Unit 3 Peer Review: Editing Questions, Ashley

1. How is the essay organized? Does each paragraph contain one and only one main idea that
connects to the thesis? Does this organization help move the ideas forward? Tell the author if
the organization works or offer organization ideas.
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each containing one main idea that connects to
the thesis. While generally effective, smoother transitions could enhance coherence.

2. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her
points?
Stronger transitions could be used between paragraphs to strengthen connections between the
author's points.

3. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the text.
If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author. If you do not know the rule,
then simply mention that something seems off.
The essay does not contain any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons. Everything appears
grammatically correct.

4. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these
places in the text.
More detail could be added to further illustrate the author's claim in several places:

1. When discussing the limitations of relying solely on scientific methods.

2. Providing specific examples from the peer-reviewed article to support the argument.
3. Offering more in-depth comparisons with alternative forms of knowledge.

5. Are the style and tone of the essay appropriate for the audience?
Yes, the style and tone of the essay are appropriate for the audience.

6. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and
solid, descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the verbs and nouns.
Yes, the sentences and word choices are varied. The author generally uses strong, active verbs
and solid, descriptive nouns. However, there are areas where stronger verbs and nouns could
be employed for added impact.

7. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the essay
overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or underwhelm you because
there is too little information?
The essay strikes a good balance in terms of providing information without overwhelming the
reader. It presents a clear argument supported by relevant examples and explanations. While
the essay covers various aspects of the topic, it does so in a structured manner, allowing the
reader to follow the author's line of reasoning without feeling overwhelmed. Additionally, the
repetition of certain points reinforces the argument and helps to drive home the author's
perspective. Overall, the essay does not present too much information to the point of
overwhelming the reader, nor does it provide too little information, leaving the reader
underwhelmed.

8. Is the essay confusing because information has been omitted and/or too much information is
assumed to be known by the readers?
No, the essay generally avoids confusion, but providing additional context for certain concepts
could enhance clarity for readers who may not have prior knowledge of the subject matter.
9. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?
yes its in the correct MLA format
10. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.
Strengths:
- Clear organization and structure of arguments.
- Effective use of rhetorical strategies like logos, pathos, and fallacies.
- Integration of relevant examples and evidence to support the argument.

Weaknesses:
- Some concepts could benefit from further explanation or context for readers unfamiliar with the
topic.
- Limited exploration of potential counterarguments or alternative perspectives.
- Could strengthen the conclusion by summarizing key points and reinforcing the main
argument.

11. What are two or three revision suggestions you have for the writer?

1. Clarify concepts: Provide additional explanations for complex concepts to ensure clarity and
understanding for all readers.
2. Address counterarguments: Acknowledge and refute potential counterarguments to
strengthen the overall argument.
3. Enhance conclusion: Summarize key points and reinforce the main argument in a concise
and compelling manner to leave a lasting impact.