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The given chart demonstrated
the figure of the US households,
categorized by yearly income in
three years 2007, 2011 and
2015.
It can be seen that across 8
years, household earning less
than $25,000 showed a gradual
increase, followed by a slight
fall. In the contrast, household
with income $75,000-$99,999
witnessed a minimal decline
before rebounding while the
number of household earning
$100,000 or more a year
considerably having the lowest
figure. At the same time,
households with mid-level
income stayed unchanged in
three years.
Regarding to households earning
less than $50,000 in 2007, there
were 25 milion families with
income less than $25,000 then it
sharply rose to roughly 29 milion
families by 2011 and it slightly
dropped in the final year.
Similarly, for household who
made between $25,000 and
$49,999 mirrored this trend, it
was starting at approximately
27 milion, peaking at roughly 30
milion in the middle of the
period then ending at over 28
milion.
Meanwhile, it is clearly that
households with mid-level
income were the only category
that witnessed no changes, with
their figure remained stable at
Bài sửa Bài tham khảo
The given chart demonstrates the The chart depicts US household
figures of the US households, income trends over 2007, 2011,
categorized by yearly income in and 2015.
three years 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Across the 8 years, households
It can be seen that across the with incomes below $50,000
period of eight years, households rose, then fell back slightly,
earning less than $25,000 showed households with incomes of over
a gradual increase, followed by a $75,000 fell slightly then
slight fall. In contrast, households increased and those with the
with income of $75,000-$99,999 mid-level incomes remained the
witnessed a minimal decline before same. (overview ngắn gọn, trình
rebounding, while the number of bày xu hướng chính của chart)
households earning $100,000 or
more a year considerably had the Specifically, in 2007, there were
lowest figure (nhóm này hình như 25 million households earning
phải là highest chứ nhỉ). At the below $25,000; this number
same time, households with mid- climbed to 29 million by 2011
level income stayed unchanged before experiencing a slight drop.
over the three years. The trend for households earning
between $25,000 and $49,999
was similar, starting at 27 million,
peaking at 30 million, and then
Regarding to households earning slightly reducing to just over 28
less than $50,000 in 2007, there million.
were 25 million families with
income less than $25,000; then it Households with mid-level
sharply rose to roughly 29 million incomes exhibited no change,
families by 2011 and it slightly consistently hovering just over 20
dropped in the final year. Similarly, million. For those earning above
households who made between $75,000, nearly 15 million fell
$25,000 and $49,999 mirrored this into the $75,000-$99,999 range
trend, starting at approximately 27 in 2007, with a slight increase by
million, peaking at roughly 30 2015. The most significant
million in the middle of the period, growth was seen in households
then ending at over 28 million. earning over $100,000, rising
from approximately 30 million to
over 33 million, marking the
Meanwhile, it is clear that highest figure in 2015.
households with mid-level income
were the only category that 157 words
witnessed no changes, with their
figure remaining stable at just over
 just over 20 milion throughout. 20 million throughout.

Besides that, families with their
annual income over $75,000
there were nearly 15 million
earning $75,000-$90,000 in
2007 and their number did not
significantly decline in 2011.
However, it climbed to exactly
15 million by 2015. Similar
changes, it can be noticeable
that the figure of households
with income over $100,000
growing just from roughly 30
million to over 33 million by
2015, was the highest figure in
the chart in 2015.
Additionally, for families with their
annual income over $75,000, there
were nearly 15 million earning
$75,000-$99,999 in 2007, and their
number did not significantly
decline in 2011. However, it
climbed to exactly 15 million by
2015. Noticeably, the figure of
households with income over
$100,000 grew just from roughly 30
million to over 33 million by 2015,
which was the highest figure in the
chart in 2015.

259 words, too long, it should be 170-180 words

Task Achievement:
• You have presented an overview with information appropriately selected from the chart.
• To improve, ensure that all key features are highlighted and comparisons are made where relevant.

Coherence and Cohesion:

• The essay structure is clear, and information is arranged logically.
• Enhance cohesion by better organizing the information and using a wider range of cohesive devices.

Lexical Resource:
• There is some variety in vocabulary, but there are also several spelling errors.
• To improve, focus on accurate spelling and try to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends and
comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

• There are numerous grammatical errors that could hinder communication.
• Improve by focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct use of prepositions, and verb tenses.

Overall Score:
Considering the issues mentioned, I would rate the essay around a 5 out of 9. With improvements in the areas
highlighted, particularly in spelling and grammar, you could achieve a higher score.