Advantage Mock Test 4 Paper 3 Detailed Explanations

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Paper 3
Part B1 (easier section)

Task 5 (18 marks)

Task Completion = 16 marks

Note to markers: candidates must place the information in the correct section to be awarded a point.

DF item
reference

5.1 jobs@vsi.com.hk DF2

5.2 Art department TS

5.3 designers with special projects TS

5.4 Helping all teams with photo and video research TS

5.5 self-motivation TS

5.6 work independently (for 25 hours a week) TS

5.7 15 June TS

5.8 6/six weeks TS

5.9 $6,000 TS

5.10 Full-time and permanent DF3

5.11 Building VR apps (from initial concept to final product/start to finish) DF3

5.12 Helping/Assisting the Communications Department (with presentations) DF2/DF3

5.13 good knowledge of the VRML programming language TS/DF3

5.14 Have a minimum of two years’ VR design experience DF3

5.15 Who is the CEO of VirtuoSo Inc.? DF6

5.16 How many people work for VirtuoSo Inc.? DF3

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Task 5: Language = 2 marks

Marks Accuracy

2 • Simple and more complex phrases are generally accurately constructed.

• Generally understandable though there may be some minor errors.
• Most common words are spelt correctly.

1 • Simple phrases are generally accurate.

• Grammatical errors sometimes affect understanding.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not.

0 • Multiple errors throughout, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’, possibly due to the candidate

copying everything verbatim from the Data File.

Language marks will tend to be based on:

• Manipulation of Data File language in Section 5.10–5.14
• The presence or absence of superfluous parts of the Data File in all items

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Task 6 (18 marks)

Task Completion = 9 marks

DF item
reference

Introduction of the topic

6.1a Internships benefit students DF2

6.1b ‘Useless internships’, by Kelly Kwan, published on 21 March DF4

6.1c interns do boring tasks, like answer phones, and do not learn anything useful DF4

Arguments and examples

6.2a interns learn useful skills even when doing boring tasks DF5

6.2b students learn professional phone communication skills answering phones DF5

6.2c interns gain knowledge being in a real-life work environment DF5

6.2d knowledge about certain business terms and practices can only be gained DF5
through first-hand work experience

Closing of the letter

6.3a encourage all students to apply for internships DF2

6.3b Taylor So, CEO, VirtuoSo Inc. DF6

6.3c ceosotaylor@vsi.com.hk DF6

Mark Allocation Grid

Note to markers: The table below indicates the number of marks to be awarded for each section
of the task.
No. of correct Mark to be
Section
points awarded
3 3
2 2
6.1
1 1
0 0
4 4
3 3
6.2 2 2
1 1
0 0
3 2
6.3 1–2 1
0 0

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Task 6: Language = 5 marks
Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences
through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences.
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences.
This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences.
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning.

3 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences, though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her own text.
Own language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use more

complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.

• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning.
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate.

2 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex

sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation most accurate.

1 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty.

0 • Writing characterized by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

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Task 6: Coherence and Organization = 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organization

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

1 • Overall coherence of text good is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.

OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

Task 6: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy

2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and
own language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts
of Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterized by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer’s own text written to fulfil the task.

Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

This is a letter to the editor. The purpose of the letter is to respond to an article about useless
internships. The tone should therefore be formal and persuasive.
Inappropriate material may include:
• Informal opening or closing of the letter
• Irrelevant information quoted from the article or the online forum

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Task 7 (18 marks)
Task Completion = 9 marks
DF item
reference

Introduction and background information

7.1a to summarize temporary office space changes made for the interns and DF7
recommends whether to keep the changes permanently

7.1b interns worked in four departments TS

7.1c total of 20 interns TS

7.1d replace individual walled cubicle desk with shared open worktables DF8

7.1e add a rest space DF8

7.1f add a healthy space DF8

Intern feedback
7.2a 90% of interns were satisfied with the workspace DF9

7.2b 95% of interns preferred open worktables DF9

7.2c 85% would recommend keeping the Rest space DF9

7.2d 92% enjoyed the Healthy space (and found it helpful) DF9

Suggestions for improvement and conclusion

7.3a add standing worktables DF10
7.3b add more natural light with bigger windows DF10

7.3c recommend the office changes be made permanent and improved as suggested DF10

Mark Allocation Grid

Note to markers: The table below indicates the number of marks to be awarded for each section
of the task.
No. of correct Mark to be
Section
points awarded
6 4
5 3
7.1 3–4 2
1–2 1
0 0
4 3
3 2
7.2
1–2 1
0 0
3 2
7.3 1–2 1
0 0

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Task 7: Language = 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences
through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences.
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences.
This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences.
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning.

3 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences, though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her own text.
Own language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use more

complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.

• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning.
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate.

2 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex

sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation most accurate.

1 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty.

0 • Writing characterized by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

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Task 7: Coherence and Organization = 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organization

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

1 • Overall coherence of text good is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.

OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

Task 7: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy

2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and
own language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts
of Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterized by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer’s own text written to fulfil the task.

Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

This is a report on office space changes for office interns. The purpose of the report is to give
feedback on the changes that were made. The tone should therefore be impersonal and
informative.
Inappropriate material may include:
• Informal language
• Irrelevant information quoted from the floor plans, survey results or interview transcript

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Part B2 (more difficult section)
Task 8 (18 marks)
Task Completion = 9 marks
DF item
reference
Introduction
8.1a summary of feedback comments on new app proposal TS
8.1b code name CS—Confident Speaker TS
8.1c helps users prepare for important speaking events TS
8.1d comments provided by Art, Sales and Communications departments DF2/DF3/DF4
Languages
8.2a Chinese, English, French TS
8.2b add Spanish DF3
8.2c remove French DF3/DF4
8.2d Chinese should include Cantonese DF4
VR situations
8.3a interviews, presentations, parties TS
8.3b add speeches DF3/DF4
8.3c remove parties DF4
8.3d Interviews should include group interviews DF3/DF4
Self-help tools
8.4a training videos, voice exercises TS
8.4b add recording tool to allow review of practice sessions DF4
8.4c remove voice exercises DF3

Mark Allocation Grid

Note to markers: The table below indicates the number of marks to be awarded for each section
of the task.
No. of correct Mark to be
Section
points awarded
3–4 2
8.1 1–2 1
0 0
3–4 2
8.2 1–2 1
0 0
3–4 2
8.3 1–2 1
0 0
3 3
2 2
8.4
1 1
0 0

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Task 8: Language = 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences
through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences.
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences.
This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences.
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning.

3 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences, though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her own text.
Own language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use more

complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.

• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning.
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate.

2 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex

sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation most accurate.

1 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty.

0 • Writing characterized by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

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Task 8: Coherence and Organization = 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organization

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

1 • Overall coherence of text good is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.

OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

Task 8: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy

2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and
own language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts
of Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterized by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer’s own text written to fulfil the task.

Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

This is a summary of staff feedback on a new app proposal. The purpose of the summary is to
give staff feedback on an app that helps users prepare for public speaking events. The tone
should therefore be professional.
Inappropriate material may include:
• Informal language
• Irrelevant information quoted from the email, memo or the online chat

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Task 9 (18 marks)
Task Completion = 9 marks

DF item
reference
Introduction of the topic
9.1a JobManners app can help job seekers DF5
9.1b ‘VirtuoSo Inc.’s JobManners app not helpful’, written by Daniel Tam on 15 April DF6
9.1c JobManners app presents common knowledge and is therefore not helpful DF6
9.1d JobManners app teaches users what to do in job-related situations, like interviews DF5/DF6
9.1e it is not common knowledge to know how to act in job-related situations DF5
Arguments and examples
9.2a first-time job seekers, like students, do not have first-hand experience in job- DF5/DF7
related situations
9.2b may not know to send a ‘thank you’ note after interviews DF7
9.2c job seekers from different cultural backgrounds may not be familiar with certain DF5/DF7
job-related situations
9.2d may not know that handshaking is uncommon in some cultures, e.g. in Thailand DF7
Closing of the letter
9.3a encourage job seekers to try the JobManners app DF5
9.3b visit the app's free trial page www.tryJobManners.com.hk DF5
9.3c Jean Wang, Director of App Design, VirtuoSo Inc. DF5
9.3d @VirtuoSoApps DF5

Mark Allocation Grid

Note to markers: The table below indicates the number of marks to be awarded for each section
of the task.
No. of correct Mark to be
Section
points awarded
4–5 3
2–3 2
9.1
1 1
0 0
4 4
3 3
9.2 2 2
1 1
0 0
3–4 2
9.3 1–2 1
0 0

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Task 9: Language = 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences
through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences.
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences.
This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences.
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning.

3 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences, though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her own text.
Own language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use more

complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.

• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning.
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate.

2 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex

sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation most accurate.

1 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty.

0 • Writing characterized by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

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Task 9: Coherence and Organization = 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organization

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

1 • Overall coherence of text good is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.

OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

Task 9: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy

2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and
own language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts
of Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterized by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer’s own text written to fulfil the task.

Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

This is a letter to the editor. The purpose of the letter is to respond to a review of an app. The
tone should therefore be formal and persuasive.
Inappropriate material may include:
• Informal language
• Irrelevant information quoted from the webpage, the comments or the review

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Task 10 (18 marks)
Task Completion = 9 marks
DF item
reference
Introduction and expo information
10.1a to summarize information about the HKVR Expo to help board determine what DF8
booth VSI should rent this year
10.1b 5,000 attendees last year, 6,000 attendees this year DF9
10.1c standard booth size held 20 people maximum last year, 15 maximum this year TS/DF9
10.1d economy booth size holds 5 people maximum, deluxe booth size holds 40 people DF9
maximum this year
10.1e Six apps showcased last year, ten apps this year TS/DF10
Attendee feedback
10.2a 60% were satisfied with their experience at the VSI booth DF11
10.2b 95% agreed there were too many people in the VSI booth DF11
10.2c 80% were unhappy with having to queue for VSI's booth DF11
10.2d 89% agreed interactive displays too close to each other DF11
Suggestions for improvement and conclusion
10.3a decrease number of displays or increase booth size DF11
10.3b offer queue time estimates for the booth DF11
10.3c offer interactive activities for people waiting in queue DF11
10.3d rent the deluxe booth this year because: more attendees are expected/attendees DF8
prefer a larger booth/attendees don't like queuing/VSI has more apps to showcase
this year/attendees who visit booth are more likely to download VSI apps (any two
reasons)

Mark Allocation Grid

Note to markers: The table below indicates the number of marks to be awarded for each section
of the task.
No. of correct Mark to be
Section
points awarded
4–5 3
2–3 2
10.1
1 1
0 0
4 3
3 2
10.2
1–2 1
0 0
3–4 3
2 2
10.3
1 1
0 0

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Task 10: Language = 5 marks

Marks Language

5 Data File Manipulation

Generally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences
through: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with a grasp of simple and complex sentences.
• Grammar mainly accurate with occasional common errors that do not affect overall clarity.
• Spelling and punctuation are mostly correct.

4 Data File Manipulation

Sometimes successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct sentences.
This is done through some of: word formation changes, tense changes, pronoun changes etc.
Own language
• A range of accurate sentence structures with some attempts to use more complex sentences.
• Grammatical errors occur in more complex structures but overall clarity not affected.
• Spelling and punctuation are sufficiently accurate to convey meaning.

3 Data File Manipulation

Occasionally successful in adapting phrases from the Data File to create grammatically correct
sentences, though more often errors occur due to failing to change the original texts to the
requirements of his/her own text.
Own language
• Simple sentences are generally accurately constructed. Occasional attempts are made to use more

complex sentences. Structures used tend to be repetitive in nature.

• Grammatical errors sometimes affect meaning.
• Most common words are spelt correctly, with basic punctuation being accurate.

2 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by occasional attempts to adapt language from Data File or by chunks taken
verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences are generally accurate. Only scattered attempts at longer, more complex

sentences.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation most accurate.

1 Data File Manipulation

Writing characterized by being mostly a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
Own language
• Short simple sentences may be accurate.
• Grammatical errors often affect meaning.
• Spelling of simple words is correct, more complex ones not, with basic punctuation often faulty.

0 • Writing characterized by being a series of chunks taken verbatim from the Data File.
• Multiple errors in sentence structures, spelling and/or word usage which make understanding
impossible.
OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

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Task 10: Coherence and Organization = 2 marks

Marks Coherence and Organization

2 • Overall coherence of text very good with a clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points always clear.
• Strong cohesive ties used to enhance coherence when necessary.

1 • Overall coherence of text good is reasonable with a reasonably clear focus on task throughout.
• Relations between main points and supporting points generally clear.
• Cohesive ties used generally enhance coherence although these may occasionally be fuzzy.

0 • Overall coherence of text is weak.

• Supporting details generally not clearly related to main points.
• Cohesive ties used contribute little to the coherence of the text.

OR
• Not enough evidence in candidate’s work to be able to award ‘1’.

Task 10: Appropriacy = 2 marks

Marks Appropriacy

2 • Register, tone and style generally appropriate through manipulation of parts of Data File and
own language.
• The candidate has produced a text appropriate for task.

1 • Register, tone and style reasonably appropriate to the text through some manipulation of parts
of Data File and through own language.
• Tone may be inconsistent due to parts being copied verbatim from the Data File.

0 • Little or no evidence of an ability to manipulate register, tone or style in order to produce an

appropriate text.
• The candidate has written a text which is characterized by having copied chunks of the Data File
indiscriminately. Does not give the impression of the writer’s own text written to fulfil the task.

Key appropriacy areas include (but are not limited to):

This is a report on an upcoming virtual reality expo providing suggestions about what booth a
company should rent. The tone should therefore be professional and informative.
Inappropriate material may include:
• Informal language
• Irrelevant information quoted from the email, the brochure, the app ranking or the
survey results

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