Content Review from Zaria

1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you make to the author to get it to
MLA format?

Yes the essay is in MLA format.

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words,
does it reveal something not everyone would know about the meaning of the image? Does the
author make a claim that includes an interpretation about this visual text? Is this claim clear and
direct? What is it? What suggestions do you have for the writer in order to strengthen the claim?
Highlight the controlling idea and tell the author if it reveals new information to you or not.

To strengthen the claim, the author could delve deeper into the symbolism of each visual
element and provide more evidence from the poster to support their analysis.

3. Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas? In other
words, does the author present a definition of the image or a summary or is the author
explaining to readers their analysis of the image? Indicate in the text where the author is
summarizing and where the author is analyzing.

The author could explain how each visual aspect adds to the overall narrative and thematic
details of the movie, diving deeper into its symbolism to deepen their interpretation further.

4. Has the author chosen one (and only one) image to analyze? Does the author indicate the
image in the introduction? Does the author include the image in the introduction?

Yes.

5. Does the author use elements from the image as evidence to support the claim in every
paragraph? If not, indicate in each paragraph where the author should include more evidence.

The author effectively uses elements from the image as evidence to support their claims in the
paragraps.

6. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the controlling idea? Mark any tangents
that you find in the essay.

The paragraph discussing the overall popularity of the "Back to the Future" movie franchise and
its significance in cinema history, while interesting, is slightly off-topic from the main focus of
analyzing the poster's visual elements.

7. Is the tone and language appropriate for your English 1301 class? If not, suggest for the
author what changes they might make.
Yes the tone and words used are appropriate.
8. Does the conclusion answer the three questions (Did I do what I said I would do?; Why is this
important?; and What do I want my audience to do with this information?)

Yes.

9. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details

More information is needed by the author in the paragraph that discusses the quote that goes
with the poster. While they acknowledge its importance in giving background information on the
character and implying that time travel is the main topic, they might have supported their
arguments with more detailed analysis and quotes from the actual passage.

10. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence

The author needs more evidence in the essay to support the analysis of certain visual elements
and their thematic significance.

11. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay.

The author deserves praise for providing a clear and engaging introduction. The author
demonstrates a thorough analysis of the visual elements present in the poster. The essay
maintains a coherent structure throughout, with clear transitions between paragraphs and a
cohesive focus on the analysis of the poster's visual elements.

12. Indicate in the text three places that the author should fix before submitting the essay.

I would just saw for the author to provide more evidence from the picture provided.

Editing Review from Zaria

1. How is the essay organized? Does each paragraph contain one and only one main idea that
connects to the controlling idea for the essay? Does this organization help move the ideas
forward? Tell the author if the organization works or offer organization ideas.

The paper is well structured, with each paragraph concentrating on a distinct feature of the
"Back to the Future" movie poster and how it affects viewers.

2. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her
points?
Stronger transitions at the start or finish of paragraphs help the author's argument flow better
and make connections between arguments more clearly. The author might simply shift from
explaining the significance of the "Back to the Future" movie franchise and the poster to
analyzing the visual aspects by highlighting their role in promoting the movie. For instance:
"Having established the legendary status of the 'Back to the Future' franchise and the iconic
nature of its movie poster, it is essential to delve into the specific visual elements that contribute
to its effectiveness in captivating viewers' attention."

3. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the text.
If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author.

No.

4. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Does the author
provide a sufficient amount of evidence from the image? Indicate these places in the text where
the author gives details and where the author needs to add more.

While the author gives a brief summary of the fire trails' significance in the paragraph, they may
go into further depth to show how the trails affect viewers and relate to the themes of the movie.
Other than that, the author explains each paragraph well.

5. Are the style and tone of the essay appropriate for the audience?

Yes, it is.

6. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and
solid, descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the verbs and nouns.

Yes the author uses good descriptive words.

7. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the essay
overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or underwhelm you because
there is too little information? Indicate in the text where the author needs less or more
information.

