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TOEIC Writing Tips
1. Know the format of the test– The first and foremost thing you need to
do is to get acquaintance with the format of the TOEIC English test.
This will not only help you know what types of questions you will be
asked but also prepare a strategy to deal with them. This will also keep
you calm and confident on the test day.
2. Develop a strategy- After you have known what kind of questions you
will be asked on the TOEIC writing test; develop a strategy to tackle
each kind of questions. You can practice beforehand to know which
questions take more time and which ones take less time. This way you
can also manage your time for the TOEIC writing test.
3. Time management- Time management is the key in TOEIC writing
test. You are required to answer 8 questions for different writing tasks.
Each kind of question requires a different strategy to follow. During
the practice time, you can know which questions take more time and
which ones take less (as stated above). Accordingly, you can manage
time for the different type of questions.
4. Learn to brainstorm- Brainstorming is vital in TOEIC writing test.
Since the different aspects of your writing skills are going to be
assessed. Therefore you need to brainstorm to get an idea what the
topic, picture or essay is about. This will also develop your creative
thinking skills for the test.
5. Take help– You can get help from someone who is experienced. After
writing, get your writing checked by an experienced or skilled person
who can guide you about your mistakes and how to correct them. This
is a good way to improving your writing skills and hence mistakes.
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Task Description Evaluation Criteria
1–5
Write a Write 1 sentence based on a
sentence picture. Grammar
based With each picture, you will be Relevance of the
on a given 2 words or phrases that sentences
picture you must use in your sentence.
You can change the forms of the
words and you can use the words
in any order.
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DESCRIBE
A PICTURE
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Questions 1-5: Pictures
In questions 1-5 you will be asked to write sentences based on
pictures. Each picture will have two words that you must use in
your sentence. You can change the forms of the words. You will be
scored on grammar as well as on the relevance of the sentence to
the picture.
Question 2: together, table
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Questions 1-5: Pictures
In questions 1-5 you will be asked to write sentences based on
pictures. Each picture will have two words that you must use in
your sentence. You can change the forms of the words. You will be
scored on grammar as well as on the relevance of the sentence to
the picture.
Question 3: beside, chatting
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Questions 1-5: Pictures
In questions 1-5 you will be asked to write sentences based on
pictures. Each picture will have two words that you must use in
your sentence. You can change the forms of the words. You will be
scored on grammar as well as on the relevance of the sentence to
the picture.
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Questions 1-5: Pictures
In questions 1-5 you will be asked to write sentences based on
pictures. Each picture will have two words that you must use in
your sentence. You can change the forms of the words. You will be
scored on grammar as well as on the relevance of the sentence to
the picture.
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RESPOND
AN EMAIL
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SAMPLE ANSWER
For these questions you will have to respond in writing to an email
request. You will have ten minutes to read and respond to each
question.
Sample response:
Hi. Thank you for your message. We are excited about selling our
home privately. Your sister is welcome to call me at 222-444-4444
to schedule a time to see our home. We will be showing it this
weekend. We are willing to negotiate but will not be able to drop
the price too much. We have just spent $7000 on basement
renovations.
Warm regards,
James Canyon
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Bài 1. Description of Question Type
In this part of the test, you will be asked to respond to an e-mail asking
you for information. You will read a short e-mail, then you will be given
specific instructions on what to include in your response. For example,
after an e-mail asking for directions, you may be asked to include four
steps. (You can’t just say, It’s right across the street from you.) You
will have 10 minutes to read the e-mail and the additional instructions
and write your response.
Your response will be scored on
1. the quality and variety of your sentences,
2. vocabulary, and
3. organization.
Thank you for your interest in the Account Manager position. I would
like to invite you to interview for the position. We are scheduling
interviews on Tuesday and Thursday after 1 p.m. Could you please
submit three times that work for you?
Sincerely,
Stewart Balkin, Manager of Human Resources
Directions: Respond to the e-mail. In your e-mail, give TWO pieces
of information.
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EMAIL 2 : Read the e-mail below.
