Continuous Writing

Write a story ending with...... a narrow escape. I woke up drenched with sweat. I thought I had forgotten all about the terrifying experience I had. After all, it happened five months ago. It was a beautiful Sunday morning. My good friends, Shashi, Florence and I met at the bus station in the morning. Our destination- the Mersing beach. After days of cramming for the examinations, we needed time out. After strolling a short distance, we came to a small, rocky beach. The sea looked very clean. The air was salty and fresh. We sat at a seafront stall and had the most delicious nasi lemak and teh tarik. Next we decided to go for a swim. We walked further towards a rocky area as we wanted to have some privacy. We were very happy. We felt as free as a bird. The beach was surprisingly deserted. It seemed as though we were the first inhabitants on Earth. Florence made a cartwheel and Shashi and I ran about, yelling, This is sheer bliss! I then went about looking for sea shells to add to my collection. Shashi and Florence played by the waters edge. Hey! Dont go too far in. I shouted. Making face at me, they went further into the seas as they played jumping the waves. I could hear them laughing and shouting. Suddenly, I felt a big drop of rain on my cheek. And then another. I turned round to call my friends and saw that they seemed to be having trouble. The drizzle had become a downpour and the sea was a mass of angry surging waves. I began to panic. I screamed, Florence! Shashi! Where are you? Come back! They seemed to have been swallowed up by the roaring sea. I was petrified. Then, I saw a wave throw my friends on to the shore. My heart thundered as I ran towards them. I waded through the water to pull Shashi. She seemed to be unconscious. As I struggled with her, I signed with a relief to see Florence was ahead. We all collapsed on the beach in a heap in the rain. It was a narrow escape. Comments: Good introduction because it makes the reader want to go on reading There is a variety of sentence structures- simple mixed with compound and complex sentences. Vocabulary. A wide range of words used. Eg strolling instead of walking. Use of shouts, yell, scream to convey different meaning. Grammar; There is consistency in grammar. Spelling: Spelling is correct. Some direct speech is used to give variety. Conclusion; Answer to the question is short but effective.

Question: Write a story ending with We were never so frightened in our lives Steps: Understand the topic We were never so frightened in our lives More than one character A very terrifying experience/ incident

Introduction Who? Eg grandparents, five-year-old granddaughter When? After kindergarten Where? Shopping centre What? Going to food court for lunch. Body What was happening Problem 1 Grandfather was late in picking up granddaughter . She was very hungry- lunch hour shopping centre was crowded. Problem 2- Halfway up- little girl fell. How? Lost her balance. Problem 3 Grandfather standing behind her tried to prevent the fall.- lost his balance- rolled down the steps holding onto granddaughter grandmother screamed for help- someone to stop the escalator Conclusion- both victims sent to hospital- minor injuries to little girl Grandfather suffered head and arm injuries. we were never so frightened in our lives