In the paragraph discussing Marty McFly's depiction, the author repeats the description of
Marty's expression and posture multiple times, which can be seen as slightly repetitive.

8. Is the essay confusing because information has been omitted and/or too much information is
assumed to be known by the readers?

No, the essay is well-written in that aspect.

9. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?

Yes.

10. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.

The author provides a thorough analysis of various visual elements of the poster, such as the
fire trails, the depiction of Marty McFly, and the quote. They effectively connect these elements
to the themes of the film and offer insightful interpretations. However, The author repeats certain
descriptions, such as Marty McFly's expression and posture, which can make the essay feel
slightly repetitive.

11. What are two or three revision suggestions you have for the writer?

Two revisions would be the run-on sentences and just to go a little deeper in the explanation.

Content Review from Jose

1. Is the essay in MLA format? If not, what suggestions can you give the author to get it to MLA
format?

yes its MLA format

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words,
does it reveal something not everyone would know about the meaning of the image? Does the
author make a claim that includes an interpretation of this visual text? Is this claim clear and
direct? What is it? What suggestions do you have for the writer to strengthen the claim?
Highlight the controlling idea and tell the author if it reveals new information to you or not.

Yes, the essay includes a controlling idea the claim that the Back to the Future movie poster is
one of the best due to its effective use of visual elements, sparking viewer curiosity. The claim is
clear. To strengthen it, the author could provide more specific examples or evidence supporting
why each visual element contributes to the poster's effectiveness.

3. Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas? In other
words, does the author present a definition of the image or a summary, or is the author
explaining to readers their analysis of the image? Indicate in the text where the author is
summarizing and where the author is analyzing.

The author is analyzing when discussing elements like the fire trails, the DeLorean, and Marty
McFly's expression. However, there is room for more analysis in the section about the quote,
which currently leans more toward summarization. The author can develop this part further by
explaining how the quote contributes to the movie's theme and its impact on viewer perception.
4. Has the author chosen one (and only one) image to analyze? Does the author indicate the
image in the introduction? Does the author include the image in the introduction?

No, the author does not explicitly mention a specific image in the introduction, and the essay
lacks a direct connection to a particular movie poster. Including a clear reference to the Back to
the Future movie poster in the introduction would strengthen the essay's focus.

5. Does the author use elements from the image as evidence to support the claim in every
paragraph? If not, indicate in each paragraph where the author should include more evidence.

Yes, the author uses elements from the image, such as fire trails, the DeLorean, and Marty
McFly's expression, to support the claim in most paragraphs. However, the paragraph
discussing the quote could benefit from more explicit connections between the words in the
quote and the visual elements of the poster to strengthen the evidence.

6. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the main idea? Mark any tangents that you
find in the essay.

Yes, the essay maintains a cohesive focus around the main idea of analyzing the Back to the
Future movie poster. There are no noticeable tangents in the provided text.

7. Is the tone and language appropriate for your English 1301 class? If not, suggest to the
author what changes they might make.

Yes, the tone and language are appropriate for an English 1301 class. The writing is clear,
informative, and analytical.

8. Does the conclusion answer the three questions (Did I do what I said I would do?; Why is this
important?; and What do I want my audience to do with this information?)

Yes, the conclusion answers the 3 questions well, speaking about the analysis of the poster and
how the recognition of the different elements helps viewers understand the meaning behind
them.

9. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details.

this essay does not need more details

10. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence

It generally provides evidence to support its analysis of the Back to the Future movie poster, but
the paragraph discussing the quote could benefit from more explicit connections between the
words in the quote and the visual elements of the poster. Adding specific details or examples
could strengthen the evidence in this section.

11. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay

1. The author successfully analyzes visual elements like fire trails, the DeLorean, and Marty
McFly's expression, offering insightful commentary on their significance.
2. The essay maintains a cohesive focus on the Back to the Future movie poster, showcasing a
well-organized structure.
3. The language and tone are suitable for an English 1301 class, presenting clear, informative,
and analytical writing.

