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Writing Clearly and Concisely
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Writing Clearly and Concisely
Study these sentences:
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How to write clearly and concisely
Use familiar words
Use precise vigorous words
Dump trite business phrases
Keep most sentences short and simple and adopt a
conversational style
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How to write clearly and concisely… continued
Use the active voice most of the time
Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced modifiers
Develop parallelism
Begin most paragraphs with topic sentences
Use transitional expressions to build coherence
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How to write clearly and concisely…continued
Kick the noun habit
Remove opening fillers
Eliminate redundancies
Reduce compound prepositions
Purge empty words
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Use familiar words (see also textbook pp 62-63)
Unfamiliar Familiar
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Use precise, vigorous words
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Dump trite business phrases (see also textbook pp
64-65)
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Keep most sentences short and simple and adopt
a conversational style
Our inability to approve We are unable to approve
your application for the your housing loan
housing loan is based on application with the down
insufficient down payment you wish to
payment. We are also make. Also, we are
concerned with the concerned you may have
potential inability to meet problems making the
repayment obligations as monthly payments.
scheduled, due to
inadequate income.
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Use the active voice most of the time
(see also textbook pp 65-66)
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Compare the use of the active and passive verbs
in the following sentences:
Active Voice Passive Voice
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Use active voice most of the time
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Some examples of appropriate use of
passive voice
1. Your order was shipped December 10.
(You want to emphasize the object receiving the action,
not the ‘performer’.)
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Some examples … continued
3. The bank made several risky loans in the early 1990s.
These loans were written off as “uncollectible” in 2000.
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Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced
modifiers
Dangling modifiers
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Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced
modifiers … continued
Examples of dangling modifiers
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Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced
modifiers … continued
Dangling Corrected
1. Working as fast as possible, Working as fast as possible,
the budget soon was ready. the committee soon had the
budget ready.
2. At the age of eight, I began When they were eight, I
teaching my children about began teaching my children
Singapore business. about Singapore business.
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Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced
modifiers … continued
Misplaced modifiers
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Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced
modifiers … continued
Examples of misplaced modifiers
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Avoid dangling modifiers and misplaced
modifiers … continued
Misplaced Corrected
1. Customers who complain Often, customers who
often alert us to changes complain alert us to changes
we need to make. we need to make.
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Develop parallelism (see also textbook pp 138-139, pp
180-181)
Conceptual parallelism
Grammatical parallelism
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Conceptual parallelism
Weak Strong
Analyze the audience Analyze the audience
Identify who they are Ask who they are, what they
Consider what they know know and feel
and feel Examine your assumptions
Examine your assumptions about them
about them
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Grammatical parallelism
Weak Strong
Overall issues and their Consider overall consistency
effects Create a master template
Templates guarantee stylistic Use parallel structure
patterns
Use parallel structure on
individual slides
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Kick the noun habit
Wordy noun phrase Verb
conduct a discussion of discuss
create a reduction in reduce
give consideration to consider
make a payment pay
reach a conclusion conclude
provide assistance assist
is dependent on depends
to be a participant to participate
to show a preference to prefer
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Remove opening fillers
Wordy Improved
There are three things I want I want you to do three things.
you to do.
It is important to start Starting meetings on time is
meetings on time. important.
There are three members of Three members of our staff are
our staff who are making every making every effort to locate
effort to locate your lost order. your lost order.
It is the case that university University graduates advance
graduates advance more more quickly in the company.
quickly in the company.
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Purge empty words
Be alert to these ‘empty’ words:
case, degree, the fact that, factor, instance, nature, quality
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Reduce compound prepositions
Compound preposition Shorter form
at a later date later
at this point in time now
the manner in which how
despite the fact that although
for the amount of for
in order to to
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Eliminate redundancies
exactly identical
true facts
basic fundamentals
assemble together
very unique
positively certain
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References:
Mary E. Guffey, Business Communication: Process &
Product, 2nd Edition
Mary Munter, Guide to Managerial Communication:
Effective Business Writing and Speaking, 9th Edition
Locker/Kaczmarek, Business Communication:
Building Critical Skills, 5th Edition
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