Professional Documents
Culture Documents
• Giving facts
• Brief (or ought to be!)
• Vague
• Doesn’t stir the reader’s emotions
What is Telling?
Examples:
• It was winter.
• Carrie felt angry. So what?
• David was upset.
• She felt embarrassed.
What is Showing?
• Past
• Future (often used when making a decision)
• Internal Dialogue
Thoughtshots
• Sight We walked out and stood on bright green grass highlighted by the strong
stadium lights. I could feel the excitement of the crowd. To our left, the
• Hearing fans were chanting, “"We love ya, we love ya, we love ya!”. They
• Taste created tiny clouds of vapor as they exhaled, but they didn’t seem to
mind the chill in the air. We knew their energy and enthusiasm was
• Touch going to keep us warm.
• Smell
Exploding Moment
• I watched myself begin this horrible deed. My hand seemed to suddenly have a
will of its own. I picked up the milk carton. The spout was already open. My arm
extended over Carol’s head, tipping the carton. The liquid poured in a slow,
steady thick unending stream down through her long blonde hair, soaking the
back of her clothes and running onto the floor. As the milk reached the floor, I
shifted the spout slightly to begin another long milk journey down the front of
her. It poured over her forehead, in the eyes, running in rivers down each side of
her nose, converging on the chin and splashing into her plate. Her food was soon
awash and the milk poured over the edge and ran into her lap. And still I poured
on—it was too late to stop now. The rapture of it all. Oh, sweet revenge.
• Senses (V)
• Onomatopoeia (bang)
• Alliteration (the rabbit raced rapidly)
• Personification (the wind howled)
• Adjectives and Adverbs (slowly, she crept)
• Imagery (the pitter patter of the vile rain)
• Metaphor (my brother is a pig)
• Simile (her temper was like a volcano)