From: Kelly Hartfield
To: Nan Schmidt
Subject: Dinner
Sent: March 1, 2:33 p.m.
Hi, Nan.
Thanks for inviting Donald and me to me your potluck dinner! We
would love to come. Could you tell me what sort of dish we should
bring? And, do any other guests have dietary restrictions that you know
of?
Thanks,
Kelly
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Bài 2. Beginning Your Email
In this part of the test, you will be asked to respond to an e-mail asking
you for information. Your responses sound more natural if you begin
with a greeting and an acknowledgment that you received the request. In
this unit, we will practice how to begin how to begin your message.
Once decision you need to make to determine how to respond is how
formal your response will be. Your response should be about as formal
as the e-mail you receive. Use a simple rating system to determine how
formal it is.
1. Formal: An e-mail from someone you don’t know about business
matters.
2. Somewhere in between formal and informal
3. Informal: An e-mail from someone you know about personal
matters.
FORMAL LETTER
From: Sunnyvale Public Library
To: S. Cameron
Subject: Overdue books
Sent: July 16, 8:15 p.m.
According to our record, you borrowed two books that were due July 2
and they have not been returned. There is now a late fee of $6.15 owed
on these books. Please return them as soon as possible to avoid greater
late fee.
Thank you.
The e-mail is from someone you do not know. It has to do with business
matters. It ranks a 1 on the formality scale. Your response needs to be
more formal as well.
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BETWEEN FORMAL AND INFORMAL LETTER
From: speters@google.com
To: Jevens@google.com
Subject: Travel Directions
We’ve never met, but I got your name from Ralph in Tech Services. He
said you travel a lot. I’m taking my first business trip next month. Can
you tell me how to get to the airport from Cupertino?
Jim
This e-mail rates a 2 on the formality scale. The recipient doesn’t know
Jim, but they work together, and the request is somewhat personal in
nature.
You might respond
Dear Jim,
I’d be happy to tell you how to get to the airport.
INFORMAL LETTER
From: Jane
To: Dan
Subject: This weekend
Hi, Dan
I just wanted to see if we were still going to see a movie together this
weekend. I’d really like to see Murder Mystery! I’m free Saturday
afternoon.
Jane
This e-mail is from someone you know and it relates to personal matters.
Below is an opening for an informal response
You might respond
Jane,
Good to hear from you!
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1. Formal
To Whom It May Concern,/ Dear [Mr./Ms. Last Name],
I received your e-mail stating that [subject of the original e-mail].
2. In between
Dear [ Name],
I’d be happy to tell you [information requested].
3. Informal
[Name],
Good to hear from you!
Dear Steven,
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EMAIL 5: Read the e-mail below.
From: Farmdale Reporter
To: Daniel T. Smith
Subject: Your subscription
Sent: April 3, 2:08 p.m.
We are writing to notify you that the credit card number you provide us
iu no longer valid. Please provide us with a different account if you
would like to continue to receive home delivery of the Farmdale
Reporter. Please include your card’s expiration date. We value your
business.
Directions: Respond to the e-mail. In your e-mail, ask ONE question
and provide TWO pieces of information.
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EMAIL 7: Read the e-mail below.
From: Jonathan Beckel
To: Elizabeth Jeffery
Subject: Internships
Sent: May 2, 2:31 p.m.
Thank you
Directions: Respond to the e-mail. In your e-mail, give TWO pieces
of information and ask ONE question.
Thank you
Directions: Respond to the e-mail. In your e-mail, give TWO pieces
of information and ask ONE question.
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Bài 3. Giving “How To” Instructions
Some of the e-mails in this section of the test will ask you to explain
how to do something. For example, you might be asked how to send a
fax or bake a cake. In this unit, you will learn a few linguistic
“signposts” to use to make your instructions more precise. Using these
signposts will boost your score for organization.
Basically, when you give instructions, you are guiding someone through
a series of steps in sequence. These are appropriate words to indicate
sequence:
First, [step 1]
Next, [step 2]
Then, [step 3]
Finally, [last step]
Using these words will help the reader have a clear idea of the order of
instructions.
