Essay Plan:

 Introduction: various factors. Agree that the main factor is not money
 Paragraph 2: money is a motivation for people to remain in the workforce – support
themselves/their families; some want a career with a high salary. Some employers offer
more money to retain employees e.g sales targets
 Paragraph 3: other factors (1) job satisfaction – e.g. outdoor work may be more
satisfying than a well-paid job that you don’t like. (2) contributing to the community e.g.
Mr Kurt in Vietnam.
 Conclusion: there are various factors, but money is not the main motivation for
remaining in the workforce.
Essay:
There are various reasons why people may want to remain in paid work. While I accept that
money is an important factor for some, I believe that others remain in the workforce for other
reasons
On the one hand, there are some reasons why money is one of the motivations for people to
remain in the workforce. One reason is that some simply wish to have an acceptable standard of
living, and they need this living wage to support themselves or their families. Thus, even if their
salary is low, they could not survive without it. Another reason is that others want to pursue a
successful career in order to earn a high salary. For example, employers may offer a pay rise
to an ambitious employee who is able to achieve a company sales target. Therefore, money is a
major factor in inducing both modest people as well as high-flyers to stay in work.
On the other hand, for the majority of employees, there are other factors which motivate them
more strongly to stay in work. Firstly, many people value factors such as job satisfaction as
more important than their salary. If a person adores the outdoor life, he or she will not be happy
being a stockbroker or a financier, no matter that the salaries for both those jobs are extremely
high. Secondly, contributing to the community is another reason to value a job. For instance,
Mr Kurt, who has lived in Vietnam for about 20 years, has constructed 6 schools and other
facilities for disabled children. He left his job with the Danish Embassy to bring about changes to
the lives of youngsters.
In conclusion, I agree that money can be an important factor for employees to stay in
the workforce, but this is by no means the key consideration for most people.
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Vocabulary from work:

 job satisfaction

Meaning: the good feeling that you get when you have a job that you enjoy
 Example: A high salary is not necessarily the most important factor in job
satisfaction.

 to pursue a successful career

Meaning: to have a series of jobs in a particular area of work, with more
responsibility as time passes
Example: While many people wish to pursue a successful career, for others it is
more important to find work which is interesting and enjoyable.
Other vocabulary:

 to concede [verb]:
Meaning: to admit, often unwillingly, that something is true or logical
Example: The President conceded that he had given inaccurate information to the
newspapers.

 high-flyer [noun]:

Meaning: a person who has the potential to be very successful in their career
Example: John is a high-flyer and he became a company manager after only five
years.

 stockbroker [noun]:

Meaning: a person who buys and sells shares in companies for other people
Example: I sent money to a stockbroker to invest in shares in an oil company.

 to bring about [phrasal verb]:

Meaning: to cause something to happen

Example: The hot weather has brought about large forest fires this summer.