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VerNia Barber Professor Kate Kimball ENC1101 1:05 3 December 2013 Essay #3 Revision

Global: 1. Supporting Details- In this revised version of my essay I added more details on ethos, pathos, and logos so my essay can flow better. 2. Organization- My paper was already organized but I modified it by putting it in three different categories which were ethos, pathos, and logos.

Local: 1. Title- I changed my title to where it was intriguing to the reader. It also makes the reader interested and curious to what the essay is going to be about. 2. Topic Sentences- After reading the comments from the professor I rewrote my topic sentences to make better transitions into the paragraphs.

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VerNia Barber Professor Kate Kimball ENC1101 1:05 10 November 2013 Can Love Really Be Found?

The movie Baggage Claim is about a thirty year old woman named Montana Moore. She is in search to find a fianc before her younger sisters wedding, which is in thirty days. All her life she has been handed the bad end of the stick when it comes to relationships. To keep her family from looking down on her, Montana needs to find a man. With the help of her friends and colleagues that work with her in a major airline agency, she tracks different men she has had various encounters with. These men happen to be her ex-boyfriends. Montana is really in a race for time but all along Mr. Right is right in her face. In Baggage Claim, ethos, pathos, and logos are used to show images of the lack of finding love in our society for African American women that are in their thirties and successfully employed. Ethos is used to show that in our world today it is typical for women to get married and have children from the ages of twenty-five and twenty-seven. When this does not automatically happen some women are in a race for time to find love. The sense of being desperate comes into play. It generally gets harder because of the lack of trust that is in relationships. Too many games are being played by the male and the female wants to settle down, get married and have children before it is biologically impossible. In this movie ethos is used by the main actress and her fellow mates. Montana Moore portrays a young lady that is in desperate need to find love. She makes you want to believe and have compassion on her in this time. Her character acts as if she is

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hopeless and she is going to be lost if she cant find a man in a particular time frame. In this instance ethos was used by Montana Moore to show how it is in the world today. In a particular scene in the movie, Montana went out for a night on the town with an ex-boyfriend. She thought he changed and was now the man that she has been waiting for. Ms. Moore was let down once again by the young man. He lied to her about shacking up with other females and too many games were involved in their relationship. There is a lack of love distributed and she is a true testament of that or so she thinks. I trust Montanas character because she wears her heart on her shoulders and you can tell she is real. The emotion that she exuberates is phenomenal. Just like Montana, women want people to have compassion or pity on them because of their misfortunes. Finding love for a woman who is really successful often times more successful than her counterparts is challenging. The guy does not want the woman to be more successful than he is. So much emotion is associated with this. The response to this is a feeling of want. The female thinks well if he actually loves me then he will be with me no matter how much money I make. All the external and physical things are put aside for the wants of the heart. Also stating out loud what kind of relationship helps in this situation. Once some women find a man they are not happy because they have no voice. The man makes all the decisions and the woman can never state how she is feeling. There are women who are in relationships that just do whatever the man says, it is almost like she is his puppet. Deep down inside anger builds because she does not get a chance to release all that she has in her. In Baggage Claim, Montana is rekindling an old flame. The reason she got out of the relationship the first time is because she lost a sense of voice. Every time she tried to give ideas they were shot down by her boyfriend. Since she is back for a second time she plans to change that. Well it did not work. She feels like she is being used for her good looks but not as an intelligent woman who is successful in what she does. The

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pathos is carried out to the viewers. We began to feel sorry for the character because we feel her pain through the emotion she is demonstrating. There is pathos to the unbearable misfortunes that left the airlines flight attendant, Montana Moore sad and torn inside. As for many women in our society, they are afraid of being let down. They cannot bare the hurt and pain that relationships bring of sadness or feeling down. Logically one would think it is impossible to find love in your thirties but it is worth a try. There is someone out there for everyone. Just a little determination will help you find the right one. In all actuality it is not as hard as one may think to find love once you hit the thirties age bracket. The reasons may be different so more consideration has to be taken in account. When women are in their twenties they leisurely date, but once they age more all the games stop and relationships get more serious. Efforts need to be increased on trying to find the right one to settle down with and have children. Some say, Its so hard to find a man, Im going to be single for the rest of my life. Thats the wrong answer, finding a man is not as hard as it may seem, there are many options available. There is online dating, speed dating, going to social events, or even asking a friend or family member to introduce you to some nice gentlemen. All hope is not lost. In this scenario, logos is used because logically women are persuaded that after a certain age their life is over. No husband and no kids, that is not right. There is hope. In the end Montana Moore found that Mr. Right. He was there all along. This guys name was William Wright. He was her best friend since grade school and next door neighbor. All she had to do was open her eyes and see that he truly loved her and wanted to treat her like a queen. Just like many women out there, a man is staring you in your face and you are putting a blind eye to him. Again it all goes to say all hope is not lost. The guy that is actually the right one may not put himself out there like that because he is waiting on the woman to claim him and say what she

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wants. In the movie, ethos and pathos was used tremendously between the relationship of Montana and William. All the qualities that she wanted in a man was in him. I guess Montana was wrong; it is possible to find a guy in thirty days especially if he is right in front of you. All you have to do is open your eyes. Now that we have looked on how challenging it is to find love for African American women who are in their thirties and successfully employed, is it actually a challenge or are women being picky to what they want.