Often, when you give instructions, you also need to help the person
avoid common mistakes. Here are some phrases that clearly indicate
that’s what you’re doing.
Notice that the first phrase specifically tells someone what not to do,
whereas the next two remind the person of what they need to do.
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EMAIL 9: Read the e-mail below.
From: Alyssa Levine
To: Carson Davidson
Subject: Ruth’s birthday
Hi, Carson.
Thanks so much for making sure Ruth gets s birthday cake tomorrow. I
understand she wants a chocolate cake with chocolate icing. I basically
know how to make a cake, but wondered if you could tell me exactly
how to make the cake Ruth likes.
Thanks in advance!
Hi, David.
I’m really excited to babysit for you and April tomorrow. I’m a tiny bit
worried about getting Ben to sleep, though. You had said there was a
magic way to get him to go to sleep. Could you tell me again what it is?
Otherwise, I can’t wait to spend time with baby Ben!
Thanks!
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Bài 4. Giving Directions
In the last unit, you learned how to give how to instructions. In this unit,
you will learn how to give directions to a certain place. Using the right
vocabulary for giving directions will improve the vocabulary portion of
your score.
The following phrases/ sentences are useful in giving directions.
Go out the door and take a left
Follow this street until you get to Van Hour Avenue
Follow the signs for Hastings Boulevard
Turn right/ Take a right
Turn left/ Take a left
Look for the orange sign
Go 3 blocks
At the fourth light
You’ll see a corner store on the right.
My house is the second one on the left.
If you pass Carlton Street, you’ve gone too far.
Take the Main Street exit
Here are sample instructions:
Go out the door and make a left. Go down one block to 24th Street.
Make a left. Follow 24th Street about 6 blocks until you reach South
Van Ness. Make a right. The grocery store is halfway down the block
on the right. If you reach 23rd Street, you’ve gone too far.
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EMAIL 11: Read the e-mail below.
From: Dan Jacson
To: Matthew Koster
Subject: Plans
Hi, Matthew.
I wanted to let you know that my flight arrives Friday at 2:30. I have a
rental car all lined up, so all I need to know is how to get to your house.
I’ll be coming in on Route 1 headed north, so I just need to know how to
get your place from there. Thanks a bunch, and I can’t wait to see you!
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Bài 5. Closing Your Message
Using appropriate closing sentences to conclude your message gives you
one final chance to demonstrate your excellent skills in written English.
In fact, memorizing just four sentences will allow you to use your
concluding sentence to demonstrate grammatical variety, vocabulary and
organization – three bases for your score on this section.
3. If you are giving information about a job, an item for sale, or some
other situations in which the person will determine whether they are
interested in learning more based on your responses, an appropriate
concluding sentence is:
Please let me know if there’s any other information I
can help you with.
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EMAIL 13: Read the e-mail below.
From: Carla Sondheim
To: Edward McCurdy
Subject: Car for sale
Edward,
I am interested in the ’94 Toyota you have for sale. Could you tell me
when the last maintenance work was done on it? Does it need any
repairs now (including body work)? Also, when would be a good time
for me to come and see it?
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OPINION
ESSAY
Questions 8: Opinion Essay
In this part of the test you will be asked to write an opinion essay in
which you state, explain, and support reasons about your opinion.
You will have 30 minutes to plan and write your essay. Leave a
little time to proofread and edit your essay. Your essay should be 4-
5 paragraphs in length. It will be rated in terms of organization,
grammar, vocabulary, and coherence.
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Thời gian làm việc trung
Sample answer bình trong một ngày là từ 7
đến 8 tiếng. Vậy bao nhiêu
The average work day is seven to eight hours long. How much of tiếngthis trong khoảng thời
gian này dành cho công
time is spent working? People who work on computers have manyviệc? Nhiều người làm
distractions due to the Internet. Some companies have been forcedviệcto trên máy tính bị xao
restrict usage of certain sites, such as Facebook and Twitter due tonhãng bởi mạng Internet.
