Opinion essay

Detail sentences

There is more and more violence in movies and on TV, therefore it is

necessary for the government to control the amount of it to decrease the
violent crimes in the society.

Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any
relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

AGREE DISAGREE
- responsibility (TS1) -
 EXPLAIN: a single person
cannot build a house
 RESULT: overloaded and
stressed

- improve marriage life (TS2)

 KEY POINT: one appreciates
other’s help
 RESULT: work performance
improved

- promote gender equality (TS3)

 KEY POINT: a stereotype
women have to take care all (both
family and work)
 RESULT: share of work liberates
women

To begin with, sharing evenly household chores proves responsibility of both

partners. This is due to the fact that a single person cannot establish and
maintain the sustainable marriage life. As a result, if one spouse is
overloaded with both professional and domestic tasks, they will get stressed.

Second of all, distributing housework equally improves marriage life. It is

undeniable that wives appreciate the supports from their husbands. Not only
can this share of work boost martial life, but it also enhances the work
performance of both spouses.

On top of that, sharing housework helps to promote gender equality. The

reason lies upon the fact that there is a common stereotype that has existed a
long time which indicated that females ought to stay at home, taking care of
family, doing all the housework, looking after children once they get married.
For this reason, this suggestion will liberate women and eradicate sexism in
society.
 KEY POINT (no-proof argument)
 EXPLANATION (give reason)
 RESULT (give effect)
 EXAMPLE
 REINFORCING POINT (in addition / moreover)
The best solution for reducing crime is building more prisons.

Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your opinion.

A small fraction of people proposes that the most effective method to lower
the criminal rate is by establishing a larger number of detaining cells.
However, from the writer’s perspective, I object this suggestion.

In this day and age, crime rate all over the world is increasing exponentially.
To combat this problem, some people propose that governments should build
more prisons. In my opinion, construction of more detaining cells will not
solve the problem.

In the era of industrial revolution, it is a common belief that the crime rate
increases comparatively and people think that building additional prisons is
the most effective way to reduce crimes. As far as I am concerned, this is not
the solution because of the following reasons.

It is a common belief that building more prisons contributes to the reduction

of crimes. However, I firmly believe that the government should reduce
prison population than building new ones.
BODY 1: Topic sentence 1. 2 detail sentences. (KEY POINT – RESULT –
EXAMPLE)

To start with, it is common knowledge that prisons are being used to punish
criminals, not to reduce them (TS1). While building more prisons can help
the government jail more people, it will not be useful in deterring people
from committing crimes (KEY POINT). Researches conducted from multiple
organizations showed that the US ranked first in both the amount of prisons
built and the amount of inmates, which proves that prisons are not the
solution to reduce crime (EXAMPLE).

To begin with, constructing more prisons will have no effect on criminal rate.
As far as I am concerned, the law existed as a warning and a threat to those
who had a willing to commit a crime (KEY POINT). Hence, the fear of
getting punished is the key to reduce the number of criminals (RESULT).
However, a larger number of cells does not apply a heavy enough pressure to
be afraid of (CONTRAST). Moreover, there are other methods which were
proven to be successful, such as passing through a stricter law by putting a
heavier fine or sending law enforces to roam the street
(REINFORCEMENT).
Secondly, constructing more prisons will put a huge strain on the
government’s budget. It is expensive to build prisons from scratch and it
costs a lot to maintain from hiring people to keep the security. The budget for
building prisons can be used for other activities that can be more helpful in
reducing crimes. For example, instead of constructing detaining cells, the
government can put the budget on educating people of the fact of crimes and
helping people who are most vulnerable to re-committing crimes.