Carlos Sanchez Literature Review

GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

93
Rubric Breakdown

Controlling idea/purpose: 19

Evidence: 19

/100
Audience Awareness: 18

Genre Competence: 18

Style, Grammar, MLA: 19

Total: 93

Good submission. Your intro and first body

paragraph start the essay off a bit weak but after
that you get more into the groove of what you
should be doing and then you end of with a solid
conclusion.

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Comment 1
in practice versus in theory.
 Comment 2
Be a little bit more specific

Comment 3
However other scholars argue for

Comment 4
I feel like you could've gone into more detail to provide readers with a clearer hint of what
specific issues and conclusions you are going to look over in this paper. You somewhat do this
with your next sentence but I think it actually should've proceeded this highlighted portion
after which you go into more detail talking about some of the findings just to give the readers
a little taste of what's to come.

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with the verb.

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Comment 5
The scholarly research shows that there

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Comment 6
Ok but the focus of the paragraph is not just the differences between the two but rather the
main focus is what you get from this difference (that gun laws are still beneficial) and so that
should be included in the topic sentence. You can keep what you already have but add to it.

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Comment 7
Growing support for gun laws isn't the same as benefits of gun laws

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Comment 8
I think this could've been worded a bit better and been more specific. It seems a bit tagged on
at the end.

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Comment 9
Same comment as the prior topic sentence

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Comment 10
Good example of synthesis

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Comment 11
Better example for topic sentences

Comment 12
This sounds like an incomplete sentence. Here's how you can improve it:

They specifically focus on the less fortunate communities...

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Comment 13
Good!

Comment 14
Excellent conclusion

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Comment 15
Double Spaced?