12. Indicate in the text three places that the author should fix before submitting the essay

1. The author should explicitly mention the Back to the Future movie poster in the introduction
for a more focused and cohesive essay.
2. The paragraph discussing the quote could benefit from more explicit connections between the
words in the quote and the visual elements of the poster to strengthen the evidence.
3. Consider providing more specific examples or evidence supporting why each visual element
contributes to the poster's effectiveness for a more detailed analysis.

Editing Review from Jose

1. How is the essay organized? Does each paragraph contain one and only one main idea that
connects to the controlling idea for the essay? Does this organization help move the ideas
forward? Tell the author if the organization works or offer organization ideas.

The essay is generally well-organized, with each paragraph focusing on a specific visual
element of the Back to the Future movie poster. However, the paragraph discussing the quote
could have clearer connections to the visual elements. Suggest ensuring that each paragraph
directly connects to and supports the controlling idea for a smoother flow of ideas.

2. Where could the author use stronger transitions to strengthen connections between his/her
points?

The author could use stronger transitions, particularly between the paragraphs discussing
different visual elements of the Back to the Future movie poster. This would help enhance the
overall coherence and flow of the essay. Adding transition sentences that explicitly connect the
ideas and guide the reader through the analysis would strengthen the connections between
points.

3. Does the author have any fragments, comma splices, or run-ons? If so, mark them in the text.
If you know the rule, then go ahead an offer advice to the author. If you do not know the rule,
then simply mention that something seems off.
does not contain any obvious fragments, comma splices, or run-ons. The writing is structurally
sound.

4. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Does the author
provide a sufficient amount of evidence from the image? Indicate these places in the text where
the author gives details and where the author needs to add more.

The author provides detailed analysis in various sections, such as discussing the fire trails, the
DeLorean, and Marty McFly's expression. However, in the paragraph discussing the quote, the
author could add more details to explicitly connect the words in the quote with the visual
elements of the poster. Strengthening this connection would provide more evidence to support
the overall claim.

5. Are the style and tone of the essay appropriate for the audience?

Yes, the style and tone of the essay are appropriate for the audience, maintaining a suitable
balance of formality and engagement for an English 1301 class.

6. Are the sentences and word choices varied? Does the author use strong, active verbs and
solid, descriptive nouns? Indicate where the author could strengthen the verbs and nouns

The sentences and word choices are generally varied, but there is room for improvement in
using stronger, more active verbs and more descriptive nouns. Specifically, the author could
strengthen the verbs and nouns when discussing Marty McFly's expression and the quote to
enhance the overall vividness of the analysis.

7. Is the author too repetitive or present too much information? In other words, does the essay
overwhelm you as a reader because there is too much information or underwhelm you because
there is too little information? Indicate in the text where the author needs less or more
information

The author maintains a balanced amount of information, avoiding both overwhelming and
underwhelming the reader. However, in the paragraph discussing the quote, the author could
provide more specific examples or details to avoid potential underwhelming and strengthen the
overall analysis.

8. Is the essay confusing because information has been omitted and/or too much information is
assumed to be known by the readers?

No, the essay is not confusing due to omitted information or assumptions. The author provides a
clear and coherent discussion of the Back to the Future movie poster without confusing.

9. Is the essay in the correct MLA format?

yes this essay is in MLA format

10. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses

Strengths:
1. Effective analysis of visual elements like fire trails, the DeLorean, and Marty McFly's
expression.
2. Maintains a cohesive focus on the Back to the Future movie poster.
3. Appropriate language and tone for an English 1301 class.

Weaknesses:
1. The paragraph discussing the quote could benefit from more explicit connections to visual
elements for stronger evidence.
2. Some opportunities for stronger transitions between paragraphs to enhance overall flow.
3. The essay could include more specific examples or evidence supporting the analysis for a
more detailed discussion.

11. What are two or three revision suggestions you have for the writer?

1. Strengthen connections between the quote and visual elements for more robust evidence.
2. Improve transitions between paragraphs to enhance overall flow.
3. Provide more specific examples or evidence to support the analysis for a more detailed
discussion.