outcomes of the essay’s advocacy efforts. For instance, they could include
concrete examples of how the website and social media campaigns have influenced
 public opinion. I also think that by providing statistics or even voicing people's opinion,
especially those who live on the border, could provide more for the argument and even
more on the evidence side.
6. Are the introduction and conclusion focused on the main point of the essay? Does the
conclusion answer the three questions? (1. Did I do what I said I would do? 2. Why is this
important? 3. What do I want my audience to do with this information?) It can be seen as
the chosen one image to analyze from the movie poster of "The Florida Project."
However, the introduction does not explicitly indicate the image being analyzed, nor does
it include the image itself. It would improve the essay's clarity if the author introduced
the poster and its significance in the introduction.
6. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses. The strengths could be seen
from the addition of several mentions of logos and how the author builds trust by using
references. I do believe this essay maintains a cohesive focus around the controlling idea
of analyzing the movie poster; However, there are some tangents, such as discussing the
historical context of Walt Disney World and the significance of the color purple, which
could be more directly related to the main argument. The tone and language are generally
appropriate; However, there are instances where the language could be more formal and
academic.
7. What three revision suggestions do you have for the writer? I do believe the conclusion
partially addresses the three questions: it summarizes the main points of the essay and
emphasizes the effectiveness of the poster in conveying the movie's themes. However, it
could be more explicit in addressing why this information is important and what the
author wants the audience to take away from the analysis.
8. I did notice there I do believe a revision point is the suggestion to Strengthen the
organization by streamlining discussions and ensuring each paragraph directly supports
the central thesis, along with by providing Provide more specific examples, and perhaps
address more specifically the questions as to whether the author achieved their stated
objectives, why the information presented is important, and what action they want the
audience to take based on the provided information.
9. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details. I suggest the author provide
more details to their essay as it could benefit the essay as a whole due to how it can show
these specificness.
10. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence. I believe the author could
strengthen their argument by providing more evidence, such as additional details, to
support the claims made about the effectiveness of their topic in the poster.
11. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay. I will say
this very effectively interprets the visual elements and symbolism present in the movie
poster. It also demonstrates a strong understanding of the poster's message and its
connection to the movie's themes. Lastly, the analysis of color, positioning, and text
contributes to a comprehensive understanding of the poster's significance. An area for
improvement I believe could be how this essay needs to be formatted in MLA style with
proper citation and formatting. The analysis could be more focused, with additional
details and evidence provided throughout the essay. Lastly, the introduction should
explicitly introduce the poster being analyzed and its significance to the topic.