eet Clear and concise writing makes it easy for the reader to understand the ideas We ‘vent to convey. Remember {NeSe points when weting sentences and paragraphs: = Separate sentences that contain more than one jdea into two- | Combine short semtencht ‘hat contain related i625 IMO OF sentence. ae * simplify overloaded sentences by cutting out unnecessary details OF descriptions. Sena iden in HITE STN ina paragraph should be related. A. Improve the group of sentences below using the above guidance. y, Jonathan watched a television show about dinosaurs that was very interesting and he wanted to learn more about dinosaurs 8 NE asked his parents to take him tothe museum sO that he could leam more. ig ae eee 2, Jonathan brought afriend. His friend’s name ig Matthew. Matthew likes dinosaurs, t00- Matthew had never been to the museum before. Matthew as very excited. ge ee =e 3. They visited all of the exhibits about dinosaurs. They stopped for junch in the cafeteria. They were not tired. They visited the exhibits about ancient Egypt after lunch.B. Put each group of related ideas below in one sentence. Decide on the order of presenting the ideas before writing, Example: Sarah went to the mall. She went to the bookstore. She bought a new novel, She bought the one her friend recommended to her. Because her friend men book, Sara nt te }ookstore in the mall and bought the new novel 1, The Smiths went on a vacation. They went to Italy. They went to Rome in Italy. They stayed there for two weeks. 2. It was Alex’s birthday. Marjorie came to visit Alex. Marjorie brought him a present. Marjorie brought him a cake. 3. The cave was pitch dark. The cave was eerie. The children held their breaths, They dared not make a sound‘Afaulty parallel occurs when the coordinate elements in asentence do not have @ onsistent grammatical construction Example: We like swimming: fishing, and basebellin the SUmIne ® We like swimming, shin, and playing baseball in the surnmes ” = f C. Rewrite the following sentences to correct the faulty parallels. 1. Mysister always wants tO get the lead role and becoming famous. 2. Weight gain is often the result of eating foo much candy, junk food, and eating between meals. hey think science projects are more interesting than English wo 4. Iris irnportant to work hard and doing wellin school \ 5. Her success was due to her perseverance hard i work, and she was getting support from her family. gualTo avoid confusion in meaning, we need to keep the modifier close to the words it modifies. Example: He saw an old building walking into an alley. (x) (The sentence seems to say that an old building was walking into an alley.) Walking into an alley, he saw an old building. (v) es D. Rewrite the following sentences to correct the dangling and misplaced modifiers. You may change the order of the words or add new words. 1. They specially baked a huge birthday cake for her. 2. The undercover Police officer caught the pickpocket posing as a tourist. 3. My father almost earned two thousand dollars more for the additional work. 4. She read the story about Little Ann with her sister, 5. He caught sight of a spider talking to his mother. & is0v: 970.1 207457.061 Compete Enlsismant- Grade 6 (6)