Một số công ty bắt buộc
concerns about productivity. It is a wise decision to remove these cấm sử dụng một số trang
Internet temptations. web nhất định, cụ thể như
là fb và tw để không ảnh
hưởng đến năng suất. đó là
A boss is not a babysitter. Though some people only log onto Facebook
or surf the Internet on their own time, other people cannot resist một quyết định khôn ngoan
để loại bỏ những cám dỗ
temptation. Having rules about Internet use is not enough. Some trên Internet.
employees cannot stand to be stuck in their offices without social
interaction. If they need a short break, they should be encouraged to
stand up and stretch. Unlike chatting to friends on Facebook, this type of
activity increases productivity. By blocking certain social sites from a
system, the boss need not waste time monitoring those who cannot
follow rules.
bị thiệt hại
When time is wasted online it is the company that pays for the loss.
Employees on salary still get paid no matter how productive they are.
tăng lương hoặc nhận tiền thưởng
Those who waste time may not get raises or bonuses, but they still get a
paycheque. It is only the employer that loses out when time is wasted
online. Employers should not feel guilty about restricting Internet
access. If surfing the Internet and sending out Tweets is not part of one's
job description, these activities take away from true duties.
Some employees have lost their jobs because they wrote something
online against their own company. It is too easy to press send, post, or
publish these days. Preventing employees from using certain websites
actually protects the employees as well.
trung thực
There are many honest workers who can be trusted at work. They only
check Facebook or Twitter during their break time or lunch, and they
don't post any information that could damage the company's (or their
một số nhân viên
own) reputation. Unfortunately, there are always a handful of workers
who cannot be trusted. By eliminating the temptation, employers can
prevent any problems related to Internet abuse in the workplace.
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Bài 1.Organizing an Essay with a Thesis Statement
Remember, the essay portion of the TOEIC Writing test is not designed
to test your ideas. It is designed to test how well you can write in
English. In other words, it tests whether you know how to put together,
or organize, an essay.
The basic structure of your essay should be as follows:
An introductory paragraph, which concludes a thesis statement
2-3 body paragraphs, which serve to prove your thesis statement
A conclusion paragraph, which summarizes what you have proven
and why it matters
The most important part of your essay is the thesis statement. The thesis
statement tells the reader what your main point is. For example, if an
essay question asks whether you think career or family is more
important, your thesis stamen could be:
Notice that the thesis statement above has both an assertion ( family is
more important) and a brief explanation (because the most important
parts of our lives have to do with the intimacy family life provides ).
A thesis statement should always include both parts.
The thesis statement is also a road map of your essay. The thesis
statement above indicates that in each of your body paragraphs, you will
show how the most important parts of our lives have to do with the
intimacy family life provides. Each body paragraph will be an
example must include both parts.
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Prompt:
Many people work because they need money to live. What are some
other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons.
Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
Student 1
Thesis: Some people work because they think they are supposed to.
Student 2
Thesis: People who don’t need income from a job sometimes work
anyway because work is the only way they know how to feel good about
themselves.
Example 1: powerful CEOs have huge amounts of money, but
they enjoy being in charge too much to quit.
Example 2: people who have inherited fortunes sometimes work
in fairly uninteresting jobs because they think working makes
them better people
Example 3: sometimes wealthy people create organizations to run rather
tha working somewhere else – it’s about their egos
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Bài 2. Brainstorming: Choosing Your Thesis
Your answer will not be scored based on whether the test makers agree with
your claim. It will only be scored based on whether you adequately support
whatever claim you make. Therefore, the best way to choose a claim is to see
which claim you will most readily be able to support. For example, if the
question asked you if you thought pit bulls should be illegal to breed and you
came up with two reasons why they should and three reasons why they
shouldn’t, you ought to defend the position that they should not be illegal to
breed.
As this example already suggests, the first step toward choosing a thesis
statement is to jot down the ideas you have on both sides of the issue. You
may not always choose your thesis based solely on which you come up with
more examples for. You will also need to think about which of the reasons
you will be able to explain persuasively. A reason that is so simple that it can
be fully stated and explained in one paragraph probably isn’t a good one. On
the order hand, a reason that is so abstract or complicates that you’re not sure
you would be able to argue it persuasively might be one to cross off your list
of ideas before choosing a thesis statement.
