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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

85
Grade Breakdown:

Controlling Idea/Purpose: 15.8

/100 Evidence: 15.8

Audience Awareness: 17.8

Genre Competency: 16

Style, Grammar, MLA: 20

Total: 85.4 round to 85

This was a very informative submission! While good, It

seems you put a little more focus on summary than
you did on evaluation. There were a good amount of
annotations where I couldn't see how the questions in
the prompt were being answered. On the flip side,
your style was pretty much spot on!

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Comment 1
ok so this is their thesis, right?

Comment 2
 all quotes need to be cited since they aren't your words

Comment 3
Ok but what methods did they use to gather the evidence which backs up their conclusion?

Comment 4
This is a good answer to the last question posed in the prompt!

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Comment 5
Good answer for the first question regarding purpose

Comment 6
Good, you mentioned the methods by which they gathered their evidence

Comment 7
No quotes or paraphrases in this annotation?

Comment 8
Ok but how do you plan to use it in your research?

Comment 9
Is this part of the argument of the source or your own personal opinion? Remember that in
this first part of your annotation you are called to be objective which means saving all
opinions for the end of the annotation where you talk about how the source ties into your
research

Comment 10
Good but how exactly was the study conducted? putting details like this would have helped
your annotations be a bit more specific

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Comment 11
Remember this part is all about how it contributes to YOUR research so the focus should be
on your research as well as on the source itself.

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 Comment 12
But what is her thesis statement? What is her purpose?

Comment 13
Ok so this is the purpose then, right? So that this is more clear it would be good if you used
language to indicate that this is the case such as

The purpose of this article is ....

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Comment 14
You don't seem to answer how this source contributes to your research and how you plan to
use it in your research

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Comment 15
No quotes or paraphrases?

Comment 16
This is informative but what's her purpose? What is her thesis statement?

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Comment 17
What are her methods for gathering this evidence?

Comment 18
This submission is very informative, which is great, however I think there is a lot that's
missing in terms of answers to the questions posed in the prompt. I used the first half of
your submission to point out the places that need more work. These same mistakes are
repeated in the second half of the submission. Because they are the same mistakes, and in
order to get you to apply the examples in the first half to those of the second, I don't go to as
great a length to point out all the mistakes in the second half. If you have any questions feel
free to ask!