Common mistakes in academic

writing
“Teenagers in the 50´s don’t have to worry about the
struggle of having social media unlike many people in this
generation has suffered from bullying or any kind of
harassment, this is a problem that  we have to faced, also
this generation has the pressure of being a constant
success so many kids have to with lots of homeworks or
having to prepare for exams that will give them a better
future such as IB, because nowadays philosophy is that
the more you are prepared the more opportunities you
would get, and for that reason young people are more
stressed about their future today.”
 Lack of coherence
• (Introductory Paragraph)
• nowadays it is more than evident that the generations of now have many
facilities when comparing them with the others, for example today it is easier
to look for information you just have to have an electronic device and
internet while it is the past you had to go to the library, but these facilities
seem to stress young people

• (Concluding one)
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you can decide if you are going to pay attention to that or not, in the end, you
are the only one who knows who you are so you should not pay attention to
that, hopefully everyone will understand that
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• Young people at this time live more stressed

than a person of old generations, since they
have toface problems that were created by
the need for acceptance of the siciety.
 Lack of evidence
• compare
• Past generations were focused on creating a family. they dreamed about the day they leave their
homes, they didn’t care about school or having a good social life. While this and the future
generations are focused on getting a successful future full of opportunities, happiness and money,
always taking into account  the standards that society has set for them.
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illustrative
• We put too much pressure on us trying to satisfy all those thing that our parents and society expect
from us, for example: the school put high educational levels that will help us to get a better future
but in order to accomplish them we press ourselves till the point to suffer a depression.
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argue
• Society must stop putting high standards to us, pretending that we are achieve them in a really
short time without getting any collateral damage, taking into account that we are giving the best of
us trying to accomplish all those standards, putting our mind or our lives on risk. 
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• In my opinion, I am part of those teenagers that are
always stress because of many things like the social
media, financial problems in our families and more stuff.
As we already know the adolescence is a very difficult
time because of our changes that we are having on our
behavior and bodies. In addition to that the long days of
study and the lot of homeworks. This is something really
sad because adolescence and childhood are one of the
most beautiful times of our lives and now it starts to be
one of the most difficult time for us. And the only way to
change that is going back.