Imagine that after crossing off ideas that you don’t think will work, your notes
look like this:
Should it be illegal to breed pit bulls?
Yes
Scientific evidence that they are more aggressive than other dogs
People who breed fighting dogs usually breed pit bulls.
People who want pit bulls could get other, similar dogs, such as
bulldogs or American terriers.
Making this kind of breeding illegal would also increase animal control
departments’ ability to shut down other unethical breeders.
No
It seems unfair to people who have well-behaved pit bulls.
Clearly, you will want to argue for making it illegal to breed pit bulls. But
your essay will be better if you can make your thesis statement a little more
specific. Do your arguments in favor have anything in common? All but the
last one share the basic philosophy that banning pit bull breeding would be a
targeted way to get rid of the most aggressive dogs. They could all fit under
the following thesis statement:
Making it illegal to breed pit bulls would decrease the number of
very aggressive dogs without burdening dog lover very much.
Since the fourth reason does not fit with this thesis statement, cross it out.
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Four steps in arriving at the thesis statement
1. Write down ideas you have on both sides of the issue in the
question prompt
2. Eliminate ideas that you couldn’t explain well
3. Find a common thread among (most of) the remaining ideas,
and eliminate the ideas that don’t fit
4. Write the thesis to express that common thread
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Bài 3. Making an Outline
As you think about which examples are stronger and weaker and which
are more closely related, you are already thinking about logical
connections between your examples. These logical connections will
become your transitions between paragraphs. A poorly written essay will
have transitions like First, Also, and Another thing is… These
transitions do not make logical or meaningful connections between the
two paragraphs they connect. An excellent essay will have transitions
such as The idea of X leads us to Y or You may be wondering, what
about Y?.
As you decide on paragraph order, write down the connection between
each two paragraphs you put next to each other. Here is a complete
outline for the essay about pit bulls:
Thesis: Making it illegal to breed pit bulls would decrease the number
of very aggressive dogs without burdening dog lover very
much.
Example 1: Scientific evidence that they are more aggressive than other
dogs
Transition: Because they’re naturally aggressive to begin with,
breeders who want fighting dogs usually breed pit bulls, and breed
them to be even more aggressive.
Example 2: People who breed fighting dogs usually breed pit bulls.
Transition: No breeding pit bulls these bad guys out of business,
but wouldn’t have too strong a negative impact on responsible
dog owners who like pit bulls.
Example 3: People who want pit bulls could get other, similar dogs,
such as bulldogs or American terriers.you could order them A, B, C, or
C, A, B.
No matter how long it takes you to write an outline, you are not ready to
begin writing your essay until you have it. An outline is like a blueprint
for a building. A building built without one would almost certainly not
be too solid. It is probably a good idea to spend between 5-8 minutes
writing your outline. Be aware of the time. If you spend more than 8
minutes on the outline, you risk not finishing writing the essay you’ve
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Bài 4. Writing an Introduction
Your essay also needs an introduction. Your introduction should be a
short paragraph that guides the reader to your thesis statement. The
thesis statement should come at the end first paragraph.
Just as you don’t begin a conversation with a claim like it should be
illegal to breed pit bulls, you don’t begin your essay with your thesis
statement. You need to introduce the reader gradually to the topic, and
give them an idea of why it matters. Imagine yourself in a conversation
– what kind of conversation would lead you to claim that it should be
illegal to breed pit bulls? Probably one about the problem of aggressive
dogs, or maybe a particular dog attack.
Because the introduction is the first thing a reader will read, if you can
make it exciting at all, you should try that. Describing a dog attack
would certainly be exciting, but the problem of aggressive dogs could
also be presented in a way designed to grab the reader’s attention.
As you plan your introduction, think of yourself in a conversation or
reading a magazine article. What kinds of information would lead you to
make the claim in your thesis statement?
