What makes a good personal statement:

Don’t be irrelevant

Add relevant skills and experiences,

Explain and elaborate on said experiences:

 Mention work experience at bf1 systems – a view into a modern engineering environment
 Find your future, presentation skills, teamwork and project time management
 Mention work waiter – time management, communication + teamwork skills
 a-level subjects – physics: problem solving

originally wanted to do mechanical engineering, but pivoted to marine/mechanical engineering after

research.

Draft:

My draft:

I am writing to convey my interest in attending your _____ Engineering degree course (Course no’: ).

I have always been interested in the design and construction of a variety of things: from cars to
submarines and computers to the most simple of mechanisms; and I am excited to continue learning
about more through engineering.

I am currently studying Engineering, Physics, and Computer Science at University Technical College
Norfolk (UTCN). Engineering is particularly suited to the course I wish to apply for, as it is a great
foundation to launch into the degree level course from. Physics is also beneficial as it promotes the
development of advanced problem solving and logical thinking.

During my time at UTCN, I have participated in a variety of projects that have honed many skills that
are applicable to the course. For example, our project set by EEEGR – to create a plan for an
educational model of a wind turbine – had a very short deadline and we had to present out projects
during exam season. This allowed me to gain experience in good communication and teamwork skills
- and especially time management skills – as we wouldn’t have completed our project in time
without them.

In addition to the projects, I also have had 2 weeks of work experience at BF1 systems. This allowed
me to have a glimpse of a modern engineering environment. I was exposed to modern engineering
principles in the development and creation of advanced automotive systems. Those 2 weeks
deepened my knowledge in advanced automotive systems and my presentation skills as I had to
effectively communicate my ideas to the senior engineering team.

I am currently employed part time at a local restaurant. This enables me to plan my time more
effectively as I have to balance my free time properly otherwise my school work would suffer.

In the future, I hope to work on submersible vehicles. I had originally wanted to just study
mechanical engineering, however, after much research, I have changed my mind, and wish to pivot
toward a more marine focused mechanical engineering course.

I am exited to continue my education at your institution, as your engineering course is renowned to

be excellent, and it will accelerate my technical knowledge to new heights.
Sincerely,

Leo Andrews.

Chat GPT Draft:

I am writing to express my sincere interest in enrolling in your [Degree Name] Engineering program,
with a particular focus on [Course No.]. My lifelong fascination with designing and constructing
various innovations, from cars to submarines, computers to intricate mechanisms, has driven my
passion for engineering. I am eager to extend my knowledge and skills further through your
esteemed program.

Currently, I am pursuing studies in Engineering, Physics, and Computer Science at University

Technical College Norfolk (UTCN). These subjects have equipped me with a strong foundation,
making me well-prepared for the rigorous demands of your engineering program. Physics, in
particular, has fostered advanced problem-solving abilities and logical thinking, skills I believe are
essential for an engineering career.

Throughout my time at UTCN, I have actively participated in a number of projects that have honed
many useful skills. One notable project, assigned by EEEGR, tasked us with creating an educational
model of a wind turbine that was interesting for a younger audience within a tight deadline. We had
to present our projects during the exam season, which enhanced my time management skills. in
addition to this, my communication and teamwork skills improved. These skills proved instrumental
in our project's successful completion.

In addition to my project experiences, I completed a two-week work placement at BF1 Systems,

providing me with invaluable exposure to a contemporary engineering environment. This experience
deepened my understanding of advanced automotive systems and refined my presentation skills as I
effectively communicated my ideas to the senior engineering team.

Currently, I balance my academic commitments with part-time employment at a local restaurant.

This experience has taught me effective time management, a skill that is crucial for academic success
and future career endeavours.

Looking ahead, my aspiration is to work on submersible vehicles. While I initially considered pursuing
mechanical engineering, extensive research has led me to realize the exciting possibilities within
marine-focused mechanical engineering courses.

I am excited to continue my education at your institution, as your engineering course is renowned to

be excellent, and it will accelerate my technical knowledge to new heights.

Sincerely,

Leo Andrews.

Combined after ai detectors:

I am writing to express my sincere interest in enrolling in your [___] Engineering program, with a
particular focus on [Course No’: ]. My lifelong fascination with designing and constructing various
innovations, from cars to submarines, computers to intricate mechanisms, has driven my passion for
engineering. I am eager to extend my knowledge and skills further through your esteemed program.

Currently, I am studying Engineering, Physics, and Computer Science at University Technical College
Norfolk (UTCN). These subjects have equipped me with a strong foundation, making me well-
prepared for higher education - specifically engineering in the case of your course. Physics, in
particular, has developed advanced problem-solving abilities and logical thinking, skills I believe are
invaluable for an engineering career.

Throughout my time at UTCN, I have participated in a number of projects that have honed
many useful skills. One notable project, assigned by EEEGR, tasked us with creating an educational
model of a wind turbine that was interesting for a younger audience within a tight deadline. We had
to present our projects during the exam season, which enhanced my time management skills. in
addition to this, my communication and teamwork skills improved. These skills proved instrumental
in our project's successful completion.

In addition to my experiences within UTCN, I completed a two-week work experience at BF1 Systems,
which provided me with invaluable exposure to a modern engineering environment. This experience
deepened my understanding of advanced automotive systems, allowed me a glimpse into how the
day to day of an engineering job is, and refined my presentation skills as I effectively communicated
my ideas to the senior engineering team.

Currently, I balance my academic commitments with part-time employment at a local restaurant.

This experience has imparted upon me the importance of efficient time management, a critical
aptitude for academic triumph and prospective professional pursuits.

In the future, I hope to work on submersible vehicles. While I initially considered doing a mechanical
engineering course, after considerable research I discovered the exciting possibilities and complex
problems to solve within a marine-focused mechanical engineering course and, hopefully, career.

I am excited to continue my education at your institution, as your engineering course is renowned to

be excellent, and it will accelerate my technical knowledge to new heights.

Sincerely,

Leo Andrews.