Below are five claims. They aren’t all specific enough to be excellent
thesis statement, but they are specific enough for our purposes here.
Imagine yourself making these claims in a conversation, or imagine a
writer making them in a magazine article. Try to make your introduction
exciting and interesting, but the most important thing is to make it
logically consistent with your thesis statement. Write a sentence or notes
describing what you would include in an introduction to an essay with
the following thesis statement.
1. Small businesses should not be exempt from laws banning
employment discrimination.
2. Encouraging children to go to pre-school is the wrong way to
improve our educational system.
3. Open source software is better than proprietary software like
Microsoft.
4. The United States should adopt the Kyoto Protocol
immediately.
5. Cigarettes should be illegal.
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Bài 5. Organization within Paragraphs
You have already learned in this chapter that your essay should have
(about) three examples or reasons to support your thesis statement. Each
example or reason should form one paragraph. These paragraphs are
called body paragraphs. It is also important to state clearly how the
example or reason you are describing supports the claim in your thesis
statement. In fact, each body paragraph should contain three things: your
point, the information that makes up your example, and an explanation
of how it supports the thesis.It is convenient to remember this as PIE
(Point/ Information/ Explanation).
Point
The point is the sentence that states the main idea of the paragraph. For
example, Because pit bulls are naturally aggressive, most people
who breed dogs for dogfights breed pit bulls. The point should be the
first sentence in the paragraph.
Information
The information is the supporting evidence for your point. In this case,
you would need to provide evidence that most people who breed
fighting dogs breed pit bulls. You might go on to say that that results in
some extremely aggressive pit bulls and many breeders who should be
shut down anyway.
Explanation
The explanation relates the point back to the thesis statement of the
essay. For example, once you’ve proven that many breeders of pit bulls
are unethical and they produce extremely aggressive dogs, you simply
need to state that both problem would be eliminated by making it illegal
to breed pit bulls.
Use the PIE method to organize each of your body paragraphs in
the next essay.
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Bài 6. Writing a Conclusion
Finally, your essay will need a conclusion. Again, think about a
conversation. Imagine you’ve persuaded them, would you just walk
away? Likely not. You want to leave them with a reminder of why your
idea matters, and what they have gained by reading your essay.
Your conclusion will allow you to open up and discuss the topic more
holistically than you had in your body paragraphs. However, your
conclusion should not
Imagine you are writing a conclusion for our essay about breeding pit
bulls. Cross out the sentences in the list below that would not be
appropriate.
Keep in mind the guidelines you’ve learned in this unit, leave in this
unit, leave yourself enough time to write an excellent conclusion for
your next essay.
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Bài 7. Writing Style: Avoiding Repetition
Before you write the practice essay for this unit, let’s look one way you
can improve your writing skills.In addition to coherent organization, the
test graders will also look at the way you use the English language in
your essay. One way you can improve your writing is to use synonyms
to replace repeated words.
Now, go back and underline the word student(s). How many times does
it appear? Too many! In fact, it appears so many times that knowing
what each group of students is doing can get confusing. Instead of using
the word student(s), try to find synonyms to use. Or else, try to rewrite
the sentences so that you do not use the word student(s).
Rewrite the paragraph in the blank below, using the word student(s)
only two times.
Sample Answer
Last year, several students at the university were awarded scholarships
for academic achievements in math and science. However, some of their
peers were unsatisfied because no one from the humanities majors was
awarded scholarships. Other students felt that those complaints were
unjustified because no one from the humanities had achieved anything
significant. The winners of the scholarships wisely remained silent.
The same idea can help you with your writing. Read over what you have
written after you have finished. If you notice that the same word has
been repeated a lot, try to replace it with words with a similar meaning
or with a pronoun.
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Bài 8. Writing Style: Varying Your Verbs
In addition to coherent organization, the graders will also look at the
way you use the English language in your essay. One way you can make
your language use more sophisticated is to vary the verbs and verb
tenses you use.
6. To describe a past action that occurs even before another action in the
past, you use past perfect tense.
For example: Jerome had already washed his hair when the hot
water ran out.
7. To describe a hypothetical situation, you use the conditional.
For example: Jerome would wash his hair twice a day if he had time.
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Bài 8. Writing Style: Varying Your Verbs
You should remember to use these where appropriate in your essay
rather than simply sticking to the present tense.
Moreover, you should avoid excessive use of the verbs to have and to
be. Review the verb vocabulary in Chapter 1. Try to replace the verbs to
have and to be as often as possible with one of the more precise, more
active verbs. Remember, if you change the verb, you may have to
change the sentence, too.
Let’s practice. The author of the following paragraph has used to have
and to be far too often.
Please read the paragraph below:
Pit bulls are more aggressive than other dogs. There is scientific
evidence that shows pit bulls are more aggressive than other dogs.
Scientists have evidence that say pit bulls are more likely to bite
other dogs than any other breed. And once they bite, they are
more likely to hurt other dogs. Pit bulls have a very strong jaw.
They have fighting personalities. Because pit bulls are very
aggressive, it is fair for it to be illegal to breed them.
Now, go back and underline the verbs have or be. Remember to
distinguish have as a helping verb (as in has washed or had washed)
from have as a main verb. How many times do they appear? Too many!
Replace every example of those verbs with more active and precise
verbs from Chap 1 or from your own English vocabulary. Remember to
reread the entire sentence after you have changed the verb to see if any
other changes need to be made.
Sample Answer
Pit bulls behave more aggressively than other dogs. Scientists
have proven that pit bulls demonstrate more aggressive behaviors
than other dogs. They have documented that pit bulls bite other
dogs than any other breed. And once they bite, they usually hurt
other dogs with their strong jaws. Fighting form an important part
of the breed’s personality. Because pit bulls demonstrate
aggressive behavior, outlawing pit bull breeding would decrease
social problems relates to dog aggression.
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Bài 9. Writing Style: Varying Sentence
Structures
You may have noticed in Unit 9 that using more varied verbs sometimes
means moving the parts of the sentence around. If every sentence has the
same basic structure, your reader will quickly grow bored. In this unit,
you will learn a few ways to break your sentences out of the subject-
verb-object pattern.
2. Now imagine you are writing a sentence that includes because. You
would probably structure it “effect because cause”.
For example:
I didn’t eat the birthday cake because I didn’t like it.
One simple way to give your sentence a slightly different rhythm is to
change the read “because cause, effect”.
3. Now imagine you are writing a sentence that includes but. You
would probably structure it “first idea, but second idea”. One way to
change it is to structure it, “first idea; however, second idea”. Notice the
different punctuation in the two strutures.
Let’s do an example together.
The organization has asked me to interview for the job, but they
also asked my coworker Jonathan.
The organization has asked me to interview for the job; however, they
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Bài 10. PRACTICE
ESSAY 1 : Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan,
write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will
contain a minimum of 300 words.
It’s easy to list the ways computer and technology help us. Are there
ways that they hurt us? Discuss one major negative effect computer
and technology have. Use specific examples and details to support
your answer.
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Bài 10. PRACTICE
ESSAY 4 : Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan,
write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will
contain a minimum of 300 words.
Because of the law of supply and demand, many desirable jobs pay
very little. Which do you think is more important, a job that pays
well or a job doing exactly what you want to do? Use specific
examples and details to support your answer.
Some children grow up with pets and others don’t. Most who grew
up with them continue to have them as adults. Do you think there
are life lessons that children learn through pets that they don’t learn
elsewhere? What are they? Use specific examples and details to
support your answer.
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Bài 10. PRACTICE
ESSAY 7 : Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan,
write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will
contain a minimum of 300 words.
In our modern culture, we have less and less contact with nature. Is
that a problem in and of itself? Why or why not? Use specific
examples and details to support your answer.
In the United States, citizens pay lower taxes and get fewer services
from the government. Europeans pay higher taxes but get more
services (such as health care) from their governments. Which system
do you prefer, and why? Use specific examples and reasons to
support your answer.
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